The Heart of Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 59 "Tranquility Descends"'Tis not the Bard, but pretty good poetry anyway
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Comment from jmdg1954
Carolyn,
Excuse me if I feel inept when reading and reviewing this one. I'm a roses are red violets are blue kind of poetry reader...
But, you were alluding to how God creates each day and from dawn to dusk he showers us with love and peace?
Am I even close? John
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2014
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Carolyn,
Excuse me if I feel inept when reading and reviewing this one. I'm a roses are red violets are blue kind of poetry reader...
But, you were alluding to how God creates each day and from dawn to dusk he showers us with love and peace?
Am I even close? John
Comment Written 24-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2014
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Most definitely, I would say you are right on. I don't often use words that have to be pondered on to find the meaning, but this one seemed to deserve a few of the 'not so simple' that I usually write. (Seraphic means sweet, in a heavenly way) You are so good to comment on everything I write, John, Love, Carolyn
Comment from GE Parson
Wow! That's quite a tongue twister poem. I had to look up all those special words to understand what you were saying.
Iv noticed other poets purposely omit punctuation; why do you do this. It makes it difficult to follow the thought being expressed.
Your Friend Jerry
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2014
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Wow! That's quite a tongue twister poem. I had to look up all those special words to understand what you were saying.
Iv noticed other poets purposely omit punctuation; why do you do this. It makes it difficult to follow the thought being expressed.
Your Friend Jerry
Comment Written 24-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2014
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Yes, it is a bit heavier than I usually write. I am glad you looked up the words. Since seraphic means sweet, in a heavenly since, it gives it a bit more depth. As far as the punctuation, I tried it both ways and it maintained the flow without, so I left it that way. Sometimes we can concentrate on the punctuation or use it improperly and the thought is lost in the errors. Sorry it was difficult for you. Have a great week Jerry, :-) Carolyn
Comment from misscookie
The artwork that you choose for your poem is awesome.
It is perfect for your write. I like how you tell the emotions of dust to dawn and night.
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2014
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The artwork that you choose for your poem is awesome.
It is perfect for your write. I like how you tell the emotions of dust to dawn and night.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2014
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Thank you misscookie, for this awesome review and rating. :-) Carolyn
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You're very welcome, until next time.
Cookie
Comment from royowen
Great stuff, exquisitely written, I love the descriptive language. You are talking, of course, your talking about the time sitting in the beauty of God's wonderful times of day when we sit and drink in the wonderment of it all! Well done, Carolyn, beautiful, blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2014
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Great stuff, exquisitely written, I love the descriptive language. You are talking, of course, your talking about the time sitting in the beauty of God's wonderful times of day when we sit and drink in the wonderment of it all! Well done, Carolyn, beautiful, blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2014
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Your comments are so on target. And the peace that passeth all understanding down in our hearts, can only come from Him. Have a great day Roy, Love, Carolyn
Comment from Irish Rain
What a beautiful picture to go with your words of tranquility, a lavender religion of twilight! Lovely!I totally agree, it doesn't happen overnight, but surely happens if we go in that direction! Blessings to you tonight!
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2014
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What a beautiful picture to go with your words of tranquility, a lavender religion of twilight! Lovely!I totally agree, it doesn't happen overnight, but surely happens if we go in that direction! Blessings to you tonight!
Comment Written 24-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2014
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I so appreciate this fine review, and I am glad you it to be an enjoyable read. :-) Carolyn
Comment from DonandVicki
This free verse is well composed and the lack of punctuation gives the reader a lot more freedom to read and interpret the verse in his or her own way. Very well done. Don and Vicki
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2014
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This free verse is well composed and the lack of punctuation gives the reader a lot more freedom to read and interpret the verse in his or her own way. Very well done. Don and Vicki
Comment Written 24-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2014
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Thank you for this wonderful review and affirmation of enjoyment. :-) Carolyn
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, carolyn, you did an excellent job writing this free verse poem about the beauty of God's light as it cuts through the darkness. i enjoyed reading it
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reply by the author on 24-Mar-2014
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this is very well written, carolyn, you did an excellent job writing this free verse poem about the beauty of God's light as it cuts through the darkness. i enjoyed reading it
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Comment Written 24-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2014
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Thanks for reading and enjoying this one, Good night, :-) Carolyn
Comment from Gungalo
Understanding
does not occur
or simply happen over-night
but slowly transcends
Seraphic arrival of twilight
This is beautiful Carolyn and I think you could do without the double lines. It is understood without them girl. Awesome.
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Understanding
does not occur
or simply happen over-night
but slowly transcends
Seraphic arrival of twilight
This is beautiful Carolyn and I think you could do without the double lines. It is understood without them girl. Awesome.
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Comment Written 24-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2014
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Thanks Pam, we were reviewing each other at the same time. I thought about not breaking it up. Will change the form, see what you think. :-) Carolyn
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Awesome girlie.