Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

I like the image you chose for your poem. The syllable count is correct. I like the cute dog in the image. I see nothing to change. Good job and good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 23-Sep-2014

Thanks jannypan for the great review.

Comment from sweetwoodjax

Excellent

this is an excellent write, mystery writer, you did an excellent job writing this short poem of the essence of Halloween without using the word. good luck in the contest

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 23-Sep-2014

Thanks so much....

Comment from Nosha17

Excellent

Hah, so that time has come around again, Halloween. I am not very fond of it, I like the apples and pumpkins best! Well chosen words to convey your thoughts. I like the picture. Good luck in the contest. Faye

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 23-Sep-2014

Thanks Faye, I like seeing the little kids , other than that, well the candy is nice too..LOL

Comment from Trybuck

Excellent

Almost time for the festivities to begin and hopefully we can enjoy them all without ones sighting of ghost, ghouls, or goblins and especially no zombies allowed... Well done with your entry, Buck

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 23-Sep-2014

Thanks Buck, oooooooooooooOOOOOOOO0000OOOOOOOOOoooooooooo...

Comment from mikemagine

Excellent

This seems very well linked, as though each word were perfectly connected to each other. Seemingly very good rhythm. I've still got a LOT to learn, especially about poetry...

Great job.

Mike

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 23-Sep-2014

Thanks Mike, I find that entering prompts ( I seldom win LOL) are a good way to try out new forms. The 5-7-5 is one of my favorite 'short' form of poetry.

reply by mikemagine on 23-Sep-2014

Well, win or not, I'd just keep trying. Namely, like you say, for trying new forms, but also for increase in skill and experience.

Peace,

Mike

Comment from kiwisteveh

Good

I liked your first line with its strong alliteration (although I think you need the plural of ghost)

However I felt line 2 was weak - it goes without saying that these critters can frighten you - how about some more monsters or perhaps some powerful adjectives?

Good luck.

Steve

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 Comment Written 23-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 23-Sep-2014

Thanks Steve for your review. I am confused (maybe too many ghost around, what would be the plural of ghost...gheest...?

reply by the author on 23-Sep-2014

Oh BTW, I made that Ghosts.... :-) Thanks again

Comment from Eric1

Excellent

This is a wonderfully written 5-7-5 for this Halloween competition my friend, great description and imagery, wonderful alliteration, I wish you good luck in the contest.

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 Comment Written 23-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 23-Sep-2014

Thanks Eric1, shhhhhh, can't say the H word. LOL I appreciate your good wishes....

reply by Eric1 on 23-Sep-2014

You are most welcome shhhhh, I thought it was you lol.

reply by the author on 23-Sep-2014

:-)