Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Excellent

Hi,

Great format and presentation for your really well-stated poem. More forgiveness in the world would be a beautiful thing.

Good luck in the contest

Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax (*>*)

 Comment Written 19-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 19-Sep-2014

Thanks a bunch, Jax. I sincerely appreciate your kind and thoughtful review. :}

Comment from gypsymoth

Excellent

These words can heal more disease than penicillin.
Unforgiveness eats away like a disease. Concise, alright.

Gypsymoth

 Comment Written 19-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 19-Sep-2014

Thanks so much for a wonderful review, gypsymoth. You are so right, my friend. The only one we hurt when we harbor hatred in our hearts for someone is ourselves.

Comment from 4caresmiles

Excellent

Very nice and oh, so true! I wish you the best of luck in your contest. I do believe that you have said much in few lines with few words!

 Comment Written 19-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 19-Sep-2014

Thanks so much for a lovely review, 4caresmiles. I truly appreciate it. :}

Comment from Wendyanne

Excellent

Although this is a very short Gogyoshi it certainly packs a punch! It is extremely thought-provoking and I enjoyed it very much. Good luck!

 Comment Written 19-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 19-Sep-2014

Thanks, Wendyanne. You are too kind. :}

Comment from kiwisteveh

Good

Getting down to bumper sticker philosophy now.

There is a powerful message in your brief poem.

I suspect 'bondage' as an abstract noun is unlikely to be used in the plural - you could always switch to 'bonds' or just use 'bondage'

Good luck.

Steve

 Comment Written 19-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 19-Sep-2014

Thanks, Steve, and I made a slight change. I really appreciate your honesty and your review. :)

Comment from Pyrrho

Good

The logic of you poem, if that is what it is, is lost on me. First off, I find the idea of death as a bondage too far fetched. The gods created death so an act of forgiveness (which I assume comes from a god or a being that controls death) for one person, or for a specific class of people is not a particularly nice godly act. It is mean to all those who do not receive the NOBLESSE OBLIGE favor

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 Comment Written 19-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 19-Sep-2014

Actually, I meant no religious references at all, Pyrrho, so I suppose it was lost on you after all. I was speaking more about those who suffer abuse, that by forgiving the one who abused them, they could escape the bondage in life they so often face. I see no references to anything spiritual in my poem in the slightest. You simply chose to interpret it that way.

reply by Pyrrho on 19-Sep-2014

I am sorry I saw in your words what you had no intent of putting. However, once you turn a work loose, it takes on all the enaings of those who read it. I saw what I saw whether it was your intent or not. Such is the reality of writing. it is difficult to be precise and if you read what I wrote, the logic of my interpretation is in your words.

reply by the author on 19-Sep-2014

You are right, we can't help how others interpret our writing. I just wanted you to know that I wasn't preaching any particular faith here.

Comment from sweetwoodjax

Excellent

this is an excellent write, mystery writer, you did an excellent job picking the perfect words for this gogyshi poem write. I wish you the best of luck in the contest

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 Comment Written 19-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 19-Sep-2014

Thanks, sweetwoodjax. You're very kind. :}