The Trining
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Comment from lancellot
This is very well written chapter. That it was mostly dialogue was barely noticeable after awhile. I was just got caught in there fast thinking. Plus your two character relayed a lot of information. Well done.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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This is very well written chapter. That it was mostly dialogue was barely noticeable after awhile. I was just got caught in there fast thinking. Plus your two character relayed a lot of information. Well done.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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Thank you, Lancellot for your kind words. I'm glad it didn't leave you wanting.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Jay,
one thing I know when you said-
A man must discover his identity and destiny
I was thinking of Doctorex who has no memory of his past.
when Doctorex was talking to Klasco and Doctorex said
"I mean I don't know! It seemed to just pop into my mind and it was like I opened my mouth and the words simply came out."
Tells me Doctorex doesn't realize he is getting his Memory
Is that so?
Gert
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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Hello Jay,
one thing I know when you said-
A man must discover his identity and destiny
I was thinking of Doctorex who has no memory of his past.
when Doctorex was talking to Klasco and Doctorex said
"I mean I don't know! It seemed to just pop into my mind and it was like I opened my mouth and the words simply came out."
Tells me Doctorex doesn't realize he is getting his Memory
Is that so?
Gert
Comment Written 05-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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Thank you first of all for reading. Now, Gert, you really don't want me to give anything away, do you? LOL, answers will be forthcoming... but also more questions. Glad you are aboard.
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You are welcome Jay okay I will wait
Comment from c_lucas
In a way this reminds me of "A Yankee In King Arthur's Court." This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an interesting read.
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reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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In a way this reminds me of "A Yankee In King Arthur's Court." This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an interesting read.
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Comment Written 05-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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Well, Charlie, I'm glad I haven't read it... or it might sound a lot more like it. Thanks for continuing to read.
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You're welcome, Jay. Charlie
Comment from DanielEkine
Very well written, defined and well-thought out.
A beautiful meeting of the author's mind and creativity.
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NEW TO "THE TRINING" ADVENTURE? There are summaries beginning with Cha. 2 and continuing to Cha. 15 What follows is a summary of Cha. 16:
Part 1: Doctrex and Klasco are in the hallway of the Chamber of Twelve. They are rehearsing the fiction of their childhood and Doctrex's move to the Southern Province when they encounter Britold, the one who had rejected Zurn. Klasco orders him to have the enlistment papers ready and in his box when they leave. They continue their rehearsal and just before they enter the chamber, Klasco "throws him some curves" which baffle him. They are invited into the chamber and after introductions are made, the head of the Chamber, High Count Gylo Typp, inquires about Doctrex's reason for wanting to address the Chamber.
Part 2: What follows is a full-blown oratory that surprises Klasco, as well as Doctrex himself: It ends with his petition to join the Kabeezan army. The Council is so impressed by the presentation that they ask him to go into the hallway to await their decision. While he is in the hallway, he muses over how little control he had over what he said; how the words were magically put into his mouth, to be delivered at precisely the right moment. He feels he was under Axtilla's control the entire time. He returns to discover they rejected his petition to fight alongside the other soldiers. Instead they said they wanted him to lead the army as general.
Chapter Seventeen
"Whether it's an audience of one, a family of four, or a council of twelve you play your role well, Doctrex." Klasco had reins in hand and was waiting for me to climb into the wagon.
"I would like to take credit for it," I said, catching the undercurrent of his words. I pulled myself up to the seat.
"Don't be so modest. You played them like--like a slunum."
"Like a what?"
"A slunum!" he growled. "A slunum!"
I shook my head.
"You know, that musical instrument with so many strings it takes a couple of Ds to master. A slunum. "
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reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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Very well written, defined and well-thought out.
A beautiful meeting of the author's mind and creativity.
"
NEW TO "THE TRINING" ADVENTURE? There are summaries beginning with Cha. 2 and continuing to Cha. 15 What follows is a summary of Cha. 16:
Part 1: Doctrex and Klasco are in the hallway of the Chamber of Twelve. They are rehearsing the fiction of their childhood and Doctrex's move to the Southern Province when they encounter Britold, the one who had rejected Zurn. Klasco orders him to have the enlistment papers ready and in his box when they leave. They continue their rehearsal and just before they enter the chamber, Klasco "throws him some curves" which baffle him. They are invited into the chamber and after introductions are made, the head of the Chamber, High Count Gylo Typp, inquires about Doctrex's reason for wanting to address the Chamber.
Part 2: What follows is a full-blown oratory that surprises Klasco, as well as Doctrex himself: It ends with his petition to join the Kabeezan army. The Council is so impressed by the presentation that they ask him to go into the hallway to await their decision. While he is in the hallway, he muses over how little control he had over what he said; how the words were magically put into his mouth, to be delivered at precisely the right moment. He feels he was under Axtilla's control the entire time. He returns to discover they rejected his petition to fight alongside the other soldiers. Instead they said they wanted him to lead the army as general.
Chapter Seventeen
"Whether it's an audience of one, a family of four, or a council of twelve you play your role well, Doctrex." Klasco had reins in hand and was waiting for me to climb into the wagon.
"I would like to take credit for it," I said, catching the undercurrent of his words. I pulled myself up to the seat.
"Don't be so modest. You played them like--like a slunum."
"Like a what?"
"A slunum!" he growled. "A slunum!"
I shook my head.
"You know, that musical instrument with so many strings it takes a couple of Ds to master. A slunum. "
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Comment Written 05-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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Thank you Daniel. I'm wondering, did you paste what you intended to? I do appreciate your kind remarks as well.
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Yes, I did.