Comment from Ric Myworld

Excellent

Thank you so much for the pleasure of reading your fun and entertaining story, although, I'm sure I'll never see the color green in the same way. Quick, witty, and funny, with a few of your memories that I'm sure I'll struggle to forget. Wish I had a six. Great job. :-)

 Comment Written 28-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016

Thank you so very much for your RR&R, I so appreciate those who take the time to read a longer read, because that's all I tend to write (I'm not a poet and I know it...), so thank you that commitment :) I read your review on my phone while tending to my two year old grandchild and awaiting AAA to get my locked car open, and your review and imaginary six made my dad that much better :)

Comment from shafra

Excellent

This was a blast to read! I love the combination of wit and detail in your writing; I feel like I am part of the story. Very clever and a joy to read.

 Comment Written 28-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016

Ha, awesome! You were able to review it! Thank you, Sharon! It ended up revised from the first draft you read, but I am so happy you enjoyed it, and even happier you can comment on the site. ;)

Comment from candyfink

Excellent

I thought this was well written and I can relate to this story. I had dating disasters before when i was younger. I think that that is common for young people.

 Comment Written 28-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016

Thank you very much, Candy! I appreciate your RR&R very much!

Comment from Jay Squires

Excellent

Mary Wakeford, how did I ever miss reading your electric-humor prose? Well, I did check your profile and found you've only been here a couple of months.

you machine-gun humor like the gang-bangers on Saturday night. I have a hunch you have a touch of stand up in your personal history. If I'm wrong on that, I'm still holding out for the near future.

Good luck, dear Mary on the contest.

 Comment Written 28-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016

Ah thank you, Jay, for your review and very awesome comments. I just received word that I received second place in the contest of two...you do the math!! This puts me 5 for 5, dead last! No more contests for MarMar. FanStory contests are in my rear view mirror :)

Seriously though, I very much appreciate your RR&R, and especially on a longer read. I'm finding reviewers on the longer reads like me about as much as contests don't. Hahaha!

Comment from Kassa-Leigh

Excellent

Oh my goodness! What a disaster! I'm glad you said no to a second date! Good luck in the contest!
Cheryl-Lynette

 Comment Written 28-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016

Haha, thank you, Cheryl :) It was definitely not a romance written in the stars :) I very much appreciate your RR&R and committing to a longer read. Have an excellent evening!

Comment from LisaD123

Excellent

This is an entertaining and well-written tale and the self-deprecating tone hooks the reader. The description is carefully crafted and the reader can visualise the awkwardness of the characters and everyone can relate to the behaviour of the parents. I agree that we Irish hold grudges that are imprinted in our D.N.A! Thanks for sharing and good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 27-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016

Thank you very much, Lisa, for your review, rating and read, especially for the commitment to a longer read. I am finding it is hard to find many who will, so thank you for that alone. I appreciate your kind comments and critique of my work very much. Have a great evening.

reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016

Thank you very much, Lisa, for your review, rating and read, especially for the commitment to a longer read. I am finding it is hard to find many who will, so thank you for that alone. I appreciate your kind comments and critique of my work very much. Have a great evening.

Comment from A.R. Curry

Excellent

Lol interesting. You have an amusing writing voice (which I find exhilarating). This was refreshingly well-Written for he most part, though I find the name Brunhilda revolting lol. Again, good job. Keep up the hard work.

 Comment Written 27-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016

Thank you very much for your review, rating and read, especially for the commitment to a longer read. I am finding it is hard to find many who will, so thank you for that alone. I appreciate your kind comments and critique of my work very much. Brunhilda was a warrior queen; brunni + hild which mean armour, protection + battle, fight respectively. I couldn't resist!

Have a great evening and thank you again!

reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016

Thank you very much for your review, rating and read, especially for the commitment to a longer read. I am finding it is hard to find many who will, so thank you for that alone. I appreciate your kind comments and critique of my work very much. Brunhilda was a warrior queen; brunni + hild which mean armour, protection + battle, fight respectively. I couldn't resist!

Have a great evening and thank you again!

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

One must overcome the mistake and live for another day. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a good read. There is good imagery.

 Comment Written 27-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016

Thank you very much c lucas, for your review, rating and read, especially for the commitment to a longer read. I am finding it is hard to find many who will, so thank you for that alone. I appreciate your kind comments and critique of my work very much. Have a great evening.

reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016

Thank you very much c lucas, for your review, rating and read, especially for the commitment to a longer read. I am finding it is hard to find many who will, so thank you for that alone. I appreciate your kind comments and critique of my work very much. Have a great evening.

Comment from djeckert

Excellent

I loved the tone and the humor. Very well done. I also liked all of tge recurring little themes that gave it a nice consistency. the references to brumi funny too. All in all a joy to read. A great tallent you have , for sure. if I had a,six left I would give it here. God Blesses you.

 Comment Written 27-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016

Thank you, so very much for your RR&R, and the 'virtual' six. I appreciate you taking the time to read a longer submission too!
I appreciate your compliments more than you know. Have a wonderful evening!

Comment from TAB_that's me

Excellent

I love your opening! It was memorial for sure - probably the last one though.

I like the neighborhood party lines - I remember them.

Your story is interesting though a bit long.

Good luck in the contest.

Teresa

 Comment Written 27-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016

Yes, it was the last one, but we are friends today so that is even better! Thank you for hanging in for the longer read, I appreciate your review and your rating, Teresa. Have a great day!