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Viewing comments for Prologue "Path of Release"From victim to survivor of abuse.
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Comment from krys123
Shirley;
A very well written story within a poem that showed a reckless relationship and a partial love Of one while the other was indeed not in love as much, if it is not at all.
Your work was very well written and I enjoyed reading the story within a poem very much.
The rhyming was consistent and distinct and neither forced nor labored. While it helped with the rhythmic flow which flowed smoothly throughout the poem.
The imagery was differentially sad and very descriptive as well as delicately expressive throughout: "God has forgiven you, and I have to, cutting threads of my past, set you free too, Wherever you are, may God grant you peace, he walks with me on this path of release." The forgiveness is present within these lines And shows a definite remorse and a love still for the parents, especially the mother and indeed, the father.
Thank you so much for sharing and posting this for everyone to read and may the good Lord be with you always, my friend.
Alex
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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Shirley;
A very well written story within a poem that showed a reckless relationship and a partial love Of one while the other was indeed not in love as much, if it is not at all.
Your work was very well written and I enjoyed reading the story within a poem very much.
The rhyming was consistent and distinct and neither forced nor labored. While it helped with the rhythmic flow which flowed smoothly throughout the poem.
The imagery was differentially sad and very descriptive as well as delicately expressive throughout: "God has forgiven you, and I have to, cutting threads of my past, set you free too, Wherever you are, may God grant you peace, he walks with me on this path of release." The forgiveness is present within these lines And shows a definite remorse and a love still for the parents, especially the mother and indeed, the father.
Thank you so much for sharing and posting this for everyone to read and may the good Lord be with you always, my friend.
Alex
Comment Written 03-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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Thank you Alex.
Your continued support and positive reviews are much appreciated.
:) Shirley
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You are so sincerely welcome my friend.
Alex
Comment from Nichola
This is a very good and thoughtfully written poem in AABB rhyming quatrains. The flow was natural and not forced. This poem rings true with deep honesty and reflection on one's life. Well written.
Nichola
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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This is a very good and thoughtfully written poem in AABB rhyming quatrains. The flow was natural and not forced. This poem rings true with deep honesty and reflection on one's life. Well written.
Nichola
Comment Written 02-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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Thank you Nichola.
I appreciate this review and generous stars.
:) Shirley
Comment from GracieAnn
Shirley, this is a moving write that depicts a dysfunctional noncommunicative home of which there were many even in our time as boomers. I share many similarities in my own story. The b b and so forth rhyme is well chosen and it tells a powerful story of the chains of bitterness versus the freedom of forgiveness. Well done. :0 GracieAnn
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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Shirley, this is a moving write that depicts a dysfunctional noncommunicative home of which there were many even in our time as boomers. I share many similarities in my own story. The b b and so forth rhyme is well chosen and it tells a powerful story of the chains of bitterness versus the freedom of forgiveness. Well done. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 02-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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Thank you.
I appreciate your thoughts
It is easier to find the words when they come, in truth, from my heart.
:) Shirley
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hey, Shirley...
I often wonder why people who clearly don't love each stay together and live a life of anger an destruction.
I suppose that it comes so natural that they don't know any different way to live.
So sad for you and your siblings to have to endure. Easy to see why there would be lingering affects.
I'm pleased that you have comes to terms with things, as much as one can. I should think not all the bad can ever be laid to rest completely.
Writing is probably a great therapy for you. This is very well stated. The pain and heartache come through, as well as your accepting what is, just is.
Take care & blessings to you for being a survivor, my friend.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax (*.*)
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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Hey, Shirley...
I often wonder why people who clearly don't love each stay together and live a life of anger an destruction.
I suppose that it comes so natural that they don't know any different way to live.
So sad for you and your siblings to have to endure. Easy to see why there would be lingering affects.
I'm pleased that you have comes to terms with things, as much as one can. I should think not all the bad can ever be laid to rest completely.
Writing is probably a great therapy for you. This is very well stated. The pain and heartache come through, as well as your accepting what is, just is.
Take care & blessings to you for being a survivor, my friend.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax (*.*)
Comment Written 02-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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Dear Jax,
I truly appreciate not just the gracious reviews you write but the friendship you offer as well.
Writing has been extremely therapeutic and I have grown so much in the 18 months I have beeen writing on this site.
Acknowledging and sharing the sad, shameful and secret parts of my life is my path to emotional freedom and growth.
I have never been able to do this as a family with my siblings, spouse or children. An anonymous reader makes it easier.
Thank you for offering the hand of friendship on this journey and for continuing to read.
God Bless.
:) Shirley
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Hey, Shirley...
I think as writers, our greatest asset is to be able to put our feelings out there.
I've always thought talking about adversity is better than holding it in. If you do, it just stifles one's spirit.
That's why I can get into Breanna's head, because 'she' is 'me' when I was married to my first hubby.
