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Comment from adewpearl
Insight/Introspective - love the word play
You do a great job of conveying Billy's anxieties about greeting the world with his new prosthetic eye, and I just love the solution to the situation :-) Excellent use of dialogue. Brooke
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
Insight/Introspective - love the word play
You do a great job of conveying Billy's anxieties about greeting the world with his new prosthetic eye, and I just love the solution to the situation :-) Excellent use of dialogue. Brooke
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Thank you, Brooke, for your encouraging and discerning review.
Comment from Terrie DeGolier
You brought humor into a tragic loss, you did it with taste and heartfelt friends. Humor can ease our pain and as they say laughter is the best medicine. Great job good luck in the writing contest. So few words with a great story.Terrie
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
You brought humor into a tragic loss, you did it with taste and heartfelt friends. Humor can ease our pain and as they say laughter is the best medicine. Great job good luck in the writing contest. So few words with a great story.Terrie
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Thank you, Terrie, for the excellent review.
Comment from bluedragon776
This is very original and witty. I also found it concise and well written, which is what you have to be in this type of contest. Good Luck!
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
This is very original and witty. I also found it concise and well written, which is what you have to be in this type of contest. Good Luck!
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Thank you, bd, for the excellent review.
Comment from Tatarka2
I thought this was outstanding. You did everything that was asked of you in the contest, and you did it in a humorous way that intrigues the reader and holds attention to the end of the piece. Congratulations on a job well done. I hope you do well in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
I thought this was outstanding. You did everything that was asked of you in the contest, and you did it in a humorous way that intrigues the reader and holds attention to the end of the piece. Congratulations on a job well done. I hope you do well in the contest.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Thank you, Thank you, bd, for the excellent review.Tatarka, for the excellent review.
Comment from donaldww
This short-short fills the requirements of the contest perfectly. A character has a conflict, and it is resolved by the end of the story.
Good luck in the contest!
Cheers, DW
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
This short-short fills the requirements of the contest perfectly. A character has a conflict, and it is resolved by the end of the story.
Good luck in the contest!
Cheers, DW
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Thank you, Donald, for the excellent review.
Comment from Pegcook
Everything works together in this story to meet the criteria. The title is perfect for the story's content. The characters' conversation tells the reader all they need to know about them. Really good work!
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
Everything works together in this story to meet the criteria. The title is perfect for the story's content. The characters' conversation tells the reader all they need to know about them. Really good work!
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Thank you, Peg, for the excellent review.
Comment from JBCaine
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Eye-poppingly good!
I enjoyed this bit of encouragement. You managed to bring a a lot of humanity to your character for such a short tale.
Good luck in the contest.
JBCaine-
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
Author X-
Eye-poppingly good!
I enjoyed this bit of encouragement. You managed to bring a a lot of humanity to your character for such a short tale.
Good luck in the contest.
JBCaine-
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Thank you, JB, for the excellent review.
Comment from amada
Great 100 words story. It touch a vein with me because I have had multiple eye surgeries, you name it. I like the subtle humor in your story and the way it makes me smile. Love it!
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
Great 100 words story. It touch a vein with me because I have had multiple eye surgeries, you name it. I like the subtle humor in your story and the way it makes me smile. Love it!
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Thank you, amada, for the excellent review.
Comment from Leineco
Cute riposte I'm being a little introspective."
Nothing eases discomfort more than humor :-)
Well done :-) Good luck in the voting booth!
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
Cute riposte I'm being a little introspective."
Nothing eases discomfort more than humor :-)
Well done :-) Good luck in the voting booth!
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Thank you, Leineco, for the excellent review.
Comment from suep
I enjoyed this short story and the creative approach you use. The character starts out with a serious concern of how others will 'view' him and then you bring light humor into it ... "Billy, you know you've got your fake eyeball in backwards?" .
I love the response ... "Yes, I'm being a little introspective." You do a great job carrying the theme throughout and that it is humorous but in a tasteful way. Excellent work ... Best wishes in the contest! :)
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
I enjoyed this short story and the creative approach you use. The character starts out with a serious concern of how others will 'view' him and then you bring light humor into it ... "Billy, you know you've got your fake eyeball in backwards?" .
I love the response ... "Yes, I'm being a little introspective." You do a great job carrying the theme throughout and that it is humorous but in a tasteful way. Excellent work ... Best wishes in the contest! :)
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Thank you, sue, for the excellent review.