Ghostly Guest
He hogs the remote!38 total reviews
Comment from RoostyNester
What a cute and intriguing ghost poem. What a clever idea, creating a poem around the remote shifting channels. I believe we have all had a thought like that, when something strange happens out of the ordinary. I loved your poem. It was funny and showed great imagery. The picture you chose added to the message in your poem. Very well done.
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2016
What a cute and intriguing ghost poem. What a clever idea, creating a poem around the remote shifting channels. I believe we have all had a thought like that, when something strange happens out of the ordinary. I loved your poem. It was funny and showed great imagery. The picture you chose added to the message in your poem. Very well done.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2016
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Wow, thanks for the six! I'm sure it was just a glitch in an old TV, but it was a little weird and great inspiration. I'm so glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
My cat will suddenly sit up and stare at nothing, I often wonder if she 'sees' someone there. Lovely spooky poem, Cindy, and so long as she only wants to keep warm, lol, I think you should keep her. Perhaps you could gently mention the cost of heating? :) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2016
My cat will suddenly sit up and stare at nothing, I often wonder if she 'sees' someone there. Lovely spooky poem, Cindy, and so long as she only wants to keep warm, lol, I think you should keep her. Perhaps you could gently mention the cost of heating? :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 05-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2016
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Thanks. I think animals do see things we don't. Perhaps I could use him as an air conditioner in summer to make up for the heat. LOL
Comment from Pantygynt
There is a good story underpinning this poem. The bulk of this is written in catalectic trochaic tetrameter (the seven syllable lines that start on a stressed syllable) with a few lines of iambic tetrameter (the eight syllable lines that start on an unstressed syllable). The mixture of these two rhythms is quite acceptable and the intelligent reader can adapt without trouble. There are, however, some six syllable lines and these are much more difficult to cope with, as they break up the established rhythm.
Here now are the six syllable lines with my suggestions in () for rectifying them.
"Channels chang(ing)on their own"
"Cats (are) chasing orbs of light"
Those two now join the trochaic tetrameters
"He never (ever) makes a stink"
This feels like it wants to be an iambic line so I have added two syllables
"Hire ghostbusters today"
If you pronounce "hire" as a two syllable word there is no need to do anything as the line would be a trochaic tetrameter. If you pronounce it as a single syllable however I suggest you turn it into "Hiring" to make it trochaic with seven syllables.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2016
There is a good story underpinning this poem. The bulk of this is written in catalectic trochaic tetrameter (the seven syllable lines that start on a stressed syllable) with a few lines of iambic tetrameter (the eight syllable lines that start on an unstressed syllable). The mixture of these two rhythms is quite acceptable and the intelligent reader can adapt without trouble. There are, however, some six syllable lines and these are much more difficult to cope with, as they break up the established rhythm.
Here now are the six syllable lines with my suggestions in () for rectifying them.
"Channels chang(ing)on their own"
"Cats (are) chasing orbs of light"
Those two now join the trochaic tetrameters
"He never (ever) makes a stink"
This feels like it wants to be an iambic line so I have added two syllables
"Hire ghostbusters today"
If you pronounce "hire" as a two syllable word there is no need to do anything as the line would be a trochaic tetrameter. If you pronounce it as a single syllable however I suggest you turn it into "Hiring" to make it trochaic with seven syllables.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2016
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Thanks. I'll have to take another look at those lines. Glad you liked it.
Comment from Franklin Price
I really liked this haunting poetry. It had such imagination while including the things that prompted the writing. I got a real laugh out of this. Don't call Ghost busters. Maybe your ghost will inspire another great poem when the dishes and floors are inexplicably done. I gave this a well deserved five.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2016
I really liked this haunting poetry. It had such imagination while including the things that prompted the writing. I got a real laugh out of this. Don't call Ghost busters. Maybe your ghost will inspire another great poem when the dishes and floors are inexplicably done. I gave this a well deserved five.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2016
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Thanks. If he does that, I won't even charge him rent. Glad ypu enjoyed my fun little poem.
Comment from Bill O'Bier
A fun piece. Seems like creative free floating thoughts got captured on paper. Thanks for a delightful poem. Keep writing
Bill
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2016
A fun piece. Seems like creative free floating thoughts got captured on paper. Thanks for a delightful poem. Keep writing
Bill
Comment Written 05-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2016
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Thanks. I'm so glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from robina1978
Excellent picture that complements your poem perfectly. TV channels changing, you thought the cats, but no. Then it must be ghosts, you decide they can stay as they don't cause trouble. But if they cost you money, you will charge rent-this was the funniest bit.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2016
Excellent picture that complements your poem perfectly. TV channels changing, you thought the cats, but no. Then it must be ghosts, you decide they can stay as they don't cause trouble. But if they cost you money, you will charge rent-this was the funniest bit.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2016
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Thanks. Chances are I need a new TV, not Ghostbusters. But it was a fun poem to write. Glad you enjoyed.
Comment from William Ross
A ghost changing channels on you, never know, i'd be careful they feed off your energy, most are harmless, some not. good rhyming with a good meter, thanks for the share and have a good day
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2016
A ghost changing channels on you, never know, i'd be careful they feed off your energy, most are harmless, some not. good rhyming with a good meter, thanks for the share and have a good day
Comment Written 05-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2016
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Thanks. Of course, it could just be a wonky TV. It's old. But you never know... Thanks again for the review and the stars.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem. It is a good reason to wonder if their might be a ghost present when strange things happen and their is no logical explanation.
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2016
A very well-written poem. It is a good reason to wonder if their might be a ghost present when strange things happen and their is no logical explanation.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2016
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Thanks. Of course, there probably is a logical explanation. The TV is wonky. It's old. But the ghost theory was so much more fun. A glitch in the electronics would make for pretty dull reading. Thanks again for the review and the stars.
Comment from Jackarrie
Hi,
a lovely poem you have turned out from having problems with your TV channels. So imaginative, I enjoyed reading it, the artwork is so apt.
Well done
Mary
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2016
Hi,
a lovely poem you have turned out from having problems with your TV channels. So imaginative, I enjoyed reading it, the artwork is so apt.
Well done
Mary
Comment Written 05-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2016
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Thanks. I'm sure it's just a glitch in the TV, but a ghost is so much more interesting. Glad you enjoyed.
Comment from DR DIP
A quirky little ditty. Oh the unexplained. Everyone must experience these phenomenons in their lives at one stage or another. THE GHOST OF CHRISTMAS PAST
dip
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2016
A quirky little ditty. Oh the unexplained. Everyone must experience these phenomenons in their lives at one stage or another. THE GHOST OF CHRISTMAS PAST
dip
Comment Written 05-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2016
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Thanks. Glad you enjoyed.