A Tufted Bed
First chapter in the book, Shifting Shadows...111 total reviews
Comment from M. Clynnton Kinney
"...terror whitewashed tiny faces." Great line! Artwork is outstanding, too! love the way the rain is falling over graveyard in final picture.
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"...terror whitewashed tiny faces." Great line! Artwork is outstanding, too! love the way the rain is falling over graveyard in final picture.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2015
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Thank you for taking an interest in my work, M. Clynnton Kinney. I sincerely appreciate that.
I'm very pleased you enjoyed the poem itself, as well as the overall presentation. My work is frequently rather showy in that regard.
Again, thanks so much for your valuable time and readership. I'm very grateful to you for your feedback.
Always with respect
~Dean Kuch
Comment from The Mom/DarleneThomson
Dear Mr. Kuch,
I look forward to reading all of this book. I don't generally write dark poetry, but I do like to read it sometimes. When I have the nerve. Your absolutely correct if we do not pass on our thoughts they do go to the grave with us. Tufted beds is a poem that I thoroughly enjoyed. I thank you for sharing it.
Many Blessings,
Darlene
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2015
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Dear Mr. Kuch,
I look forward to reading all of this book. I don't generally write dark poetry, but I do like to read it sometimes. When I have the nerve. Your absolutely correct if we do not pass on our thoughts they do go to the grave with us. Tufted beds is a poem that I thoroughly enjoyed. I thank you for sharing it.
Many Blessings,
Darlene
Comment Written 27-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2015
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I thank you very much for taking the time to read and offer your comments on the poem, Darlene. I'm truly grateful for your thoughtful review.
Always with respect
~Dean
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
What a great idea, Dean. I like this one a lot because in the realms of dark poetry this one has some unusual sentiments that one would not expect to find. I liked the choice of music, Giddy
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What a great idea, Dean. I like this one a lot because in the realms of dark poetry this one has some unusual sentiments that one would not expect to find. I liked the choice of music, Giddy
Comment Written 27-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2015
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Thanks for the read and kind comments, Giddy. I deeply appreciate it!
Always with respect
~Dean
Comment from ravenblack
Castigation, bloody pages- and inside , if not let out, they bleed like ulcers. Myopic musings/ joyous fools, beware your flanks- chilling, but , well, I understand. It reminds me of a writing poetry class I took ages ago at a community college. My grade- a B. Why? I really like your style, but not the subject matter. Wave their gnarled hands goodbye- yes, another day of getting it out. And you can sleep easy in your tufted bed. Excellent. Keep dancing in the dark. If we all danced to the same drummer, poetry would be boring. I might just have to contribute a poem. If I can find any dark stuff lol.
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Castigation, bloody pages- and inside , if not let out, they bleed like ulcers. Myopic musings/ joyous fools, beware your flanks- chilling, but , well, I understand. It reminds me of a writing poetry class I took ages ago at a community college. My grade- a B. Why? I really like your style, but not the subject matter. Wave their gnarled hands goodbye- yes, another day of getting it out. And you can sleep easy in your tufted bed. Excellent. Keep dancing in the dark. If we all danced to the same drummer, poetry would be boring. I might just have to contribute a poem. If I can find any dark stuff lol.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2015
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Thanks so much, Ed, not just for the exceptional rating, for which I'm always grateful to receive, but for "getting" where I'm coming from here more than anything else.
The book is always open for submissions as long as the poems being presented are of a dark nature. I really hope you'll contribute. There is no specification as to form--whatever you are comfortable posting, in any style, is perfectly fine.
I'll look forward to it, and thanks again.
Always with respect
~Dean
Comment from OLA THOMAS
I see the irony link between the last rest bed 'coffin' and our usual comfortable bed. While one is temporal, the other is everlasting in a way. well chosen words for your imagery to assert well in the mind.
ola thomas
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2015
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I see the irony link between the last rest bed 'coffin' and our usual comfortable bed. While one is temporal, the other is everlasting in a way. well chosen words for your imagery to assert well in the mind.
ola thomas
Comment Written 27-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2015
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Ola, I thank you sir for reviewing objectively, as well as grasping the underlying meaning in my message.
As always, your comments, time and reviews are deeply appreciated.
Always with respect
~Dean
Comment from Janet Foor
I'm not a "dark" poetry fan except for yours. Your creativity in word choice is exceptional. You make me look at things in a different way. I loved the "English" words that gave the piece a Shakespearean flavor. Even the title, "A Tufted Bed" is brilliant. I'm thinking cozy and comfortable while you are thinking "COFFIN".
From the beginning with "Thoughts should not be kept in cages", I was hooked. The message is clear and profound. Well done Dean.
Blessings
Janet
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I'm not a "dark" poetry fan except for yours. Your creativity in word choice is exceptional. You make me look at things in a different way. I loved the "English" words that gave the piece a Shakespearean flavor. Even the title, "A Tufted Bed" is brilliant. I'm thinking cozy and comfortable while you are thinking "COFFIN".
