Comment from Thomas Bowling

Poor

Makes me want to stay away from pie. Not good. I've read some of your other stuff, much better. i would stick with that.

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 Comment Written 03-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Aug-2016

How about you just don't read anymore of my work since you don't seem to like it, don't understand anything about it, and are just wanting to be an ass!!!!!!!!!

Comment from TAB_that's me

Excellent

A little creepy. I don't think I'll be eating any pie for awhile:)

Perfect syllable count and does have to do with air.

Good luck in the contest.

Teresa

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Aug-2016

Thank you so much, Teresa, for taking time to read my poem. I tried to steal a laugh, and almost made myself sick. Your kind words and generous review are greatly appreciated. :-)

Comment from John Parkin

Excellent

You must have a weird sense of humor to come up with such a great description when someone swallows a fly. I loved the way you tied in the great looking pie and instantly changed to a bug guts pie. All the while tieing into the theme of air. great work.

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Aug-2016

Yes, John, some times I amaze myself at how nuts I can be. LOL! Thank you so much for taking time to read my poem. Your kind comments and generous review are greatly appreciated. I started off trying to steal a laugh, and almost made myself sick. This is a fantastic review, one of the few, believe or not, that picked up on the ties between the poem, the title, and the picture. Something I always try to do to add some sort of substance to these not very poetic or interesting forms. Which your catching them tells me, you might have somewhat of a crazy sense of humor, too. I appreciate you!

Comment from Kooky Clown

Excellent

I liked the picture you used and it had the desired effect it made me open up the page to review your poem. I do not like three line works normally but yours made me smile hence the rating and review.

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Aug-2016

Yes, I know what you mean, this can't hardly even be considered poetry, the reason I prefer to park the serious and use the humor. I wanted to steal a laugh, and almost made myself sick. LOL! Thank you so much for taking time to read my poem. Your kind words and generous review are greatly appreciated. :-)

Comment from nomi338

Excellent

Ugh! Thanks a lot for turning me off my favorite dessert. I love pie, but for as long as the memory of this poem lasts with me I will be turning my nose up at every pie I see for awhile.

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Aug-2016

LOL! I'm sorry! Actually, as you can tell, I wrote this trying to steal a laugh, and ended up almost making myself sick. Literally gagging at one point. Thank you so much, Nomi338, for taking time to read my poem. Your kind words and generous review are greatly appreciated. :-)

Comment from Ulla

Excellent

Hi Ric, that's what I call tough luck. Such a lovely pie. It's easy done to eat a fly. It's happened to me once. Yikes. Funny we poem this. All the best. Ulla:))

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Aug-2016

Thank you so much, Ulla, for taking time to read my poem. Your kind words and generous review are greatly appreciated. :-)

Comment from kriver

Excellent

Hi Ric,
I thought your poem was funny.
A little ole fly won't kill you just some
unwanted added protein is all.
Good luck in the contest.
Best regards,
K River

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Aug-2016

LOL! Yeah, I guess you're right, just a little more protein. Thank you so much, K, for taking time to read my poem. Your kind words and generous review are greatly appreciated. I tried to steal a laugh, and almost made myself sick. :-)

Comment from Nika2016

Excellent

Nice pie and the fly poem. My brother ate a fly for a burrito in high school...a dare...
Nice little short poem...
What else can be said about a 3-5-3
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 Comment Written 03-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Aug-2016

Yes, Nika, these are little, short poems, if they are really even poems. LOL! Thank you so much for taking time to read my poem. Your kind words and generous review are greatly appreciated. I tried to steal a laugh, and almost made myself sick. :-)

Comment from Pyrrho

Excellent

I have no idea what meaning you associate with your last line, and I would move on without writing a review if I had not spent so much time trying to find a meaning for it. Take a fiver, but I do not know if you deserve it.

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Aug-2016

What the last line is saying is, since the pie is untouched, that the fly I just swallowed is my pie, bug guts pie. It stole my appetite. Thank you so much for taking time to read my poem. Your kind words, comments, and generous review are greatly appreciated. I tried to steal a laugh, and almost made myself sick. :-)

Comment from GWHARGIS

Exceptional

A very humorous poem. It was easy to visualize this happening. The thought of eating the fly was at odds with the photograph of the delicious pie. Great 3/5/3. Good luck in the contest. Gretchen

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 02-Aug-2016

Thank you so much, GWHARGIS, for taking time to read my poem. Your kind words and generous review are greatly appreciated. I tried to steal a laugh, and almost made myself sick. :-)