The Flower
Don't make pormises...31 total reviews
Comment from Twilightspire
Yikes.
I would be interested to see what other pictures would illicit.
This story was so perfectly told. From every emotion to every sensation, it was a feast for the eyes. I don't know how you crammed all of the feeling and energy into one compact story, but you managed to capture everything with a beautiful flourish of descriptions and characterization.
This is a great and well told story. Amazing job on this, my friend.
-T.J.
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Yikes.
I would be interested to see what other pictures would illicit.
This story was so perfectly told. From every emotion to every sensation, it was a feast for the eyes. I don't know how you crammed all of the feeling and energy into one compact story, but you managed to capture everything with a beautiful flourish of descriptions and characterization.
This is a great and well told story. Amazing job on this, my friend.
-T.J.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2014
Comment from Eric1
Wow! can you give me a moment while I catch my breath please, what a wonderful erotic piece of writing about two people deeply in love, I felt like a Voyuer reading your wonderful story, hope there's going to be a follow up.
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Wow! can you give me a moment while I catch my breath please, what a wonderful erotic piece of writing about two people deeply in love, I felt like a Voyuer reading your wonderful story, hope there's going to be a follow up.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2014
Comment from Ric Myworld
In my opinion, there takes a special touch to write mature content in a way to make it enjoyable and entertaining without becoming just plain nasty and degrading. Now that doesn't mean that nasty is all bad, in the right setting. Thanks for another well written, fun for all, story. Great job. :-)
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In my opinion, there takes a special touch to write mature content in a way to make it enjoyable and entertaining without becoming just plain nasty and degrading. Now that doesn't mean that nasty is all bad, in the right setting. Thanks for another well written, fun for all, story. Great job. :-)
Comment Written 23-Jun-2014
Comment from padumachitta
HI: well, it is certainly about sex and explicit images not withstanding(pardon the pun) it is a well written work. I admit I am not one for such explicit stuff, I usually turn the pages until the story continues,
But, I can not find any spag, and I will go blushing to my next review.
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HI: well, it is certainly about sex and explicit images not withstanding(pardon the pun) it is a well written work. I admit I am not one for such explicit stuff, I usually turn the pages until the story continues,
But, I can not find any spag, and I will go blushing to my next review.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2014
Comment from barbara.wilkey
This is a very sensual write. Your did a great job writing description of the action. I felt like I was there watching. I didn't feel a lot of emotion or passion.
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This is a very sensual write. Your did a great job writing description of the action. I felt like I was there watching. I didn't feel a lot of emotion or passion.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2014
Comment from livelylinda
lancellot: You have written this story well. A few times it was apparent a man was writing this story because, no matter how you try, you will never know all the thoughts of most women in these situations. However, from the gorgeous picture through the breathtaking escapades, you did good! livelylinda
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lancellot: You have written this story well. A few times it was apparent a man was writing this story because, no matter how you try, you will never know all the thoughts of most women in these situations. However, from the gorgeous picture through the breathtaking escapades, you did good! livelylinda
Comment Written 23-Jun-2014
Comment from Muffins
This is breathless and steamy. Your adult stories do not failed to deliver. Even in a scene of passion you are building up multilayer of tension. Grace is surprised and a bit confused about her husband's behavior, is she really going to bite the bullet and let him take her flower? This is storytelling at its best.
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This is breathless and steamy. Your adult stories do not failed to deliver. Even in a scene of passion you are building up multilayer of tension. Grace is surprised and a bit confused about her husband's behavior, is she really going to bite the bullet and let him take her flower? This is storytelling at its best.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2014
Comment from GeraldS
This is an interesting take on back door romance.
I guess we all take our inspirations wherever we find them. I liked the use of 'Dear Diary' as a vehicle for telling this story. I do hope that this lady keeps her diary locked up when she's not writing in it.
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This is an interesting take on back door romance.
I guess we all take our inspirations wherever we find them. I liked the use of 'Dear Diary' as a vehicle for telling this story. I do hope that this lady keeps her diary locked up when she's not writing in it.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2014
Comment from Sonaleeka
It's awesome!! great writing..
last few lines are really awesome
Heat exploded inside me, and my head shot up from my pillow. His hips slammed into my butt, and I involuntarily moaned in pleasure, but it wasn't right. There was no pain. He wasn't where he was supposed to be. I looked over my shoulder, and stared into his smiling face.
God bless!
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It's awesome!! great writing..
last few lines are really awesome
Heat exploded inside me, and my head shot up from my pillow. His hips slammed into my butt, and I involuntarily moaned in pleasure, but it wasn't right. There was no pain. He wasn't where he was supposed to be. I looked over my shoulder, and stared into his smiling face.
God bless!
Comment Written 23-Jun-2014
Comment from dennis0530
An enjoyable read, I had irregular breathing while doing so.
Nothing dirty here; maybe steamy, then sexual, sensual, erotic and exotic. Just a natural thing to do between man and wife. Maybe many readers will say delectable; other will consider it detestable. But then sex is relative, like food - One man's meat is another man's vegetable.
It is a give and take situation - and it does not matter who gives and who takes as along as both are satisfied.
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An enjoyable read, I had irregular breathing while doing so.
Nothing dirty here; maybe steamy, then sexual, sensual, erotic and exotic. Just a natural thing to do between man and wife. Maybe many readers will say delectable; other will consider it detestable. But then sex is relative, like food - One man's meat is another man's vegetable.
It is a give and take situation - and it does not matter who gives and who takes as along as both are satisfied.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2014
