The Heart of Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 79 "Dandelions smile (5-7-5)"'Tis not the Bard, but pretty good poetry anyway
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Comment from patcelaw
This is a good haiku for the contest. I like your notes. As you liken the dandelions to the sin that crops up in our lives and ruins our soul. Sin as you say does look like pleasure for a time, but then we have to pay for those sinful ways. Patricia
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
This is a good haiku for the contest. I like your notes. As you liken the dandelions to the sin that crops up in our lives and ruins our soul. Sin as you say does look like pleasure for a time, but then we have to pay for those sinful ways. Patricia
Comment Written 11-May-2015
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
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Thanks so much Patricia for your insightful comments. , :-) Carolyn
Comment from Trybuck
Those dandelions keep on coming
In poems and in the yard
Let the guitars keep strumming
"Another One Bites The Dust"
As I grab the spray of 2-4-D
Those weeds must die before I bust
Well done, Buck
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
Those dandelions keep on coming
In poems and in the yard
Let the guitars keep strumming
"Another One Bites The Dust"
As I grab the spray of 2-4-D
Those weeds must die before I bust
Well done, Buck
Comment Written 11-May-2015
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
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They are persistent little buddies aren't they? Thanks for the poem... :-) Carolyn
Comment from royowen
A beautiful entry in this 5/7/5 contest Carolyn, I haven't seen you for awhile on FS, good as aways to see you, haven't seen tares used outside of the bible, but just as valid, lovely conception as a poem, my friend, hope you and Larry are doing well, and well done, good luck in the competition, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
A beautiful entry in this 5/7/5 contest Carolyn, I haven't seen you for awhile on FS, good as aways to see you, haven't seen tares used outside of the bible, but just as valid, lovely conception as a poem, my friend, hope you and Larry are doing well, and well done, good luck in the competition, blessings Roy
Comment Written 11-May-2015
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
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Hi Roy,
I am just now getting to reply's. Did a few reviews today and going back to them in a bit. I see you have written some. Yes the 'tares' were chosen as a term used in the Bible. Weeds will choke out the good stuff if allowed. I am still not up to par, seem to go from one thing to another. But still holding my own. I hear of others who are in pain, the hospital and suffering far worse than me. I pray for all of them.
Love to you and Elaine,
Carolyn
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To you and Larry too, Carolyn, get well,
Comment from misscookie
I like the artwork that you choose to go with your poem
you captured my attention from the start. And I love the author notes they are so true, everything that looks good to you can be bad for you.
Cookie
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
I like the artwork that you choose to go with your poem
you captured my attention from the start. And I love the author notes they are so true, everything that looks good to you can be bad for you.
Cookie
Comment Written 11-May-2015
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
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Thanks dear Cookie, Carolyn
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You're very welcome, have a blessed day.
Cookie
Comment from RodG
I like how you have personified the dandelion as "smiling."
Good simile in line 2 comparing them to daybreak's brightness.
Good satori because you ask the reader to reconsider his opinion of this plant--can't "weeds" be a delight to the senses?
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reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
I like how you have personified the dandelion as "smiling."
Good simile in line 2 comparing them to daybreak's brightness.
Good satori because you ask the reader to reconsider his opinion of this plant--can't "weeds" be a delight to the senses?
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Comment Written 11-May-2015
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
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Thanks Rod, I so appreciate the through review and affirming comments.
Carolyn
Comment from Curly Girly
It meets the contest criteria:
Dandelions smile
Like daybreak brightness they bloom
A glorified tare
And, it is just a sunny, bright, cheerful little verse. I can think of no better way to welcome the spring in with. We are in autumn here though!
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reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
It meets the contest criteria:
Dandelions smile
Like daybreak brightness they bloom
A glorified tare
And, it is just a sunny, bright, cheerful little verse. I can think of no better way to welcome the spring in with. We are in autumn here though!
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Comment Written 11-May-2015
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
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Hi there,
so sorry I am 3 miles behind and way out in the 'bush'. :-) I'm not sure I will ever catch up. :-)
Nicole, I appreciate your comments. Glad you liked the poem.
Autumn there, hummmmm. That still takes me aback a little.
You will be lambing when we start building fires in the fireplace. Take care my friend,
Carolyn