A Piece of the Pie
A Rogue Piece (PLEASE read author notes)31 total reviews
Comment from jmdg1954
This read perfectly from word one till the last.
I have not read every posting in this rogue banter, but those that I have read, did not disappoint.
Rhyming was spot on, sensible and the pace was also very well kept. Best if luck vs the Hens!!
John
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2014
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This read perfectly from word one till the last.
I have not read every posting in this rogue banter, but those that I have read, did not disappoint.
Rhyming was spot on, sensible and the pace was also very well kept. Best if luck vs the Hens!!
John
Comment Written 22-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much, John, for playing along. Just a bit of fun between friends.
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Of course... That's why it's fun to read and stay "abreast" with. Hmmm, got use that one on the hens!
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Enter the fray, my friend.
Comment from James Dooney
This is pretty cool here. I love how you have included a little bit of the old rogue element that loves to come on in an stir things up abit !
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2014
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This is pretty cool here. I love how you have included a little bit of the old rogue element that loves to come on in an stir things up abit !
Comment Written 21-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much, James. I appreciate it! We have fun with it!
Comment from Maureen's Pen
LOL - Rogue strikes again! This is like one of those billboard signs, neon flashing "come and get me...." and damn you did it all with meter, rhyme so...impressive ....so is ....the poem...ROFL Who needs delicate on Friday night. Well now I am needing to find me some chocolate and FF's
Thanks for a great laugh, may need a cold shower too...: after your last line!! :))
M
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2014
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LOL - Rogue strikes again! This is like one of those billboard signs, neon flashing "come and get me...." and damn you did it all with meter, rhyme so...impressive ....so is ....the poem...ROFL Who needs delicate on Friday night. Well now I am needing to find me some chocolate and FF's
Thanks for a great laugh, may need a cold shower too...: after your last line!! :))
M
Comment Written 21-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2014
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I think he's back for awhile, Maureen, and it means a lot that you enjoy (and understand) that we're just having fun with it all. Many thanks, and I hope you had fun last night with a FF hose. ;)
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LMAO - damn right.:)
hugs
m
Comment from Chocolate Chip
I'm new to your work & didn't know what to expect from the warning before I read the poem. I was pleasantly surprised and enjoyed what transpired in the verses as I continued reading. Your author's notes educated me on the type of poetry I was engaging in & why there was a specific rhythm & flow. I appreciated the piece and will look for more in this series.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2014
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I'm new to your work & didn't know what to expect from the warning before I read the poem. I was pleasantly surprised and enjoyed what transpired in the verses as I continued reading. Your author's notes educated me on the type of poetry I was engaging in & why there was a specific rhythm & flow. I appreciated the piece and will look for more in this series.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2014
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Thank you very much, CC, for your great review. We have a great time with it, and I'm just one rogue against a bunch of clucking hens...all of whom I love bantering with.
Comment from closetpoetjester
It seems to me a victory tune, the Rogue is surely humming
But hun you're ego's so damn big I'll ALWAYS hear you cumming
A stallion, cock, no matter what, a mobile phallic bullet
The guises worn must surely prove you just sit round and pull it!
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2014
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It seems to me a victory tune, the Rogue is surely humming
But hun you're ego's so damn big I'll ALWAYS hear you cumming
A stallion, cock, no matter what, a mobile phallic bullet
The guises worn must surely prove you just sit round and pull it!
Comment Written 21-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2014
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Love it, luv! You so rock me, jester, with your witticism and backhandedness to my backside. Stings so good, baby. Thank you. :)
It ain't pulling what I'm doing. It's STROKIN'. But something has to drive the rhythm of it. Know what it is? Disco booty, baby.
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You seem hell bent on victory, yes I still hear you humming
You're rhythm's good, but hark do I hear beating or just strumming?
The cutey virtual booty, that you're sure you're damn well pokin'
Knows all too well, you're all HARD sell and just sit home there stroking.
LMAO
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Well, when you have superior tool(s), you use it the best way you can when you can.
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I just used mine. Mmmmm.
My fingers.
On the keyboard, silly.
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Never heard it called a keyboard, but I'm an excellent typist. ;)
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One finger at a time type or both hands? LMAO
The keyboard.
Mind on the keyboard.
BTW I'm a TOUCH typist...can do you er..I mean IT with my eyes shut.
:O
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As long as the whispering eye is open...
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You're not typing now, I see.
Knew you couldn't DO it with your eyes shut.
So you're a EYE wide open man.
Like to see what you're getting into ...so to speak...haha
(she's on fire tonight, folks!)
Comment from mountainwriter49
Happy Friday Evening, David
You've provided another fun read and addition to your ever growing Rogue Library of creative verse, amazing double entendres and adroit poetic skill with multiple literary devices such as metre, rhyme, both internal and end, and continued development of the plot. I'm just wondering what Gloria Steinman might say?! LOL.
Well done, my friend, and a good read with some fine Malbec from the Argentine on this erstwhile arduous, Monday-kind-of-Friday.
-Ray
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2014
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Happy Friday Evening, David
You've provided another fun read and addition to your ever growing Rogue Library of creative verse, amazing double entendres and adroit poetic skill with multiple literary devices such as metre, rhyme, both internal and end, and continued development of the plot. I'm just wondering what Gloria Steinman might say?! LOL.
Well done, my friend, and a good read with some fine Malbec from the Argentine on this erstwhile arduous, Monday-kind-of-Friday.
