Comment from Winslow

Exceptional

Dear Seken,

This is a poem filled with regret. What might of been is highlighted in your poem. Tis sad that your dad and you never got together to bond.

Warm regards,

Winslow

 Comment Written 07-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 08-Sep-2014

Thank you Winslow.
Your generous and thoughtful review and amazing six stars are much appreciated.
It is strange that as a child I was so intent on surviving an abusive family life that I never really focussed on what was missing or wrong in my life.
As I grew older I really missed the love of a dad and the enrichment a father brings to his children.
It has taken a long time to address these feelings and finally reach for some insight into how my dad must have felt through all those years of family ostracism and isolation.
It is such a shameful loss.
:) Shirley

Comment from Carole Rosa

Excellent

Seken, This is a heartbreaking piece of work. However, it is so very well written and your father's photo is handsome. My daughters can compare their fatherless life with yours. Sad for everyone concerned. Carole

 Comment Written 07-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 08-Sep-2014

It is strange that as a child I was so intent on surviving an abusive family life that I never really focussed on what was missing or wrong in my life.
As I grew older I really missed the love of a dad and the enrichment a father brings to his children.
Thank you Carole.
I appreciate your generous review.
In looking at his photo you know almost as much about my dad as I do. Upon reflection it seems like such a waste.
It has taken a long time to address these feelings and finally reach for some insight into how my dad must have felt through all those years of family ostracism and isolation.
It is such a shameful loss.
:) Shirley

reply by Carole Rosa on 08-Sep-2014

Shirley, Thank you for this heartfelt reply. I appreciate you. Hugs. Carole

Comment from krys123

Excellent

Shirley;
what a very heartfelt, sincere and lightly tearjerking type of poetry that I enjoyed reading and sincerely was emotional on this and reading this on my own.
Before I begin with the technical I must say that
your feelings and emotions have really poured through your words and I felt each line in each word to be very heartfelt and touching.
Your rhyming was neither forced nor labored You and your rhythm Flowed smoothly throughout your writing while you're rhyming also helped with your rhythmic flow.
The imagery was very sad in a way but him also in a way showing like is a little closure to the relationship.
This being may be so dear imagery was very descriptive and exquisitely expressive throughout your writing with lines like this: "I watch my children with my dad, Within my heart I feel so glad, Respect and love are shining through, A bond of love that's ever true." Those lines are the lines that touch my heart so dearly.
Would like to thank you so much for sharing and posting this for everyone including myself and may the good Lord be with you always Shirley.
Alex

 Comment Written 07-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 08-Sep-2014

Thank you Alex.
Your generous and thoughtful review is much appreciated. I am very proud to know, that as a poet, I managed to touch your heart... with the truth.
It is strange that as a child I was so intent on surviving an abusive family life that I never really focussed on what was missing or wrong in my life.
As I grew older I really missed the love of a dad and the enrichment a father brings to his children.
It has taken a long time to address these feelings and finally reach for some insight into how my dad must have felt through all those years of family ostracism and isolation.
It is such a shameful loss.
:) Shirley

reply by krys123 on 08-Sep-2014

Thank you so much for sharing and may you the Lord be with you always Shirley.
Alex

Comment from Sam Mendonca

Exceptional

Great written poem with such deep feelings and descriptive wording.

So sad that so many people didn't get the chance to know their dad.


Excellent write, my friend. (smile)

 Comment Written 07-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 07-Sep-2014

Thank you so much.
I appreciate your amazing six star review.
I tend to get a little reflective and pensive around special days, especially as both my parents have now passed.
Again thanks for reading.
I am now back onsite as often as my muse desires.
:)Shirley

Comment from zanya

Excellent

Our emotional ties are the threads that truly bind us and support and succour us especially in times of stress and loneliness - separation well captured here

 Comment Written 07-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 07-Sep-2014

Thank you for a thoughtful review.
I appreciate your time and comments.

Comment from nancy_e_davis

Excellent

A sweet reflection on your relationship with your father. That is sad. I was lucky to have a great father and I was lucky enough to get to know him as a person. Love continues even if relationships don't. Well done. Nancy

 Comment Written 07-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 07-Sep-2014

Thank you Nancy.
I appreciate your thoughtful and insightful review.
:) Shirley

Comment from angelajfrank

Exceptional

I never lost my father. But I lost my mother so I know how
you feel in life. I got married again. But your poem is real good.

 Comment Written 07-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 07-Sep-2014

Thank you so much for an amazing six star review.
It is lovely to have my poetry understood and appreciated.
I'm sorry to hear of the sadness in your life as well.
:) Shirley

reply by angelajfrank on 08-Sep-2014

thank u and your welcome

Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Exceptional

Hi Shirley,

When I read poems like yours, I feel even luckier of the bond I shared with my dad. Albeit, during my teenage years, I truly doubt whether he had a heart. And, of course, he was dumb as dirt too. UNTIL, I had kids of my own, and then, I discovered he did have a HUGE heart, and his dumb got VERY smart!! LOL.

This is a heartwarming dedication to you dad. I'm so sorry you didn't get to share your lives. Bitterness of divorce causes so many repercussions. It's nice you used his photo.

Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*^*)

P.S.
I hope you're back after your little hiatus. I just started posting Book 1 of 4 books - The Allister Series'
Book 1 - Dare To Dream. Hope you can get in on it.

 Comment Written 07-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 07-Sep-2014

Thank you Jax.
An amazing six star review-surely makes my heart sing.
It is odd how our perception of our life, and those within it, changes as we age. What we once thought was cast in stone, is often not necessarily so.
I appreciate your ongoing support and positive presence.
Yes, I am back onsite whenever my muse decides to enlighten me.
Sorry I have missed so much of your writing. I hope all is going well.
:) Shirley

Comment from sweetwoodjax

Excellent

this is an excellent write, seken, and I am so sorry you were not able to know him well enough to have a relationship with him. he was a handsome man

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 Comment Written 07-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 07-Sep-2014

Thank you so much.
I appreciate your review and stars.
I still have a sadness in my heat at this time of year.
:) Shirley

Comment from Ben Colder

Excellent

Too many families suffer this loss among so many children. Such a sad thing. I appreciate your nice poem. Thanks for sharing. Blessings to you.

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 Comment Written 07-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 07-Sep-2014

Thank you Ben.
Your thoughtful and understanding review is much appreciated.