Never Give Up
depression is a dreadful disease...52 total reviews
Comment from Selina Stambi
When things become unbearable and cannot be ignored,
we must reach out for help and keep our faith in the Lord .. amen to this and the author notes.
Good rhyming couplets, Bill. You have really described the horror of depression as only and insider would know it.
Have a good weekend.
Sonali
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015
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When things become unbearable and cannot be ignored,
we must reach out for help and keep our faith in the Lord .. amen to this and the author notes.
Good rhyming couplets, Bill. You have really described the horror of depression as only and insider would know it.
Have a good weekend.
Sonali
Comment Written 13-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015
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Thank you Sonali for your kind words. Yes my friend, I am definitely an insider. My struggle started 22 years ago after being diagnosed with a form of muscular dydtrophy (MG). Have a nice weekend as well. Bill
Comment from Nosha17
You are absolutely right, without faith and hope I would have given up a long time ago, with all the trials in my life. Excellent message and rhyming-hopefully, your poem may lift the spirits of those in need of encouragement. Faye
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015
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You are absolutely right, without faith and hope I would have given up a long time ago, with all the trials in my life. Excellent message and rhyming-hopefully, your poem may lift the spirits of those in need of encouragement. Faye
Comment Written 13-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015
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Thank you Faye for your nice comments. I'm so sorry to hear that you also struggle with this awful disease. Mine started 22 years ago after being diagnosed with a form of muscular dystrophy (MG). Take care of yourself Faye....Bill
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I am sorry to hear that, Bill. I am fine nowadays, I don't get depressed, but it was tough at the time. Hope you feel better and take care of yourself, too. Faye
Comment from krys123
Cedar;
+ Near notable alliteration's: /"feel like a fugitive"(Also good source of a simile)/"terrible thoughts"/"curl up in a corner"/
+ Rhyming exceptionally use and are each rhyming word is contingent to the meaning and concept of each line thus making the reading and rhythm flow smoothly and with the rhymes and neither forced nor labored.
+ Rhythmic meter(difference syllable counts per line), timing, cadence and tempo all were helpful in making the reading clear, fluid and easy.
+ Imagery superb and vivid and distinct and very expertly expressive and vividly descriptive: "You curl up in a corner, with a constant urge to cry, feeling so alone and useless that you just to die. Very descriptive, powerful and poignant.
+ Enjambment used where it is the running on every thought and idea from one line or verse to the next without a syntactical break. A good example was the above line used in the imagery.
+ Good luck in the contest and may the good Lord be with you always.
Alex
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015
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Cedar;
+ Near notable alliteration's: /"feel like a fugitive"(Also good source of a simile)/"terrible thoughts"/"curl up in a corner"/
+ Rhyming exceptionally use and are each rhyming word is contingent to the meaning and concept of each line thus making the reading and rhythm flow smoothly and with the rhymes and neither forced nor labored.
+ Rhythmic meter(difference syllable counts per line), timing, cadence and tempo all were helpful in making the reading clear, fluid and easy.
+ Imagery superb and vivid and distinct and very expertly expressive and vividly descriptive: "You curl up in a corner, with a constant urge to cry, feeling so alone and useless that you just to die. Very descriptive, powerful and poignant.
+ Enjambment used where it is the running on every thought and idea from one line or verse to the next without a syntactical break. A good example was the above line used in the imagery.
+ Good luck in the contest and may the good Lord be with you always.