From the beginning with "Thoughts should not be kept in cages", I was hooked. The message is clear and profound. Well done Dean.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 27-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2015
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Thanks so much, Janet, that is so kind of you. As always I appreciate your generosity in rating this, but more than that, I am very pleased that you enjoyed reading it. You also grasped the "irony" I intended in the comparisons of a warm, plush bed and a coffin, which I am also very grateful for.
Thanks so much again for your fabulous review.
With respect & admiration
~Dean :}
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi Dean - been off site for a while - other things to do that also pay LOL. But great to come back to something like this. Great right. Second line of stanza 3 - what a great way of saying someone went pale with fright. The moving picture in the rain is amazing - and here am I, cannot even master a still one. Warm regards Dorothy x
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Hi Dean - been off site for a while - other things to do that also pay LOL. But great to come back to something like this. Great right. Second line of stanza 3 - what a great way of saying someone went pale with fright. The moving picture in the rain is amazing - and here am I, cannot even master a still one. Warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 27-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2015
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Oh, it's not too difficult to accomplish, Dorothy, if you have the right tools in place and easily at your disposal.
Additionally I'm a computer geek, and an special FX aficionado, so there is that to consider.
Welcome back, and thanks for dropping by to review a couple of my poems.
As always, your feedback and readership--as well as your valuable time--are deeply appreciated.
Take care...
~Dean
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Dean Kuch,
Nice piece of Horror and Thriller Poetry beautifully depicting its theme!
Wording is impressive and perfectly matching the theme.
Smooth and captivating flow with lovely rhyming scheme and lively imagery.
Picture and its sound effect enhance beauty of the poem.
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2015
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Hello Dean Kuch,
Nice piece of Horror and Thriller Poetry beautifully depicting its theme!
Wording is impressive and perfectly matching the theme.
Smooth and captivating flow with lovely rhyming scheme and lively imagery.
Picture and its sound effect enhance beauty of the poem.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2015
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Thank you for reading this first installment of what I hope to be an exemplary collection of dark poetry from Fanstory members one and all, RP.
As always, your positive feedback, your time, and your readership are extremely important to me.
Thanks so much again, and one day, consider submitting a dark verse of your own if you've a mind to.
Always with respect
~Dean
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Hi Dean,
Thanks for the compliments and suggestion.
~RP.
Comment from Aussie
"Be afraid, be mortally afraid of the Grim Reaper." It is controversial whether thoughts go with us or not. The body does rot or burn, the thoughts to god return. Excellent my Dark Lord (Vader?) XX
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"Be afraid, be mortally afraid of the Grim Reaper." It is controversial whether thoughts go with us or not. The body does rot or burn, the thoughts to god return. Excellent my Dark Lord (Vader?) XX
Comment Written 27-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2015
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Thanks, Princess Leah. I appreciate you coming over to The Dark Side, if only for a while.
Thanks for the generous six stars and kid comments. Those are deeply appreciated too!
May the force be with you...always. LOL...
With respect and admiration
~Dean ;}
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Me? Coming over to the dark side? Wait until you read my latest post...Hee,Hee. :-) XX Happy Halloween old bean!
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I'll be sure to check it out, Aussie. :)
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Much obliged my Dark Lord of new beginnings!
Comment from RGstar
I thought this one lyrically sound, prhaps a little towards small statements in each stanza, but nice aura surrounding your theme.
Good solid write for the genre and the time of year. ''thus, whilst (very english) and morrow'' features I use heavily in my poetry are significant words in Elizabethan form so must be used wisely or could display a false front or a trying to hard which would make the text forced. In this write you adminstered them correctly with good feel throughout, still, one has to be careful with such words.
A nice dellivery and as always a good insight to the darker side of existence....which is needed which you master.
Good work.
RGstar
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2015
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I thought this one lyrically sound, prhaps a little towards small statements in each stanza, but nice aura surrounding your theme.
Good solid write for the genre and the time of year. ''thus, whilst (very english) and morrow'' features I use heavily in my poetry are significant words in Elizabethan form so must be used wisely or could display a false front or a trying to hard which would make the text forced. In this write you adminstered them correctly with good feel throughout, still, one has to be careful with such words.
A nice dellivery and as always a good insight to the darker side of existence....which is needed which you master.
Good work.
RGstar
Comment Written 27-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2015
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I was channeling my Poe muse while writing this, RG. As to whether or not it was successful, well...opinions vary. I'm very adept at using archaic language and am fully cognizant of the pitfalls. Perhaps I was born in another place and time...???
Thanks for taking the time to read and comment on my work.
Always with respect
~Dean
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i am sure, very successful. Good write.
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As are you, I'm sure.
~Dean