The Heart of Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 69 "Sweet and lovely sounds (5-7-5)"'Tis not the Bard, but pretty good poetry anyway
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Comment from angelface2
what a sweet idea. If only all would feel this way. I have someone, who got mad at me and has not as yet forgiven. It's 2 1/2 yrs. now. Sad. Nicely written, Carolyn. Hugs. Miss Sally
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2014
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what a sweet idea. If only all would feel this way. I have someone, who got mad at me and has not as yet forgiven. It's 2 1/2 yrs. now. Sad. Nicely written, Carolyn. Hugs. Miss Sally
Comment Written 18-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2014
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Thanks so much, Miss Sally, :-) Carolyn
Comment from Sarah Butterfly
What a pity you were too late for the contest, because this is a very nice entry. Good opposition between sweet, lovely and unkind with forgiveness resolving the difference between these two. Good alliteration of the f sound in the last line and the s sound in the first one.
Kind regards
Sarah
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2014
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What a pity you were too late for the contest, because this is a very nice entry. Good opposition between sweet, lovely and unkind with forgiveness resolving the difference between these two. Good alliteration of the f sound in the last line and the s sound in the first one.
Kind regards
Sarah
Comment Written 18-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2014
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Thank you Sarah for this wonderfully encouraging review. So glad you enjoyed it.
:-) Have a great day,
Carolyn
Comment from Jay Squires
It is too bad you missed the contest. This seems to be an almost perfect 5-7-5. There is such a complex play of adversaries between line one and two and the two enemies are reconciled with the love that comes from the third.
Bravo!
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2014
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It is too bad you missed the contest. This seems to be an almost perfect 5-7-5. There is such a complex play of adversaries between line one and two and the two enemies are reconciled with the love that comes from the third.
Bravo!
Comment Written 18-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2014
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Thank you for this affirming review. I'm sorry I missed it too. :-) Carolyn
Comment from Pyrrho
I am not sure I understand what you love to hate, the fight or the forgiveness. Ah, they are the words hurled at you and you do the forgiving and hate both. Right.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2014
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I am not sure I understand what you love to hate, the fight or the forgiveness. Ah, they are the words hurled at you and you do the forgiving and hate both. Right.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2014
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Thanks for the review, I will leave the interpretation to the reader. :-) Carolyn
Comment from Raphael Montonaro
A Six Banger!....for this Haiku about forgiveness! Very well written with a surpub turning line. This is what Haiku is all about Great job!
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2014
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A Six Banger!....for this Haiku about forgiveness! Very well written with a surpub turning line. This is what Haiku is all about Great job!
Comment Written 18-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2014
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You are my hero, thanks for the wonderful review and award.
So glad you enjoyed this one. :-) Carolyn
Comment from dennis0530
Too late for the contest but still the author decided to share it. This already fulfills the purpose of the contest and that of the writer as well. That it was entered with the knowing that it will not win anything is also an opposite.
I see there is ambivalence in the lines. Whose sounds? whose words? The giver or the target? In anger, there is also dark delight in hurling unkind words.
And...forgiveness follows. For cursing or the forgiveness of a gracious cursed?
The sweet and lovely sounds; unkind words hurled in anger and the forgiveness that follows could hold true for both.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2014
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Too late for the contest but still the author decided to share it. This already fulfills the purpose of the contest and that of the writer as well. That it was entered with the knowing that it will not win anything is also an opposite.
I see there is ambivalence in the lines. Whose sounds? whose words? The giver or the target? In anger, there is also dark delight in hurling unkind words.
And...forgiveness follows. For cursing or the forgiveness of a gracious cursed?
The sweet and lovely sounds; unkind words hurled in anger and the forgiveness that follows could hold true for both.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2014
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Thanks Dennis, I hadn't thought of that, but I am glad I posted it as well. The reviews have been interesting. Have a great week.
Carolyn
Comment from Tomes Johnston
This is a very well-crafted piece of writing that the author has created with this poem. It is also very true. We can have a love-hate relationship, where the best part is the making up afterwards.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2014
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This is a very well-crafted piece of writing that the author has created with this poem. It is also very true. We can have a love-hate relationship, where the best part is the making up afterwards.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2014
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Hi there Tom,
Good to hear from you, you are so right about the love-hate relationship as well.
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Good writing.
Comment from GracieAnn
Carolyn, this is perfect in line and syllable count. The alliteration is an added bonus. It is full of truth and irony. Well done. :0 GracieAnn
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2014
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Carolyn, this is perfect in line and syllable count. The alliteration is an added bonus. It is full of truth and irony. Well done. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 18-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2014
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Thank you GracieAnn, it feels good to be told anything is perfect. Truth and irony, I like that. :-) Carolyn
Comment from royowen
Well done Carolyn, I don't often enter in these short verse poetry competitions, so good luck in this one! But this is great, because you've equeezed in some Godly wisdom, clever girl! I'm hoping you do well! Best of British, Roy
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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2014
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Well done Carolyn, I don't often enter in these short verse poetry competitions, so good luck in this one! But this is great, because you've equeezed in some Godly wisdom, clever girl! I'm hoping you do well! Best of British, Roy
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Comment Written 18-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2014
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Thanks Roy, I was too late for the contest, we are traveling, but had seen it in the voting booth and found the thought interesting. So glad you liked it. That makes it a winner.
Love, Carolyn
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Still good, Stay safe in God! Roy
Comment from Eigle Rull
My friend, I am happy that you posted this anyway. I enjoyed reading it. I had to read your author's notes to understand where you were going with it. But afterwards, it is clear to me. I see your love and hate clearly. Very nice job. I thin this is excellent, my friend.
Always with respect,
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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2014
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My friend, I am happy that you posted this anyway. I enjoyed reading it. I had to read your author's notes to understand where you were going with it. But afterwards, it is clear to me. I see your love and hate clearly. Very nice job. I thin this is excellent, my friend.
Always with respect,
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Comment Written 18-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2014
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What a wonderful review you have given the poem. Thank you so much and I am happy you 'got' it. :-) Carolyn