Alex
Comment Written 13-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015
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Thank you Alex for your outstanding review, I really appreciate your kind words and great rating. I've been dealing with this sickness since I was diagnosed with a form of muscular dystrophy 22 years ago. Take care of yourself Alex and have a nice weekend my friend. Bill
Comment from Alan K Pease
Hi Bill. I know these situations for I have been bipolar since the early seventies and have had this affect my professional as well as my personal life. Now it is not so much of a problem as there are no highs and I can cope with the lows. The answer is that I have never lost my faith in God. Poetry has given me an outlet for my creative energies and when I am on the right side of my muse I fare fairly well. Your poem highlights this apparition and does it with good poetics. Hope that you have avoided any form of depression. Rear Alan
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015
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Hi Bill. I know these situations for I have been bipolar since the early seventies and have had this affect my professional as well as my personal life. Now it is not so much of a problem as there are no highs and I can cope with the lows. The answer is that I have never lost my faith in God. Poetry has given me an outlet for my creative energies and when I am on the right side of my muse I fare fairly well. Your poem highlights this apparition and does it with good poetics. Hope that you have avoided any form of depression. Rear Alan
Comment Written 13-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015
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Thank you Alan for your wonderful review, I really appreciate your kind words. Sorry to hear that you have been bipolar for so many years. Mine started 22 years ago after being diagnosed with a form of Muscular Dystrophy (MG). Take care of yourself and keep writing. As you said, poetry is an outlet to help us through each day. Take care of yourself my friend. Bill
Comment from judiverse
I think most of us do experience spells of depression. It becomes a problem when the state persists, and the person suffering can't explain just why he or she is depressed. Your rhyming couplets are excellent, and you really get inside how someone suffering form chronic depression goes through. People lose the ability to cope. "You feel like a hostage" is an excellent choice. It suggests that once depression has a person in its grip, he is hostage to it and can't get over it. That's why those suffering from depression need to seek help. judi
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015
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I think most of us do experience spells of depression. It becomes a problem when the state persists, and the person suffering can't explain just why he or she is depressed. Your rhyming couplets are excellent, and you really get inside how someone suffering form chronic depression goes through. People lose the ability to cope. "You feel like a hostage" is an excellent choice. It suggests that once depression has a person in its grip, he is hostage to it and can't get over it. That's why those suffering from depression need to seek help. judi
Comment Written 13-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015
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Thank you Judi for your inspiring comments. Your words are absolutely correct. I've been a hostage since the day I was diagnosed with a form of muscular dystrophy (MG) 22 years ago. Take care my friend and have a nice weekend. Bill
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You're very welcome. It's great that you can write, then. You have a great way to use your time. judi
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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2015
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Comment Written 13-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2015
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Thank you very much for this info, I really appreciate you being so kind and considerate. Have a great weekend my friend. Bill
Comment from acerisestory
Your poem is an impactful one about depression, Bill. As you said, we all suffer depression at one time or another. But there are those who are always depressed. It's so very hard to imagine, but I have a friend who suffers, so I have a small understanding.
I like your final stanza, in particular:
"When things become unbearable and cannot be ignored,
we must reach out for help and keep our faith in the Lord."
Well done! This is a great entry for the contest. Best of luck! Alana
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2015
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Your poem is an impactful one about depression, Bill. As you said, we all suffer depression at one time or another. But there are those who are always depressed. It's so very hard to imagine, but I have a friend who suffers, so I have a small understanding.
I like your final stanza, in particular:
"When things become unbearable and cannot be ignored,
we must reach out for help and keep our faith in the Lord."
Well done! This is a great entry for the contest. Best of luck! Alana
Comment Written 13-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2015
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Thank you Alana for your excellent review. I'm sorry to hear about your friend, I know how she feels. I've had many bouts with this monster ever since I was diagnosed with a form of muscular dystrophy (MG) 22 years ago. Have a great weekend. Bill
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You are welcome, Bill. I was hoping you didn't know about this disease firsthand. Hand in there, my friend. Alana
Comment from ElPoetry001
Excellent review of what depression entails.
I liked your story, although it was generic.
I would like to hear of possible methods to overcome this state of mind.
Everyone should realize that many people are more lost and depressed than they are. They need to get out among people, even go to the mall, and find the smile of affirmation from someone who also is feeling low, unwanted, not talented, not loved, and not fitting in.
Depression cannot be resolved in a fetal position. If not other people, the search out Nature. You will receive many emotional blessings just by observing the wonders of the world.
Easy to say, as an armchair critic. Yes, but I speak from the loneliness of self doubt, the failure to achieve some of my own goals and standards that I have set for myself. Learning to accept my path in life, and to cast away those who were toxic to me and created negative energy has enriched my path, as I continue.
