Comment from Dorothy Farrell

Excellent

A very nice Nature 5/7/5 haiku - nature indicated in your first line. Lines l and 2 interconnect perfectly and your third line is a good satori. Good luck in the contest. Lovely picture. Regards Dorothy x

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 04-Jan-2016

Thank you Dorothy.

Comment from Louise Michelle

Excellent

It's always hard for me to comment on these short, shorts, but you did a good job with the few words you selected. The image is very calming and you paired it with just the right words. Hugs, lou

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 04-Jan-2016

Thank you for your kind comments, Lou.

Comment from hari anand

Excellent

I like the satori line of stimulating calm, very innovative, and a good entry to nature haiku, picture too gives asoothing effect. beat of luck

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 04-Jan-2016

Thank you for your comments.

Comment from ExperiencingLiphe

Excellent

We almost went to Cancun for our honeymoon this year but we had to buy a car so that put it on hold. My husband said he was going to surprise me next year but something else came up so it's on hold again. Maybe one day I'll get to experience it but until then I'll read your words and try to imagine myself there. Great job

 Comment Written 03-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Jan-2016

Thank you so much for your kind comments. Exactly what I was going for.

Comment from Pantygynt

Excellent

Stimulating calm is as fine a satori line as you can get unless you discount it completely as an oxymoron. Yes I know it's only a 5-7-5 and not a proper haiku and sometimes the present participle is ruled out - I often wonder on what oriental authority. But I just love the idea of stimulating calm.

 Comment Written 03-Jan-2016

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Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

This 5-7-5 about nature, Warm Waters, creates a nice visual with the water color and sensation of its movement. I'm not sure if you intended the oxymoron in your final line, but it works well. Happy day.

 Comment Written 03-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Jan-2016

Thank you for your comments, Bill. All help is appreciated.

Comment from RodG

Excellent

Ah, yes, warm tropical waters would indeed be both stimulating and calming this time of year.
Choice of Aquamarine" makes it easy to visualize these waters. Also, such water color is found in few places.
I especially like the oxymoron you used as your "ah ha" statement in line 3.

 Comment Written 03-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Jan-2016

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Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

You have most successfully delivered us not only a paradox but also an oxymoron.

Stimulating calm. Indeed it's with the wave and troughs that we experience all the beauty of life.

Best wishes to you in the contest.

Gloria

 Comment Written 03-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Jan-2016

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Comment from mermaids

Excellent

Love your words, they appeal to the senses. Today is a cold day and the feel of warm water is a good feeling. Excellent use of words and haiku form that creates a feel for nature.

 Comment Written 03-Jan-2016

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Comment from nancyrabbrose

Excellent

Your poem made me think of the time I was able to float in the Carribean Sea. The colors and the warm feeling of your poem are good.
Well done.

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 Comment Written 03-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Jan-2016

Thank you Nancy. I appreciate your comments. Snow covering the ground here and warm thoughts are needed. :)