If I didn't talk about my youngest and his wild past, I'd be a basket case.
If people aren't willing to listen to you, comfort you, and just be there for you, then you don't need them around. Friends do that for each other.
I have a wonderful friend, (also my boss) who when I was first sick would hold my coffee cup with a straw in it so I could drink it. This was done in a fancy restaurant in front of a gazillion people at a Christmas party for our supervisors. You just can't put a price on such friendship. We live 3-hrs away from each other now. But we never miss a beat when picking up the phone to talk.
Keep on doing what you're doing. (*.*)
Cheers... Jax
Comment from l.raven
Hi Shirley, I'm so sorry you had to go through that...I had a few tough times in mine too!!! but have forgiven my mother...she has to face God for her wrongs...but did have good times in our lives too!!! we just have to make our own journeys...they were a very beautiful couple...very well written...luff Linda...xxoo
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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Hi Shirley, I'm so sorry you had to go through that...I had a few tough times in mine too!!! but have forgiven my mother...she has to face God for her wrongs...but did have good times in our lives too!!! we just have to make our own journeys...they were a very beautiful couple...very well written...luff Linda...xxoo
Comment Written 02-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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Thank you Linda.
Your generous and caring reviews are so appreciated.
:) Shirley
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thank you so much Shirley...luff
Comment from Selina Stambi
Hello, my dear Shirley,
I've been so touched by the writing that's been born from this journey of healing you are on.
It's a sad story. But God ... :)
Whom the Son has set free, is free indeed.
God bless you, my friend.
Have a blessed week.
Sonali :)
lifestyle was not (no comma needed here) what mother had
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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Hello, my dear Shirley,
I've been so touched by the writing that's been born from this journey of healing you are on.
It's a sad story. But God ... :)
Whom the Son has set free, is free indeed.
God bless you, my friend.
Have a blessed week.
Sonali :)
lifestyle was not (no comma needed here) what mother had
Comment Written 02-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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Thank you Sonali.
I appreciate your comments and stars.
I realise this is my journey, and I am already feeling the positive effects of releasing and sharing. The threads have to be cut and woven in for healing to be complete.
I am writing these poems selfishly for myself and my family so I can become the best person I can be.
I will be composing a book just for my family so they understand who I was, am now, and want to become.
:) Shirley
Thanks for understanding.
Comment from Dawny53
Your writing will be a wonderful release for you.. this is really an excellent heartfelt poem that will indeed touch many hearts. I expect to see ribbons under it quite soon.. keep it up there!
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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Your writing will be a wonderful release for you.. this is really an excellent heartfelt poem that will indeed touch many hearts. I expect to see ribbons under it quite soon.. keep it up there!
Comment Written 02-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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Thank you. I appreciate this thoughtful review.
It was important for me to acknowledge, accept and deal with so many emotions.For so long, and for so many reasons, I have kept them repressed. My life has been affected and now as I age gracefully I need to cut the last threads and ...let go.
I want to be all that I can be for my family and myself.
Comment from Linda Engel
I am from a broken home as well . Back when your mother was young it wasn't acceptable to be single with children, you married and birth control was not in effect, Sounds like father wanted children , mother resented father, little money, no rest, not happy with husband. bitterness sets in and the abuse is there. And they stay for the children, . My parents divorced when I was ten and years of abuse on mom and sister ( not me) He died of cancer five years later. A lot of issues with both parents but now, at 63, I had to come to terms when mom dies last year.
My family is whole and my child and grandchildren are healthy and happy. That is al that matters and not anything of my childhood. You recognize the hurt and you put it away and leave it alone. Very good poem to allow you to come to terms .and go on. God Bless You...Linda
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reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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I am from a broken home as well . Back when your mother was young it wasn't acceptable to be single with children, you married and birth control was not in effect, Sounds like father wanted children , mother resented father, little money, no rest, not happy with husband. bitterness sets in and the abuse is there. And they stay for the children, . My parents divorced when I was ten and years of abuse on mom and sister ( not me) He died of cancer five years later. A lot of issues with both parents but now, at 63, I had to come to terms when mom dies last year.
My family is whole and my child and grandchildren are healthy and happy. That is al that matters and not anything of my childhood. You recognize the hurt and you put it away and leave it alone. Very good poem to allow you to come to terms .and go on. God Bless You...Linda
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Comment Written 02-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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Thank you Linda.
I appreciate your caring and thoughtful review.
To review with understanding is significant to me because when you have lived it you understand where the sentiments come from.
I'm glad that you have also found peace.
:) Shirley
Comment from granny goes viral
The Healing Pen, my dear. This is an excellent example.
One correction...that is common. It is "couldn't care less". Common error. Good job.
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reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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The Healing Pen, my dear. This is an excellent example.
One correction...that is common. It is "couldn't care less". Common error. Good job.
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Comment Written 02-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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Thank you for reviewing.
:) Shirley