A Touch of Insecurity
flash fiction-603 words18 total reviews
Comment from nordicgirl
This isn't that exagetrated. I know people whose brain works awfully close to this poor guy. This has a very natural flow to the thoughts making them seem quite authentic. Lots of humor to hold intetest, but not enough to obscure the mrssage.
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This isn't that exagetrated. I know people whose brain works awfully close to this poor guy. This has a very natural flow to the thoughts making them seem quite authentic. Lots of humor to hold intetest, but not enough to obscure the mrssage.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2015
Comment from Sankey
Haha, good one mate. Have not read any of your stuff before, and no spags, shock horror. Hoping to get my outer back tomorrow.
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Haha, good one mate. Have not read any of your stuff before, and no spags, shock horror. Hoping to get my outer back tomorrow.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2015
Comment from Zinnia48
Wow--this was really an interesting journey! I loved the subtlety of how you let this guy unravel. And that ending was totally unexpected. You always do an excellent job with "voice". I really hope you win--this is certainly a winner! Caroline
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Wow--this was really an interesting journey! I loved the subtlety of how you let this guy unravel. And that ending was totally unexpected. You always do an excellent job with "voice". I really hope you win--this is certainly a winner! Caroline
Comment Written 28-Apr-2015
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Really good. I love stories where you get inside someone's head, and you do it very well. She did attend a meeting. But she also forgot to keep the home fires burning. You have to keep the love alive or you might lose it, honey, so how about putting on your sexy teddy and surprising your hubby for once? :)
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Really good. I love stories where you get inside someone's head, and you do it very well. She did attend a meeting. But she also forgot to keep the home fires burning. You have to keep the love alive or you might lose it, honey, so how about putting on your sexy teddy and surprising your hubby for once? :)
Comment Written 28-Apr-2015
Comment from nelliesellie
Oh! Oh1 I have thought along those lines. Jealousy is a form of insanity. You just do not let the facts set you straight. There are several other emotions like that too. Good think I have learned to not let my emotions control me. Great work.
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Oh! Oh1 I have thought along those lines. Jealousy is a form of insanity. You just do not let the facts set you straight. There are several other emotions like that too. Good think I have learned to not let my emotions control me. Great work.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2015
Comment from Sasha
Great work with this. You had me giggling from the start. Paranoia is not reserved for the mentally ill, I know many that are just paranoid...I think it is the adrenaline flow that makes it so appealing. Some just thrive on paranoia, but sadly, make their, and others, lives quite miserable as a result. Keep up the great work.
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Great work with this. You had me giggling from the start. Paranoia is not reserved for the mentally ill, I know many that are just paranoid...I think it is the adrenaline flow that makes it so appealing. Some just thrive on paranoia, but sadly, make their, and others, lives quite miserable as a result. Keep up the great work.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2015
Comment from justafan
I hope that when I grow up ( lol) I can be just like you Mikey :). This is another cool piece dear. I bow to your greatness!
I am Justafan after all!
Always
Missy
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I hope that when I grow up ( lol) I can be just like you Mikey :). This is another cool piece dear. I bow to your greatness!
I am Justafan after all!
Always
Missy
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Comment Written 28-Apr-2015
Comment from petalangela
The mind is a terry in thing to live with but live with it we do. Every thing is questioned ever answer examined for its lie. Then the mind begins to feed on the lie and asks itself 'WHY"
That's the fatal switch that turns the lights to bright bright red
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The mind is a terry in thing to live with but live with it we do. Every thing is questioned ever answer examined for its lie. Then the mind begins to feed on the lie and asks itself 'WHY"
That's the fatal switch that turns the lights to bright bright red
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Comment Written 28-Apr-2015