A Book of Love
Viewing comments for Chapter 35 "The Language of Love"Assorted poems of love
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Comment from mfowler
Hi ya, Missy
This is an inventive piece.
You've taken various poetic forms and hitched them to a poetic form to create a romantic/dance combo. Reads sweetly and a lot of it is in perfect meter.
I read the reviews and see Nosha has pointed out the rhyme for 'triolet' doesn't work because the pronunciation is 'tree-o-lay'. First I knew of it, but if you care to make a change this would work:
Cha Cha me with a Triolet
Dance 8 lines of love with me, Olay!
(It probably doesn't matter as I'm sure you aren't the only one who pronounces it triolet)
Very nice poem, original in style, and creative in content.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2015
Hi ya, Missy
This is an inventive piece.
You've taken various poetic forms and hitched them to a poetic form to create a romantic/dance combo. Reads sweetly and a lot of it is in perfect meter.
I read the reviews and see Nosha has pointed out the rhyme for 'triolet' doesn't work because the pronunciation is 'tree-o-lay'. First I knew of it, but if you care to make a change this would work:
Cha Cha me with a Triolet
Dance 8 lines of love with me, Olay!
(It probably doesn't matter as I'm sure you aren't the only one who pronounces it triolet)
Very nice poem, original in style, and creative in content.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2015
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Great idea...I think I will just use that!! Thanks Mark your the best :) I wouldn't have changed it but that is the second review that mentioned the different pronunciation. Webster has the pronunciation as...(/ˈtraɪ.əlɨt/ or US /ˌtriː.əˈleɪ/). So you tell me teach. Which is correct?
Always,
Missy
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Actually,
This is all new to me so I'd go with the American version as it's your work and your major readership will be American. Put that note from Webster about differing pronunciations in the notes. I have alternative American version for you too. Use as you will, or not, no worries.
Cha Cha me with a Triolet
Dance 8 lines of love with me, Olay!
...or with the US version:
Dance 8 lines of love. You and I - Olay!
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Brilliant :) Hugs
Comment from Sis Cat
In 2016, submit this poem to the Dancing Poetry Contest in San Francisco. Poets from around the world submit poems on dance to this contest. The winners will have their poems danced to by a group of women artists. I already submitted to this year's contest and I hope to win or place, but your poem is perfect for its movement and references to different types of poetry. You wrote a more dance-able poem than the one I submitted to the contest. Thank you for sharing your kinetic work, but share it again in next year's contest. http://www.dancingpoetry.com/
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2015
In 2016, submit this poem to the Dancing Poetry Contest in San Francisco. Poets from around the world submit poems on dance to this contest. The winners will have their poems danced to by a group of women artists. I already submitted to this year's contest and I hope to win or place, but your poem is perfect for its movement and references to different types of poetry. You wrote a more dance-able poem than the one I submitted to the contest. Thank you for sharing your kinetic work, but share it again in next year's contest. http://www.dancingpoetry.com/
Comment Written 25-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2015
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OMG...WOW...thank you for thinking this merits an entry. I am so very flattered, honestly. I have read some of your work. So, I know that if you think this highly of this, I will do it :)
Always,
Missy
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Submit to that contest next year. I would be thrilled to have one of my poems danced to. If you look at the winning entries in the past several years, you see why your poem would be a strong contender.
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For some reason I can't read any poems on that site. :(
Comment from Jay Squires
Oh, yes! This is indeed pleasing to me, Missy! Your use of the various poetic forms to show that dance is poetry in motion was cleverly done.
You had a lot of fun with this, didn't you?
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2015
Oh, yes! This is indeed pleasing to me, Missy! Your use of the various poetic forms to show that dance is poetry in motion was cleverly done.
You had a lot of fun with this, didn't you?
Comment Written 25-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2015
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Yes... Yes I did. Thank you, Jay, my dear for this much-appreciated review :)
Your biggest fan,
Missy
Comment from Curly Girly
I thought this was quite a creative write for this type of image. Well done!
