Many Coats of Skin
Horror Poem contest entry37 total reviews
Comment from costellsgirl33
There is indeed a boogey-man
I learned that a long time ago
This is a great entry for the horror-writing poetry promt
It is incredibly creepy. I image this is a story kids could
tell around a campfire. Very nice
Good luck
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014
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There is indeed a boogey-man
I learned that a long time ago
This is a great entry for the horror-writing poetry promt
It is incredibly creepy. I image this is a story kids could
tell around a campfire. Very nice
Good luck
Comment Written 27-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014
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Thank you for the great review, costellsgirl. I'm glad you liked this dark piece.
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You are very welcome! Such a great job
Arnetta
Comment from Janet Foor
Great picture and presentation to the thriller. You certainly met the requirements of the contest with the more frightful the better. Good abcb rhyme. I may have to check under my bed tonight after reading this. Good luck in the contest.
Janet
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014
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Great picture and presentation to the thriller. You certainly met the requirements of the contest with the more frightful the better. Good abcb rhyme. I may have to check under my bed tonight after reading this. Good luck in the contest.
Janet
Comment Written 27-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much for the fantastic review and the big sixer, Janet. I dearly appreciate the gracious rating and good luck wishes. I'm humbled. I'm glad you liked this dark piece. Thank you again.
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi anon - Seven excellent stanzas in good abcb rhyme throughout. It certainly fits the bill for horror - your first verse is gruesome and it never lets up. NOT TO BE READ BY CHILDREN LOL. But seriously, it really is a frightening story, very well written and I actually found it frightening. I think it's your use of children in the story that gets me. Ugh! Good Luck in the contest. Kind regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014
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Hi anon - Seven excellent stanzas in good abcb rhyme throughout. It certainly fits the bill for horror - your first verse is gruesome and it never lets up. NOT TO BE READ BY CHILDREN LOL. But seriously, it really is a frightening story, very well written and I actually found it frightening. I think it's your use of children in the story that gets me. Ugh! Good Luck in the contest. Kind regards Dorothy
Comment Written 27-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014
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Thank you for the fantastic review, Dorthy. I dearly appreciate the gracious stars and good luck wishes. I'm glad you liked this twisted piece.
Comment from Kingsland
I hear that the boogie man likes to dance, boogie, man, do you get it? Anyways, I liked this poem, it flowed well and has some very good poetic vibrations in its phrases. I enjoyed reading and writing this response for it... John
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014
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I hear that the boogie man likes to dance, boogie, man, do you get it? Anyways, I liked this poem, it flowed well and has some very good poetic vibrations in its phrases. I enjoyed reading and writing this response for it... John
Comment Written 27-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014
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Thank you for the great review, John. I'm glad you liked this twisted piece.
Comment from Kausar_Javeria
Hello there~!
Wow... this gave me goose-bumps. Better remove all the closets from the bedrooms! LOL! Great job! 'There is... a boogey-man'
Great Job. I loved the presentation as well.
Good Luck in the contest! This is my favourite entry!
JazakAllah Khair~!
(God Bless~!)
(^_^)/~KAUSAR~(^_^)
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014
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Hello there~!
Wow... this gave me goose-bumps. Better remove all the closets from the bedrooms! LOL! Great job! 'There is... a boogey-man'
Great Job. I loved the presentation as well.
Good Luck in the contest! This is my favourite entry!
JazakAllah Khair~!
(God Bless~!)
(^_^)/~KAUSAR~(^_^)
Comment Written 27-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014
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Thank you for the fantastic review, Kausar. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Comment from mfowler
Excellent! This is a great horror poem, with just a hint of humour in the statement about the Boogey Man, but I won't mention it because you can't use humour in this prompt. I loved the build up; about the saw, the cromson bath etc. Sets up the character as a real mean one. The fact that he loves to wear a coat made of children is really cool, in a morbid sort of way. But, I loved best the idea of him waiting silently for parents to go to bed after checking for monsters. Your verse is very well constructed and flows very smoothly. A great contender.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014
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Excellent! This is a great horror poem, with just a hint of humour in the statement about the Boogey Man, but I won't mention it because you can't use humour in this prompt. I loved the build up; about the saw, the cromson bath etc. Sets up the character as a real mean one. The fact that he loves to wear a coat made of children is really cool, in a morbid sort of way. But, I loved best the idea of him waiting silently for parents to go to bed after checking for monsters. Your verse is very well constructed and flows very smoothly. A great contender.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014
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Thank you for the great review, mfowler. I really appreciate the gracious stars. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Comment from kiwisteveh
Excellent entry for this Horror contest - I see there are only two entries so far and what a fight there will be between the two of you masters of the genre.
Lots of suspense in the earlier stanzas as the reader absorbs the point of view and then you hit them with that final scary line.
Good luck.
Steve
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014
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Excellent entry for this Horror contest - I see there are only two entries so far and what a fight there will be between the two of you masters of the genre.
Lots of suspense in the earlier stanzas as the reader absorbs the point of view and then you hit them with that final scary line.
Good luck.
Steve
Comment Written 27-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014
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Thank you for the great review, Steve. I really appreciate the generous stars and good luck wishes. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
Oh, well done indeed. You fiend of the night! This is a very well penned poem of the horror genre where you focus on the taking of children. I really did enjoy it and I think you manage this horror concept very well. I think the pause in your last line adds to the horror, and the colour in the presentation is most appropriate. Giddy
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014
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Oh, well done indeed. You fiend of the night! This is a very well penned poem of the horror genre where you focus on the taking of children. I really did enjoy it and I think you manage this horror concept very well. I think the pause in your last line adds to the horror, and the colour in the presentation is most appropriate. Giddy
Comment Written 27-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much for the fantastic review and the big sixer, Giddy. I dearly appreciate the gracious rating. I'm humbled. I'm glad you liked the piece. Thank you again.
Comment from rjuselius
this is definitely brilliant piece of poetic art and fits the requirements perfectly! it truly is a horror story and you can't let children read it. you are a very strong contender!
thank you for sharing!
good luck in the contest!
rebekka x
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014
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this is definitely brilliant piece of poetic art and fits the requirements perfectly! it truly is a horror story and you can't let children read it. you are a very strong contender!
thank you for sharing!
good luck in the contest!
rebekka x
Comment Written 27-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014
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Thank you fantastic review, Rebekka. I really appreciate the gracious stars and good luck wishes. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Comment from Cin
Ok - I have been spectacularly horrified through your wondrous ability to rhyme and tell a story through verse. And I am thorough checking the entire house tonight before I go to bed. Brilliant Poem.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014
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Ok - I have been spectacularly horrified through your wondrous ability to rhyme and tell a story through verse. And I am thorough checking the entire house tonight before I go to bed. Brilliant Poem.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014
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Thank you for the fantastic review and the big sixer, Cin. I dearly appreciate the gracious rating. I'm humbled. I'm glad you liked this twisted piece. Thank you again.