-Ray
Comment Written 21-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2014
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Thanks so much, my friend, for your great review, my friend. Sorry to hear your Friday felt like a Monday, but I know what you mean, brother. I appreciate your support here, and Gloria is welcome to join in if she'd like. ;) I'm all for females...if not feminism.
Comment from Julia.
Haha. Just what needed at the end of a very long and stressful week. :) I'm giving you the extra star, in part, because you managed to find a decent slant rhyme for Pimpernel. I really should try to write a response to this, but my creative energies have all been sucked out of me by too many weeks of working insane hours. *sigh* Maybe I do need a Rogue in my life to...er...ease the stress I'm under.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2014
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Haha. Just what needed at the end of a very long and stressful week. :) I'm giving you the extra star, in part, because you managed to find a decent slant rhyme for Pimpernel. I really should try to write a response to this, but my creative energies have all been sucked out of me by too many weeks of working insane hours. *sigh* Maybe I do need a Rogue in my life to...er...ease the stress I'm under.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2014
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A sixer on a rogue piece. What a pleasant surprise, my friend, and thank you for that! I'm so glad you take it in the spirit intended, and I'd love to have you join the fray. The rogue is from the south, after all, and likes the extra heat that you could bring. ;) The rogue is always here for you, lady.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
a harlot?...Pump her well!
BRAVO! What an awesome play on words! Did you just make that up? I guess so... and it's brilliant! Tho I detest the rogue and all his poems, I'd give this a six just for that phrase... if I had one.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2014
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a harlot?...Pump her well!
BRAVO! What an awesome play on words! Did you just make that up? I guess so... and it's brilliant! Tho I detest the rogue and all his poems, I'd give this a six just for that phrase... if I had one.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2014
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:) Thank you, Phyllis, I was actually pretty pleased by that one, and had it in my pocket to use at some point. It felt like the time to pull it out...so to speak. :) The rogue is a wretch for sure, and I know it as well as he does...but it really is all in good fun, even if you may not feel it. It stirs the creative juices, and helps overall, I think. Thanks for stopping by, my friend. About to check in on Ginger and Luke now!
Comment from paulah60
A tad scary that you've written about something that's the thrust of the next rogue riposte I'm cooking up! A nice effort dear friend to (over) come (the frenemy), but we're STILL not, er, licked by you;-)
Even so, as one of the flag bearers for the sisterhood, it kills me, just KILLS me, to say this is an exceptional piece of writing. I'd go so far as to say it's your best in the series.
I would suggest that pump 'er well would be better than 'pump her well', but I know you abhor elision (and I'm suggesting that I'd suggest it just to taunt you LOL!)
Some classic lines, in fact, pretty much every one of them is outstanding. So have a sixer, D, and start to psyche yourself up for a roasting in the not too distant future!
Cheers
Paula
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2014
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A tad scary that you've written about something that's the thrust of the next rogue riposte I'm cooking up! A nice effort dear friend to (over) come (the frenemy), but we're STILL not, er, licked by you;-)
Even so, as one of the flag bearers for the sisterhood, it kills me, just KILLS me, to say this is an exceptional piece of writing. I'd go so far as to say it's your best in the series.
I would suggest that pump 'er well would be better than 'pump her well', but I know you abhor elision (and I'm suggesting that I'd suggest it just to taunt you LOL!)
Some classic lines, in fact, pretty much every one of them is outstanding. So have a sixer, D, and start to psyche yourself up for a roasting in the not too distant future!
Cheers
Paula
Comment Written 21-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2014
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Yes, be careful what you think, m'lady, as the rogue is usually a step ahead...partly to stay ahead of Gloria's BOB. ;) Thank you so much, and I DO like your suggestion. I don't even count that among the elisions I don't like. I don't like eliding words for the sake of fitting meter, OR notating them that way when the reader should be able to figure it out without the little cheat method. Reverse syntax is my biggest no-no in writing, though.
Many thanks, my dear, and it sounds like you've already got the pot boiling for next week.
Comment from Acquired Taste
David, David, David....you've outdone yourself. This, I think, is one of your best. I shall think about an answer, but truly, this type of fencing is best left to the pros.
Favorite line: He's never reckless, nervous, or neglectful of a curve - Has to be, it is actually a lovely line, well, in comparison. So, go forward in search of that pie...you do remember Stephen King's pie story...Thinner?
Love it. AT=/
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2014
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David, David, David....you've outdone yourself. This, I think, is one of your best. I shall think about an answer, but truly, this type of fencing is best left to the pros.
Favorite line: He's never reckless, nervous, or neglectful of a curve - Has to be, it is actually a lovely line, well, in comparison. So, go forward in search of that pie...you do remember Stephen King's pie story...Thinner?
Love it. AT=/
Comment Written 21-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2014
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Thank you very much, my dear. I really appreciate that, as it was fun to write, and I think I'll actually do one most Fridays for the people I'm closest to on the site, and damn the rest. I do remember Thinner! ;)
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love Stephen King - his Secret Garden-Secret Window is my favorite novella - guess as a writer it hits so close to home...AT=/
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The Stand is still in my Top 5
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Lot of good stuff there....Ray Bradbury - Something Wicked this Way Comes or the Illustrated Man - or Mickey Spillane - I the Jury - well we could do this all night. Enjoy your evening big guy! AT=/