You wrote some great moves there, but I liked the last stanza best:
Now pull me in close and kiss me deep
Seal this dance of love before we sleep
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2015
I thought this was quite a creative write for this type of image. Well done!
You wrote some great moves there, but I liked the last stanza best:
Now pull me in close and kiss me deep
Seal this dance of love before we sleep
Comment Written 25-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2015
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Thanks sugga...I tried to do the picture justice :)
Always,
Missy
Comment from lightink
What an absolutely perfect metaphor! I savored every word of it as you took me to this very special poetry ball.I liked the flow, the melding of dance styles with the types of poetry, the sweet exuberance of these lines. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2015
What an absolutely perfect metaphor! I savored every word of it as you took me to this very special poetry ball.I liked the flow, the melding of dance styles with the types of poetry, the sweet exuberance of these lines. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2015
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Thank you hon, for this wonderful review :)
So glad you enjoyed it!
Always justafan,
Missy
Comment from Nosha17
A nice light-hearted poem full of poetry and dance. I liked your mentioning all the different forms, I am glad yours was a rhyming poem! Good use of rhyming and imagery. In verse five the pronunciation of triolet is tree-olay so droplet doesn't rhyme-I can't think of a suggestion to replace it, it's getting late and I am a bit tired. Most enjoyable. Faye
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2015
A nice light-hearted poem full of poetry and dance. I liked your mentioning all the different forms, I am glad yours was a rhyming poem! Good use of rhyming and imagery. In verse five the pronunciation of triolet is tree-olay so droplet doesn't rhyme-I can't think of a suggestion to replace it, it's getting late and I am a bit tired. Most enjoyable. Faye
Comment Written 25-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2015
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Oops!! As I had to look them up all I can say is "I tried".
Thank you so much for the review :)
Always justafan,
Missy
Comment from jmdg1954
I like poems written with a dance related theme. I also thought it creative how you included various style poems as well.
Nicely done... John
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2015
I like poems written with a dance related theme. I also thought it creative how you included various style poems as well.
Nicely done... John
Comment Written 25-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2015
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SWEET!!! I am thrilled that you liked this :)
Always,
Missy
Comment from A TARNISHED KNIGHT
Wow that was really good..You wove it all together like a master seamstress and never dropped a stitch ...Wish I had six for you on this but that I am lacking ..So instead of a six here is a kiss XXX
TK
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2015
Wow that was really good..You wove it all together like a master seamstress and never dropped a stitch ...Wish I had six for you on this but that I am lacking ..So instead of a six here is a kiss XXX
TK
Comment Written 25-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2015
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Accepted graciously TK :)
Comment from pbroussard209
This is a fun creative poem. I like the use of the different kinds of poems embedded into the stanzas. Amazing how a picture can speak to us sending our minds on a journey of their own.
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reply by the author on 25-Jul-2015
This is a fun creative poem. I like the use of the different kinds of poems embedded into the stanzas. Amazing how a picture can speak to us sending our minds on a journey of their own.
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Comment Written 25-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2015
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Thanks hon. I'm glad you enjoyed this lil diddy :)
Always,
Missy
Comment from Dean Kuch
What an alluring and captivating message you've created in this short, but sweet, verse, Missy. You've used the photo as your inspiration, drawing on many different forms of poetic expressionism in the context to spin a sultry yarn of love and passion.
Nicely done! ~Dean :)
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reply by the author on 25-Jul-2015
What an alluring and captivating message you've created in this short, but sweet, verse, Missy. You've used the photo as your inspiration, drawing on many different forms of poetic expressionism in the context to spin a sultry yarn of love and passion.
Nicely done! ~Dean :)
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Comment Written 25-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2015
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~ Thank you ~ Dean for this sweet review. A yarn.. an exciting or interesting story; especially: a story that is so surprising or unusual that it is difficult to believe. Could you not see yourself dancing with words of love? LOL ...Just kiddin with ya!!
Always,
Missy
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Sure, Missy. I've been known to dance with the Devil in the pale moonlight, so it ain't that big a stretch fer lil' ol' me, heh-heh.
~Dean ;)
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Love ya...you always make me smile :)