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A Sound of Thunder

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Comment from Dean Kuch
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The story of Sampson, from the Book of Judges, I believe. Delilah sure cut him down to size when she lopped of his long flowing locks of hair. But, it's not the first time a woman has managed to bring a good man down, nor will it be the last.

Well done, and an excellent retelling of the Biblical tale.

Good luck to you in the contest. :}

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2014


reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014
    Thanks, Dean
reply by Dean Kuch on 18-Oct-2014
    N/P
Comment from sunnilicious
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The illustration and last paragraph do not match. The last paragraph makes me think of women in the Middle East. It may be wise to add Galath's name in there. I would toss the last paragraph... but you need a 100 words.

Otherwise, well thought out and clearly written. Good visual imagery. Great story.

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2014


reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014
    Thank you - hard to find the perfect picture...
reply by sunnilicious on 18-Oct-2014
    You earned it. Enjoy.
Comment from Spitfire
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I'm not sure what to make of this. Sounds like a pagan ritual with human sacrifice. The main character could be someone who finally found Christianity. Just a thought. It is beautifully written.

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2014


reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014
    Thank you.

    I as trying to give a glimpse of the final moments of Sampson, so yes, he did regain his faith...
Comment from w.j.debi
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This sounds like the story of Samson after his hep air grew back. The thunder must be the warning of what is about to happen to the Philistines. You have captured an important moment in time with depth, understanding and a hint of danger.

 Comment Written 17-Oct-2014


reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014
    Thank you.
Comment from Trybuck
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and in that moment, killed more Philistines in death, than you did in all your life.

Though he messed up
he did fess up
and God used him mightily

Well done, Buck

 Comment Written 17-Oct-2014


reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014
    Thanks, Buck.
Comment from Winslow
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Dear Writer,

A well told story of Samson's destruction of the idolaters temple. You have to read carefully to realize what you are relating.

Good luck in the contest.

Regards,

A FS

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 Comment Written 17-Oct-2014


reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014
    Thanks for the kind words.