Comment from Benny Beeharry

Excellent

Hi Carolyn,
A lovely, homily little story, full of beauty of home close relationship and above all faithfullness . Lovely.
I read it with a real wish to see what happens. I was praying that no tragedy came to spoil it.
Very well sustained.
Benny Beeharry

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2015

Thanks Bennie,
No , there are happy times ahead for Penelope and Peter Penguin. So glad you enjoyed the story.
:-) Carolyn

Comment from misscookie

Excellent

IU love this story very much for the children for not only is it interesting it educational too. The children learn how mothers and fathers take care of each other and most important in raising their babies.
Great read.
Cookie

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2015

Thanks Cookie,
Yes we can learn a lot from God's creatures. I'm so glad you liked the story.
Love, Carolyn

Comment from sweetwoodjax

Excellent

this is an excellent write, Carolyn, you did an excellent job writing this story about the penguin mating ritual and the egg sharing responsibilities that they have. I enjoyed reading it

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2015

Thanks so much. I'm glad you enjoyed the story. Love, Carolyn

Comment from royowen

Excellent

I love the way penguins mate for life..I think, they are very sharing in their joint responsibility in their devotion to their chick, I like the way the male, keeps the eggs warm, while the female goes to sea and collects enough food for her mate. Creation is amazing, Gpd displays His love in His creation, but mostly in His Son, does He reveal His great love! Well done, Carolyn nicely constructed story, no spags, well written and described, well done, my friend, blessings, Roy.

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2015

Thanks Roy,
God is amazing. Penguins would never think of cracking the egg before it's time and destroying their precious baby. Will humans ever learn the wonders of creation and appreciate the breath of life that God has given us? I'm so glad you enjoyed this story.
Love to you and E,
Carolyn

reply by royowen on 28-Sep-2015

You are so right , Carolyn, a wise lady, and God's beloved too, wow.

Comment from Sis Cat

Excellent

This is a great penguin story. It entertained and informed. I did not know that the male penguins sat on the eggs for two weeks while the female penguins searched for food. I wish all male humans were as dedicated to their children and their wives. You are right. Your story taught "Great lessons on monogamy and parenthood." Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2015

Thanks Sis Cat for the wonderful comments and generous rating. So glad you enjoyed this one. :-) Carolyn

Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Excellent

Hi, Carolyn

_ Fun story for children, as well as a teaching one too.
_ Nicely composed and presented.
_ It's interesting to sit and watch how animals interact with each other.
_ There used to be a weekly show on Discover channel, I think, and it was all about Meerkats. Cool show. We really enjoyed watching it.


<<>> Need comma for direct address.
_ "Ok(,) Penelope,
_ "I see you(,) Penelope, welcome home
_ "Open wide(,) Peter," said Penelope, a

<<>> Use a comma with a dialogue tag.
_ I'll be here when you get back, good luck fishing[.](,)" Peter shouted as Pen

Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2015

Hi there and thanks so much for the edits.
I think I took care of all of them.
So glad you enjoyed the story.
I have a few installments left.
Love, Carolyn

Comment from Phoenix Blood

Excellent

Hello! An entertaining tale you have woven. I would like to comment on two sections: The first is when the penguin says she knew he would be a good husband and father-that is dropped and then never explained. The second is the regurgitation part. It might be personal preference (and the creatures may actually do this) however, for a children's book it might be a feasible option to just have her bring him the fish. But overall I appreciated this tale! Well done.

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 Comment Written 28-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2015

Thanks for the wonderful comments.
I thought about just bringing him the fish, but then she has to feed the chick (when it is hatched) by regurgitation, and she has caught enough to feed them for the two weeks that the male will be gone. My little granddaughter said, "Gege, you could say puck, but I like regurgitation better, it sounds more grown up." LOL she is 7.
I can tell you read this with interest and I really appreciate that.
:-) Carolyn