To Cherish Thorns
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "The Butterfly's Lament"Free Verse Poetry
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Comment from nelliesellie
I love the pictures. I love the poem. I like the butterfly colors. Some choose to own their beauty. They put them in a cage or glass jar. Worse, They kill them and mount them on their walls. Let the butterfly stay will nature. His life is the true beauty. Great work.
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I love the pictures. I love the poem. I like the butterfly colors. Some choose to own their beauty. They put them in a cage or glass jar. Worse, They kill them and mount them on their walls. Let the butterfly stay will nature. His life is the true beauty. Great work.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2015
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, a remarkable work - plaintive in essence, a yearning of a soul to be free, is my perception - well constructed in lyrical timbre and articulation - a simple vision of release...
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In my opinion, a remarkable work - plaintive in essence, a yearning of a soul to be free, is my perception - well constructed in lyrical timbre and articulation - a simple vision of release...
Comment Written 22-Mar-2015
Comment from Eric1
Hi Mikey, this is one of the most beautiful and powerfully penned poems I have reviewed for this Butterfly competition, your wonderful words are absolutely full of great description and imagery, I really enjoyed reading it and i wish you the best of luck in the contest my friend.
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Hi Mikey, this is one of the most beautiful and powerfully penned poems I have reviewed for this Butterfly competition, your wonderful words are absolutely full of great description and imagery, I really enjoyed reading it and i wish you the best of luck in the contest my friend.
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Comment Written 22-Mar-2015
Comment from madhatter1977
You're so on the mark with this poem my friend. It speaks of butterflies yet could so easily relate to humans and humanity in general. I am really impressed by this one, Mikey! Best of luck in the contest - I think this will do really well, Pete :)
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You're so on the mark with this poem my friend. It speaks of butterflies yet could so easily relate to humans and humanity in general. I am really impressed by this one, Mikey! Best of luck in the contest - I think this will do really well, Pete :)
Comment Written 22-Mar-2015
Comment from country ranch writer
your writing sure has come a long way my friend I think you were just pretending about not knowing how to write of such wonderful things.
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your writing sure has come a long way my friend I think you were just pretending about not knowing how to write of such wonderful things.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2015
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Wow! I had to read this twice, it's so amazingly good. Bravo! Standing ovation on this bit of perfection in a world of trite and boring poems. This tells a lot about YOU, Mikey. You have an appreciation for life and freedom that makes me wonder why your politics lean to govt control and lack of freedom... possibly lack of life with the reductions in medicare. But let's not get into that. The poem is a masterpiece, and I'm going to save it for inspiration. :)
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Wow! I had to read this twice, it's so amazingly good. Bravo! Standing ovation on this bit of perfection in a world of trite and boring poems. This tells a lot about YOU, Mikey. You have an appreciation for life and freedom that makes me wonder why your politics lean to govt control and lack of freedom... possibly lack of life with the reductions in medicare. But let's not get into that. The poem is a masterpiece, and I'm going to save it for inspiration. :)
Comment Written 22-Mar-2015
Comment from krys123
Mikey;
+ very good use of enjambment what is the running out of a thought, idea and concept from a verse, couplet and line to the next without a syntactical break.
+ Imagery was quite outstanding and made for an imagination that was very inventive and ingeniously creative. It also was very demonstratively descriptive and vividly expressive throughout the writing: "A speck among a ball of specks how soon I was imprisoned in the darkness a tomb that held the light a coffin holding my life trapped within".
+ Poetic assessment and summary: another poem Mikey that I've been impressed with reading with the excellence of free verse poetry is masterfully written with an intent to be relative with a butterflies chrysalis to a man's development, by the use of a metaphor, to have his soul, mind and body free from all that has held him trapped and enclosed throughout his lifetime.
+ Good luck in the contest Mikey again and this is a very superb piece of poetry and may the good Lord be with you always my friend.
Alex
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Mikey;
+ very good use of enjambment what is the running out of a thought, idea and concept from a verse, couplet and line to the next without a syntactical break.
+ Imagery was quite outstanding and made for an imagination that was very inventive and ingeniously creative. It also was very demonstratively descriptive and vividly expressive throughout the writing: "A speck among a ball of specks how soon I was imprisoned in the darkness a tomb that held the light a coffin holding my life trapped within".
+ Poetic assessment and summary: another poem Mikey that I've been impressed with reading with the excellence of free verse poetry is masterfully written with an intent to be relative with a butterflies chrysalis to a man's development, by the use of a metaphor, to have his soul, mind and body free from all that has held him trapped and enclosed throughout his lifetime.
+ Good luck in the contest Mikey again and this is a very superb piece of poetry and may the good Lord be with you always my friend.
Alex
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Comment Written 22-Mar-2015
Comment from nordicgirl
This is one of the best pieces you have ever written. The flow , rhyme and technical excellence are amazing. But the thought provoking metaphoricalaspects will haunt my thoughts for years to come. Bravo!
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This is one of the best pieces you have ever written. The flow , rhyme and technical excellence are amazing. But the thought provoking metaphoricalaspects will haunt my thoughts for years to come. Bravo!
Comment Written 21-Mar-2015