Try the mantra of the unknown sage:
Weep not for what you have lost, fight for what you have
Weep not for what is dead, fight for what was born in you
Weep not for the one who abandoned you, fight for who is with you
Weep not for those who hate you, fight for those who want you
Weep not for your past, fight for your present struggle
Weep not for your suffering, fight for your happiness
With things that are happening to us, we begin to learn that nothing is impossible to solve,
just move forward
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2015
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Excellent review of what depression entails.
I liked your story, although it was generic.
I would like to hear of possible methods to overcome this state of mind.
Everyone should realize that many people are more lost and depressed than they are. They need to get out among people, even go to the mall, and find the smile of affirmation from someone who also is feeling low, unwanted, not talented, not loved, and not fitting in.
Depression cannot be resolved in a fetal position. If not other people, the search out Nature. You will receive many emotional blessings just by observing the wonders of the world.
Easy to say, as an armchair critic. Yes, but I speak from the loneliness of self doubt, the failure to achieve some of my own goals and standards that I have set for myself. Learning to accept my path in life, and to cast away those who were toxic to me and created negative energy has enriched my path, as I continue.
Try the mantra of the unknown sage:
Weep not for what you have lost, fight for what you have
Weep not for what is dead, fight for what was born in you
Weep not for the one who abandoned you, fight for who is with you
Weep not for those who hate you, fight for those who want you
Weep not for your past, fight for your present struggle
Weep not for your suffering, fight for your happiness
With things that are happening to us, we begin to learn that nothing is impossible to solve,
just move forward
Comment Written 13-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2015
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Thank you for your very informative review my friend, I appreciate it. I wish I had the knowledge to advise you on different methods to overcome this dreadful disease. However, there is no permanent solution that I'm aware of. Sure, there are a variety of medications available, but they only mask the problem. It's like taking Advil for a headache, it always comes back. I've been fighting this monster since the day I was diagnosed with muscular dystrophy, over 22 years ago. I wish you the best in your endeavors throughout the course of life my friend. Take care of yourself. Bill
Comment from Kingsland
Depression is a state of mind, but it can also have to do with chemicals changes in the body as well. You're right when you say that everyone is depressed once and awhile. This was a well written poetic voice that flows well... John
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2015
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Depression is a state of mind, but it can also have to do with chemicals changes in the body as well. You're right when you say that everyone is depressed once and awhile. This was a well written poetic voice that flows well... John
Comment Written 13-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2015
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Thank you John for your thoughts about this subject, I appreciate it. Have a nice weekend. Bill
Comment from l.raven
HI Bill, I am so sorry I missed this one in the contest....but every word so very true...we all have suffered from depression at one time or other...and some of us still do...it is truly a lost feeling...like nowhere to turn...your poem is very well written...and your picture says it all...you truly have to keep your faith through all of it...now I am going to see if you have anymore post...a great write you...luff Linda xoox love
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2015
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HI Bill, I am so sorry I missed this one in the contest....but every word so very true...we all have suffered from depression at one time or other...and some of us still do...it is truly a lost feeling...like nowhere to turn...your poem is very well written...and your picture says it all...you truly have to keep your faith through all of it...now I am going to see if you have anymore post...a great write you...luff Linda xoox love
Comment Written 13-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2015
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Hello Linda. Thanks girl for that wonderful review and rating, I really appreciate it. When I saw the contest prompt to write a poem about depression, I had to join in. I've been fighting that monster since the day I was diagnosed with a form of muscular dystrophy (MG) 22 years ago. If it spreads to your lungs, it can kill you. So the first few years was really rough, but as time goes by now, I hardly think about that part of it. Enough of that, how are you doing? Any health problems? I sure hope not. Take care my friend and have a great weekend. Bill
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I am so sorry sweet boy...I have my ups and downs...allergies bad...problem in family...and have had 3 neck surgeries ...but healthy most of the time...going through a bad spell now...but hope better soon...you take care my sweet friend...and have a great weekend and evening...love Linda xxoo luff