Comment from Njorgensen

Excellent

Wow...powerful message. The rapidity of your rhymes is what drives this poem. "Stands to reason
Escape is treason
Must live a season
Before checking out"

Fantastic word choice and continuity. I really enjoyed reading this work.

Nancy

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 20-Mar-2015

Hi there Nancy,
I am really happy you enjoyed reading this . I appreciate your affirmation of quality, that means a lot to me.
:-) Carolyn

Comment from misscookie

Excellent

Your poem is so sad but true.
You captured my attention from the start.
It's seem that the numbers have increase since the youth are so into drugs.
Thank you for sharing
Cookie

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 20-Mar-2015

Yes, misscookie, the world is a mess...thank you so much for the comments.
:-) Carolyn

reply by misscookie on 20-Mar-2015

It was my pleasure.
Until next time. Have a blessed week end
Cookie

Comment from LIJ Red

Excellent

I might change the first lines to something like
Vanishing point ahead
Blank perspective full of dread
because of the similarity of head and ahead
but I do weird things at times
excellent poem

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 20-Mar-2015

Thank you for such a through review. I appreciate your suggestions so much, :-) Carolyn

Comment from MizKat

Excellent

Hi Carolyn,

I really liked your poem for the contest. You did a great job like you usually do. I enjoyed reading it and also your author notes. It is so sad that anyone would commit suicide.

Kat

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 20-Mar-2015

Hi Kat,
yes it is sad... So glad you read and related to this one.
Love, Carolyn

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

Hi, Carolyn,

A very powerfully poignant entry for the contest, Carolyn. Suicide rates are indeed on the rise, but given the state of the world today should that come as a shock to anyone? However, your caring and carefully chosen words well well thought out and convey you message clearly.

This picture is perfect to take many different ways for a story. I have seen the same photo used for many different posts here as of late.

Good job with this one. The best of luck in the contest. ~Dean

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 19-Mar-2015

Thanks Dean,
I appreciate your fine commentary and good wishes.
:-) Carolyn

reply by Dean Kuch on 19-Mar-2015

Sure.

Comment from Dawny53

Excellent

It is amazing, and so sad.. if only they were capable of seeing that there is a future, I guess young minds simply don't have the maturity to do that.. I feel this is an excellent entry.. the content is so strong and emotional.. good luck to you in this contest..

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 19-Mar-2015

Thanks so much for your fine comments and good wishes.
:-) Carolyn

Comment from Tomes Johnston

Exceptional

This is a great poem by the author and the theme is an admirable one. I had a cousin and a best friend who committed suicide. This is a terrible thing and their parents will never forget it.

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 19-Mar-2015

It is such a waste... Thank Tom, for your fine comments and shining award. I am honored.
:-) Carolyn

reply by Tomes Johnston on 20-Mar-2015

It is a terrible thing.

Comment from Curly Girly

Excellent

I think your poem tells a truthful tale of how life really is for the majority of us. Things are constantly happening and changing. Sometimes we feel overrun but we need to stay a while longer. With family breakdown, and parents who set poor examples, it is no wonder some kids feel worthless. Children are God's gift to people, and they need to be treasured, nurtured, prayed for and guided. They need a strong sturdy foundation for a bright future.

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 19-Mar-2015

Dear Nicole,
Your comments could be a short story as well. I appreciate all you have said. It is so true. Children are a sweet gift from God.
Thanks for the great R/R
:-) Carolyn

Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Excellent

Hi, Carolyn,

Wow...powerful entry. You're so right about the rising suicide rate. You chose your words wisely.

This picture is perfect to take many different ways for a story.

Good job with this one. The best of luck in the contest. It has --Max's-- vote. (*<*)

Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 19-Mar-2015

Thanks Jax-Max...
I appreciate the good luck. I am never sure what the 'committee' views as a good entry, but this one flowed in this manner in about 5 minutes, hopefully it will be noted as having some value. The picture certainly was the perfect prompt.
Hope you are having a great day,
:-) Carolyn

Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

In the past year I know of 2 young people 30 and 25 who took their own lives. One a girl, 25 shot herself in the head and the young man 30 hung himself. It breaks my heart that these things are happening. Patricia

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 19-Mar-2015

It is so tragic, there was literally a rash of suicides in a high school not far from here last year. I so appreciate your comments.
:-) Carolyn