Comment from Delahay

Excellent

I have to wonder. If this was your #984567 from your catalog of your most embarrassing moment, then you have had a lot of embarrassing times. I had trouble reading this though because I had to slide the page from side to side. This is the first time I have seen a story laid out like that.

 Comment Written 29-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Jul-2016

Thank you for your review and rating.

I'm not sure what you mean about the reading challenge, was this on phone screen or pc? It is right left alignment but is presenting fine on my view.

Yes, I've had a few too many embarrassing moments. 😃

reply by Delahay on 29-Jul-2016

I'm reading in my computer but I had to scroll from side to side to read. I have not seen that before. I don't understand why it happened this time.

Comment from Bill O'Bier

Excellent

A delightful and funny story. You've written a wonderful piece. Thanks so much for sharing. Liked the artwork too.

Wishing you the best--
Bill~

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2016

Thank you, Bill, for your wonderful review. It is always a plus for me to get a man's reaction to a story. Have a great evening!

Comment from Spiritual Echo

Exceptional

So a mother of four uses the F word, huh? How disgusting! LOL. Personally, I prefer to use the PH word, adding sophistication to my regular commands to tell people to phuck off.

I've had the experience, but my drawers came wiggling out of my jeans as I was walking across the grocery store parking lot.

You are an extremely good writer and I hesitate to even mention the 2 spots I noticed that could use punctuation, but see below. I am the forever-challenged comma queen, so it's almost funny that I noticed.

I will say, though not a complaint about actual word count, I think you could tighten this up, likely taking out a good 20% as some of the asides take us away from the main event. It dilutes with so much warning. Specifically, the rather lengthy explanation about things as footwear, in my opinion only, goes on a little too long.

Great story and good entertainment. Your writing is excellent. Kudos.


pleather-wrapped--needs hyphen

When that occurs(,) as it...

The DATE was--if you use year, you should not mention the month and day

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2016

Thank you, spiritual echo, for your OUTSTANDING review and the fabulous SIX! Those are eye candy to every FS writer.

I appreciate and have corrected the editing notes you found...thank you so much! Always amazed at what I miss.

I understand exactly what you are saying about condensing it. I do tend to get a little wordy.

Thank you so much for a tremendously helpful review.

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Hello,
I like your story very much, great character development and plot, like this one......"Strap yourself in. I am about to share #984567 from a catalog of my most embarrassing moments. It began with the suggestion from my daughter for a shared pedicure experience. It was going great until I noticed my day old panties in a wad on the floor of the salon, next to my shoes. Yes, you read that correctly. Before I get into the details of the "outing" of my underoo's, I feel compelled to offer background into the evolution of the word 'thong'." ......
...... Awesome!

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2016

Thank you, gypsy blue rose, for your RR&R, and highlighting your favorite passages. I very much appreciate you hanging in for the longer read...a FS rarity!

Comment from MelB

Exceptional

ZsaZsa Gabor's extravagant lifestyle on the Green Acres sitcom.. - extra punctuation

You have taken an embarrassing moment and made it into a comical routine. I think you could honestly do stand-up comedy! You had me laughing all the way through. I have a feeling this will be told at every family gathering for quite some time! Well done and I enjoyed reading.

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2016

Melissa, thank you so much for your RR&R, and for the catch! I have made the correction. I loved reading your review...stand up comedy...I could never pull it off! I write better than I speak ☺

Thank you fir the FABULOUS SIX too! Those are eye candy to me! Have a great evening!

reply by MelB on 28-Jul-2016

You're welcome:) Hope you have a great day/night too!

Comment from Poetic Friend

Excellent

This is a hilarious story. I am still laughing although I can why you would have been embarrassed. Poor thing!

Great plots and character development.

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2016

Thank you, Poetic Friend, for your RR&R of this lengthy piece! I appreciate you! Have a wonderful evening!

Comment from Tpa

Excellent

A delightful and flawless text. I'm sure out there in t.v. land, there is a reality waiting for you. You are witty and your article is very entertaining. After that funny but embarrassing moment, you must have bought a home pedicure set.

 Comment Written 27-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 27-Jul-2016

Thank you so much, Tpa, for your RR&R! I very much aporeciate you hanging in for a longer read and found it appealing to your funny bone ;) Appreciate the five stars :)

Comment from damommy

Exceptional

I'll review this once I stop laughing so hard. Oh, wait. I'm okay. No, I'm not. LOL LOL LOL

This is one of the funniest things I've read in a long time. It sounds like something that would happen to me. I'm the Queen of Mishaps.

At first, I thought you were in the chair bare bottomed, but then I figured out what happened. Hilarious! 8-)

 Comment Written 27-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 27-Jul-2016

😂 Thank you so much for the awesome RR&R, and for the fabulous SIX that lit up my screen! True story, all of it. My daughter has never asked me to go for a pedi since...not that I would even consider it!!! Thank so much, damonmy! XO

Comment from Phyllis Stewart

Excellent

I thoroughly enjoyed this piece of your life. We all have those embarrassing moments, but I gott say you have me beat by a mile. LOL! Next time, plan ahead, or don't go wherever/whenever for whatever. :)

 Comment Written 27-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 27-Jul-2016

Hi Phyllis, thank you very much the RR&R! Sometimes I feel it is like pulling teeth or breaking the bank to get reviews on prose here. I'm glad to hear you enjoyed my nightmare! Have a great evening!

reply by Phyllis Stewart on 27-Jul-2016

Prose is all I read, unless one of my fans writes poetry. Most of it is the same old thing.. borrring. Give me a story any day. I have on up in the top 12 now worth 1.05 if you are interested in a short flash fiction: I Loved Her Too. :)

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

This is very well written with a humorous overtone, making for a riotous read. There is good imagery and descriptive scheme. Very good job.

 Comment Written 27-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 27-Jul-2016

Thank you, c_lucas, for your great review and rating. It's like pulling teeth to get reviewers on prose, so I very much appreciate your interest. Thank you!