Mango and Ranger Joe
A Mango & Bert story31 total reviews
Comment from Walu Feral
Hahahahaha! G'day John, I love that and it ended up with a brilliant moral to the story. I could feel how pissed of mango was trying to tell it. You are a great story teller and a great man. Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2015
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Hahahahaha! G'day John, I love that and it ended up with a brilliant moral to the story. I could feel how pissed of mango was trying to tell it. You are a great story teller and a great man. Cheers Fez
Comment Written 09-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2015
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Thanks a heap, mate. I'm glad you enjoyed the story and thought it works well for children. Always a pleasure to hear from you. John
Comment from dmt1967
I like this story and the method of teaching children right from wrong is crucial and your story does that. It teaches them a valuable lesson, friends are hard to find, so don't ruin it by spreading gossip around about them. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2015
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I like this story and the method of teaching children right from wrong is crucial and your story does that. It teaches them a valuable lesson, friends are hard to find, so don't ruin it by spreading gossip around about them. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2015
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Thank you dmt got a great review. I'm glad I hit the right buttons. John
Comment from scd41
Gossiping is infectous and rumours fly thick and fast in gossips. Nobody takes the trouble to separate truth from rumours. Your story is interesting for children. It has a moral lesson which should be learnt and put into practice by children and adults alike: do not believe in rumours and verify the truth yourself instead of going by what gossipers like you to believe.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2015
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Gossiping is infectous and rumours fly thick and fast in gossips. Nobody takes the trouble to separate truth from rumours. Your story is interesting for children. It has a moral lesson which should be learnt and put into practice by children and adults alike: do not believe in rumours and verify the truth yourself instead of going by what gossipers like you to believe.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2015
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Thank you scd for reading and sharing your thoughts. John
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi jmdg1954
Sounds like a lesson a lot of folk would benefit from taking on board. Nicely told and a fun way to impart it to kids.
One correction for you -
Your learning." - ... you're (you are) learning."
Patrick
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2015
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Hi jmdg1954
Sounds like a lesson a lot of folk would benefit from taking on board. Nicely told and a fun way to impart it to kids.
One correction for you -
Your learning." - ... you're (you are) learning."
Patrick
Comment Written 08-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2015
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Thank you Patrick. I appreciate you reading and reviewing. John
Comment from marijmd
I have two beagles - you need to add in a section of Mango uncontrollably eating anything in sight! LOL
Well a good lesson from a true friend - dont spread rumors!
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2015
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I have two beagles - you need to add in a section of Mango uncontrollably eating anything in sight! LOL
Well a good lesson from a true friend - dont spread rumors!
Comment Written 08-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2015
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We had a beagle for 16 years before having to put her to sleep. They are great dogs, and yes, will eat until they are over satiated.
Thank you for the review. John
Comment from boxergirl
What a great way to teach children and grownups the rules about gossiping, especially if it is about your friend. Your characters are cute and their dialogue us engaging. 8-)
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2015
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What a great way to teach children and grownups the rules about gossiping, especially if it is about your friend. Your characters are cute and their dialogue us engaging. 8-)
Comment Written 08-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2015
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Thank you boxer girl for a great review.
I certainly appreciate it. John
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
I thoroughly enjoyed this story.
It has interest, momentum and closure, plus a wonderful lesson to learn.
The characters were fun and introduced nicely into the story.
Grammar, punctuation and formatting were well done.
One glitch -3rd line from bottom. Your=you're.
A virtual six.
:-) Shirley
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2015
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I thoroughly enjoyed this story.
It has interest, momentum and closure, plus a wonderful lesson to learn.
The characters were fun and introduced nicely into the story.
Grammar, punctuation and formatting were well done.
One glitch -3rd line from bottom. Your=you're.
A virtual six.
:-) Shirley
Comment Written 07-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2015
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I need to make that correction, thank you.
As always, I appreciate your reviews. John
Comment from chasennov
A Mango & Bert story "Mango and Ranger Joe" This is a very good children's story you have created here. Also think about a children's story where you make up your own type of animals, with their own unique dialogue. Well done.
check: 'Sure, Hugo(,)' Mango answered(,) 'just follow us.'
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2015
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A Mango & Bert story "Mango and Ranger Joe" This is a very good children's story you have created here. Also think about a children's story where you make up your own type of animals, with their own unique dialogue. Well done.
check: 'Sure, Hugo(,)' Mango answered(,) 'just follow us.'
Comment Written 07-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2015
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chase,,, thank you for stopping to read and review. John
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You are most welcome, John.
Comment from Connie C
What a fun story this is, John, with a lesson to be learned by both children and some adults. You brought these charming animals to life in your story, and I enjoyed the dialogue between them. I do have to admit, though, that I wondered just what Mango was going to divulge about Ranger Joe. Best to keep us guessing, I suppose. Nice job with this.
Connie
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2015
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What a fun story this is, John, with a lesson to be learned by both children and some adults. You brought these charming animals to life in your story, and I enjoyed the dialogue between them. I do have to admit, though, that I wondered just what Mango was going to divulge about Ranger Joe. Best to keep us guessing, I suppose. Nice job with this.
Connie
Comment Written 07-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2015
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Thank you Connie for reading and such am encouraging review. I always appreciate when you stop by. John
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Very good, John. A lesson not just kids need to learn, but their parents too! Well expressed thru the dialogue... easy for a child to comprehend. Bravo!
A few things to fix:
>> Your learning << You're = You are. Your = belonging to you.
>> I guess the lesson here is, don't let a rumor << Incorrect comma. Remove it.
>> interjected Belinda Bunny.<< The rule is use ONLY "said" or "asked", even in adult books. Kids won't know what "interjected" means and it stands out anyway. You never want speech tags to stand out. You want them as unnoticeable as possible, which is why you stick to "said" and "asked" when you use speech tags instead of action tags. A mix of both is best.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2015
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Very good, John. A lesson not just kids need to learn, but their parents too! Well expressed thru the dialogue... easy for a child to comprehend. Bravo!
A few things to fix:
>> Your learning << You're = You are. Your = belonging to you.
>> I guess the lesson here is, don't let a rumor << Incorrect comma. Remove it.
>> interjected Belinda Bunny.<< The rule is use ONLY "said" or "asked", even in adult books. Kids won't know what "interjected" means and it stands out anyway. You never want speech tags to stand out. You want them as unnoticeable as possible, which is why you stick to "said" and "asked" when you use speech tags instead of action tags. A mix of both is best.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2015
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Phyllis, I thought I responded but must not have sent it. Sorry. I think you were my first review. Thank you, thank you for a great one and the corrections. I always appreciate hearing from you. John