The Heart of Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 52 "5-7-5 Bird Santuary"'Tis not the Bard, but pretty good poetry anyway
22 total reviews
Comment from Rosalyne
Hi, Carolyn.
This is a great poem that says much in few words. A sanctuary that should be a place to heal and be set free. Being tethered is so cruel and takes away all hope. I really like your note at the bottom. The last sentence is strong and so important. Well stated.
Bye
Rosalyne :)
reply by the author on 24-May-2014
Hi, Carolyn.
This is a great poem that says much in few words. A sanctuary that should be a place to heal and be set free. Being tethered is so cruel and takes away all hope. I really like your note at the bottom. The last sentence is strong and so important. Well stated.
Bye
Rosalyne :)
Comment Written 24-May-2014
reply by the author on 24-May-2014
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Thank you Rosalyne, I appreciate your fine comments. :-) Carolyn
Comment from GE Parson
Good morning Carolyn,
Very good 5-7-5 poem. Great photo of America's symbol & mascot. and es I feel the political tethers getting tighter and shorter every year. MARANATHA!! is my hope.
Your Friend,
Jerry
reply by the author on 24-May-2014
Good morning Carolyn,
Very good 5-7-5 poem. Great photo of America's symbol & mascot. and es I feel the political tethers getting tighter and shorter every year. MARANATHA!! is my hope.
Your Friend,
Jerry
Comment Written 24-May-2014
reply by the author on 24-May-2014
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Isn't that the truth, thank you Jerry,
:-) Carolyn
Comment from Cajungirl
Perfect syllable count per line. I have yet to master the art of a great 5 7 5, you've nailed it. This is a beautiful photo. Freedom is an easy word to say, but its meaning is hard to grasp. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 24-May-2014
Perfect syllable count per line. I have yet to master the art of a great 5 7 5, you've nailed it. This is a beautiful photo. Freedom is an easy word to say, but its meaning is hard to grasp. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 24-May-2014
reply by the author on 24-May-2014
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I am happy to share, and I thank you for your kind comments.
:-) Carolyn
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You are welcome.
Comment from MizKat
Hi Carolyn,
This is a nice 5-7-5 commentary poem about the eagle. You took a great picture to go with it. Will the eagle be at the World Bird Sanctuary for the rest of its life? I sure hope not.
Kat
reply by the author on 24-May-2014
Hi Carolyn,
This is a nice 5-7-5 commentary poem about the eagle. You took a great picture to go with it. Will the eagle be at the World Bird Sanctuary for the rest of its life? I sure hope not.
Kat
Comment Written 24-May-2014
reply by the author on 24-May-2014
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I think so. They occasionally move them to other sites but captivity is their life. Thanks for your wonderful review.
Love, Carolyn
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This is a wonderful 5-7-5 and so timely. Your syllable count is spot on and the message beautifully conveyed. Nicely done and I thank you so much for sharing this with me.
reply by the author on 24-May-2014
This is a wonderful 5-7-5 and so timely. Your syllable count is spot on and the message beautifully conveyed. Nicely done and I thank you so much for sharing this with me.
Comment Written 24-May-2014
reply by the author on 24-May-2014
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I appreciate your thoughts on this one.
Comment from Sylvia Page
Bird Sanctuary
tethered Eagle USA
Freedoms price to pay
Taking it literally yes freedom is the price to pay. You mentioned USA so it applies to the people of the the US. Freedom is what a person makes of him or her self whether it is in the US or else where in the world. Everyone wants their freedom. Unfortunately in some cultures women are continued to be tied down like your bald eagle, even in progressive countries out of their jurisdiction.
Blessings,
Sylvia
reply by the author on 24-May-2014
Bird Sanctuary
tethered Eagle USA
Freedoms price to pay
Taking it literally yes freedom is the price to pay. You mentioned USA so it applies to the people of the the US. Freedom is what a person makes of him or her self whether it is in the US or else where in the world. Everyone wants their freedom. Unfortunately in some cultures women are continued to be tied down like your bald eagle, even in progressive countries out of their jurisdiction.
Blessings,
Sylvia
Comment Written 24-May-2014
reply by the author on 24-May-2014
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Dear Sylvia,
Your comments always make me think farther than I would otherwise. Thank you so much, yes oppression is throughout the world.
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Dear Carolyn - a great message in this one and your word choices I loved. Really wonderful word play which packs a hefty note of wisdom.
Great overall job on this work.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen
reply by the author on 25-May-2014
Dear Carolyn - a great message in this one and your word choices I loved. Really wonderful word play which packs a hefty note of wisdom.
Great overall job on this work.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen
Comment Written 24-May-2014
reply by the author on 25-May-2014
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Dear Maureen,
These birds, (of which I took many photos) go from the aviary to the tether. That is their life. I love to see them, but feel sorry for them as well.
Love, Carolyn
Comment from Domino 2
I'm not sure us in the 'free and enlightened' West are 'tethered' much - apart from the continual propaganda we receive from the politicians and media.
Our system sure has many flaws, and I hope we learn to address them - especially for the poor and sick.
Thanks for the very interesting read.
Best wishes, Ted
reply by the author on 25-May-2014
I'm not sure us in the 'free and enlightened' West are 'tethered' much - apart from the continual propaganda we receive from the politicians and media.
Our system sure has many flaws, and I hope we learn to address them - especially for the poor and sick.
Thanks for the very interesting read.
Best wishes, Ted
Comment Written 24-May-2014
reply by the author on 25-May-2014
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As you so wisely said, our system does have flaws. But it is still the best place on earth to be. :-) I so appreciate your comments, as usual Ted.
:-) Carolyn
Comment from royowen
These 5-7-5s are hard to nail, but I think you may have done so with this one! It always seems to me that such a beautiful bird as the bald eagle, you'd think they would be flying free! We'll done, Carolyn, blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 25-May-2014
These 5-7-5s are hard to nail, but I think you may have done so with this one! It always seems to me that such a beautiful bird as the bald eagle, you'd think they would be flying free! We'll done, Carolyn, blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 24-May-2014
reply by the author on 25-May-2014
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Thanks Roy, I enjoy the 5-7-5 form, it challenges me to say a lot in a few words. Glad you liked this one. Eagles are my favorite bird.
Hope you are having a great weekend.
Love, Carolyn
Comment from 9999pool
A sanctuary sounds so grand and beautiful but it it? When our feet are bound by chains from flying too high or too far on our own. We must keep practicing with our beaks to tear away those chains and what do we get - broken beaks? Big smiles.
if the zoo keepers decided to to clip the edges of our wings, practice will not enhance our flying might, :)).
Good write about freedom in a sanctuary meant to constrict and imprison us within the bounds of the political system.
Cheerio, hugs ad love, bro Ritchie. :))
reply by the author on 25-May-2014
A sanctuary sounds so grand and beautiful but it it? When our feet are bound by chains from flying too high or too far on our own. We must keep practicing with our beaks to tear away those chains and what do we get - broken beaks? Big smiles.
if the zoo keepers decided to to clip the edges of our wings, practice will not enhance our flying might, :)).
Good write about freedom in a sanctuary meant to constrict and imprison us within the bounds of the political system.
Cheerio, hugs ad love, bro Ritchie. :))
Comment Written 24-May-2014
reply by the author on 25-May-2014
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Thanks Ritchie for you insightful comments. You 'got it', on all levels. :-) Carolyn
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Welcome. Smiles. The beauty of your poems is that the message is usually loud and clear, lol.
Cheerio, Ritchie. :))