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Comment from giraffmang
Hi Bill,
Very nice piece indeed. I may never enter a public loo again...
ell written, funny and also quite shocking. Good stuff
focus of attention to the post operation paperwork - lol.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2018
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Hi Bill,
Very nice piece indeed. I may never enter a public loo again...
ell written, funny and also quite shocking. Good stuff
focus of attention to the post operation paperwork - lol.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2018
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Thanks, G, for the great review. Bill
Comment from jenintorre
You are a fabulous writer Bill. This is such a clever story although I had to read it a couple of times to get the gist. "Jeez Louise" loved that. Rock on. Love Jen
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2018
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You are a fabulous writer Bill. This is such a clever story although I had to read it a couple of times to get the gist. "Jeez Louise" loved that. Rock on. Love Jen
Comment Written 19-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2018
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That, Jen, for the excellent review. Bill
Comment from meeshu
this is how tainted I have become, I thought Darren was being recorded on one of those 'Sicko-Cams' and was going to turn up on the interweb. I am glad it wasn't that, Bill. thanks...............meeshu
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2018
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this is how tainted I have become, I thought Darren was being recorded on one of those 'Sicko-Cams' and was going to turn up on the interweb. I am glad it wasn't that, Bill. thanks...............meeshu
Comment Written 18-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2018
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Darren might have preferred that to being slowly eaten by an alien monster.
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I believe you are right.
Comment from dmt1967
This story is very well told and sent a shiver down my back. I liked the men looking for Darren, an he has fallen foul of the space creature. This is a very original idea and thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2015
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This story is very well told and sent a shiver down my back. I liked the men looking for Darren, an he has fallen foul of the space creature. This is a very original idea and thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2015
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Thank you for the excellent review. Bill
Comment from Lynne
Wow. I'm a little speechless. This story was powerful, to say the least. I wish it were a little longer, that is not a ping on the story, just an insight on my selfishness. I think Geez Louise is the most accepted spelling... my mind is reeling. Forgive. The ending was amazing and really did your story justice.
Thank you.
D
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2015
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Wow. I'm a little speechless. This story was powerful, to say the least. I wish it were a little longer, that is not a ping on the story, just an insight on my selfishness. I think Geez Louise is the most accepted spelling... my mind is reeling. Forgive. The ending was amazing and really did your story justice.
Thank you.
D
Comment Written 15-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2015
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Thank you, Lynne, for the excellent review. Bill
Comment from lalajovanoski
this is truly an inspiring read
This is such an amazingly written, finely composed piece. You are very talented. Thank you very much for sharing this, I truly enjoyed reading. I look forward to reading more from you!
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2015
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this is truly an inspiring read
This is such an amazingly written, finely composed piece. You are very talented. Thank you very much for sharing this, I truly enjoyed reading. I look forward to reading more from you!
Comment Written 15-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2015
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Thanks
Comment from Shirley McLain
Very intense beginning. I have to admit I got lost with the story in the middle. The one not in dark letters. The writing is good and I didn't see any spag.
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reply by the author on 14-Jun-2015
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Very intense beginning. I have to admit I got lost with the story in the middle. The one not in dark letters. The writing is good and I didn't see any spag.
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Comment Written 14-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2015
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Thank you, Okiegal, for giving this a look. Darren is basically food for the creature which keeps him in a dream state of a perfect world (the middle part) while it slowly saps away his life force. I lived in Lawton for three years back when I was assigned with the Artillery Training School on Ft. Sill. Nice place and great folks. Bill
Comment from sandragee
I'm not sure if I should feel sorry for Darren or not. He seems happy at the end. It's a creepy, well-written story with a great title. Good job.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2015
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I'm not sure if I should feel sorry for Darren or not. He seems happy at the end. It's a creepy, well-written story with a great title. Good job.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2015
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Thank you, Sandra, for the excellent review. Bill
Comment from Gloria ....
Oh man, don't you just hate when a black-haired ball of fur comes through an opening? Man alive did that come around scarily and wonderfully. Straight for the jugular.
Terrific sci-fi story here. It reminds me a little of Solaris. You write these stories with great skill, Bill. This is a really good one.
One question or perhaps nit:
was moving up and down, almost imperceptivity. (imperceptibly)
Anyway great job with this story. I'm staying out of there.
Gloria
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2015
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Oh man, don't you just hate when a black-haired ball of fur comes through an opening? Man alive did that come around scarily and wonderfully. Straight for the jugular.
Terrific sci-fi story here. It reminds me a little of Solaris. You write these stories with great skill, Bill. This is a really good one.
One question or perhaps nit:
was moving up and down, almost imperceptivity. (imperceptibly)
Anyway great job with this story. I'm staying out of there.
Gloria
Comment Written 13-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2015
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Thank you, Gloria, for the excellent review and catching that misspelled word.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Bill, I thought of an animated short I saw recently while reading this. I've included it at the end of my review. Watch it if you haven't seen it already. If nothing else, you'll get a good laugh out of it.
Ha-ha, great wordplay in your title, Bill. I suppose that amoebic psycho-vampire helped to speed things up a bit for poor Darren and his "darin' to dream". But hey, he sounds very happy and content where he is, so who knows, perhaps the evil extraterrestrial did him a favor.
Ya know, there is some really...REALLY warped individuals out there. You just gotta love 'em, lol...
~Dean
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2015
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Bill, I thought of an animated short I saw recently while reading this. I've included it at the end of my review. Watch it if you haven't seen it already. If nothing else, you'll get a good laugh out of it.
Ha-ha, great wordplay in your title, Bill. I suppose that amoebic psycho-vampire helped to speed things up a bit for poor Darren and his "darin' to dream". But hey, he sounds very happy and content where he is, so who knows, perhaps the evil extraterrestrial did him a favor.
Ya know, there is some really...REALLY warped individuals out there. You just gotta love 'em, lol...
~Dean
Comment Written 12-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2015
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Saints preserve Us! That was extreme! That's Slay-mation!
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Ain't it the truth? Ha-ha!