I Was Just Thinking
thoughts29 total reviews
Comment from Nosha17
I am not sure I have ever had such unusual thoughts so, I find it a bit hard to analyse. Maybe, for you it was some sort of awakening, seeing something ordinary in an extraordinary light. I am probably more down to earth and ordinary and don't imagine situations about myself, just about the animals I write about! But, you have a way with words and when you write you make good use of language, and it flows, whatever the theme. Enjoyable read. Faye
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I am not sure I have ever had such unusual thoughts so, I find it a bit hard to analyse. Maybe, for you it was some sort of awakening, seeing something ordinary in an extraordinary light. I am probably more down to earth and ordinary and don't imagine situations about myself, just about the animals I write about! But, you have a way with words and when you write you make good use of language, and it flows, whatever the theme. Enjoyable read. Faye
Comment Written 25-Feb-2014
Comment from nancy_e_davis
I agree with your wife. You are crazy as a loon. How could you ever come up with such a far out story? I would hate to be trapped in that story for any length of time. It is very disorienting to say the least. I don't know if I like it or not.
My mind is having a hard enough time thinking up poems. LOL
But I do normally like your stories. Yep, I agree with your wife. LOL Nancy
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I agree with your wife. You are crazy as a loon. How could you ever come up with such a far out story? I would hate to be trapped in that story for any length of time. It is very disorienting to say the least. I don't know if I like it or not.
My mind is having a hard enough time thinking up poems. LOL
But I do normally like your stories. Yep, I agree with your wife. LOL Nancy
Comment Written 25-Feb-2014
Comment from Tatarka2
I'm not at all sure where this is going, but it's so intriguing that I want to find out. Or maybe it stands on its own? It could, but it wouldn't be as satisfying as if it were the opening chapter of a book. Nice beginning.
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I'm not at all sure where this is going, but it's so intriguing that I want to find out. Or maybe it stands on its own? It could, but it wouldn't be as satisfying as if it were the opening chapter of a book. Nice beginning.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2014
Comment from nelliesellie
I love the story. Yep, it sounds crazy but you admit that is what you are trying for. But this could also by a man with a brain injury due to an accident. I have had trips like this when I hit my head. It starts out pretty reasonable. Then gets really wild. Then reality starts to mix with the wild trip. Great work.
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I love the story. Yep, it sounds crazy but you admit that is what you are trying for. But this could also by a man with a brain injury due to an accident. I have had trips like this when I hit my head. It starts out pretty reasonable. Then gets really wild. Then reality starts to mix with the wild trip. Great work.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2014
Comment from Showboat
Excellent essay here, Mikey, and one that still has me scratching my head. First I thought it was someone on a drug trip, or maybe booze. As I got farther along I figured it was someone losing control to a manic episode.
Then I saw - denial. When your loved one is gravely injured you'll do most anything to ignore it.
Super duper,
Gayle
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Excellent essay here, Mikey, and one that still has me scratching my head. First I thought it was someone on a drug trip, or maybe booze. As I got farther along I figured it was someone losing control to a manic episode.
Then I saw - denial. When your loved one is gravely injured you'll do most anything to ignore it.
Super duper,
Gayle
Comment Written 25-Feb-2014
Comment from Rosalyne
Hi, Mikey.
This reads like a wild dream, or an out of body experience. I laughed reading your note at the bottom with your wife's comment. Dreams are convoluted, and bizarre.This is very well told, with great imagery of the shadow. Very creative story!
Bye
Rosalyne :)
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Hi, Mikey.
This reads like a wild dream, or an out of body experience. I laughed reading your note at the bottom with your wife's comment. Dreams are convoluted, and bizarre.This is very well told, with great imagery of the shadow. Very creative story!
Bye
Rosalyne :)
Comment Written 25-Feb-2014
Comment from robina1978
I can imagine your wife said that as that is what you described in this letter and diary poetry. You have delusions and hallucinations here. I liked the story.
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I can imagine your wife said that as that is what you described in this letter and diary poetry. You have delusions and hallucinations here. I liked the story.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2014
Comment from pattipac
LOL, at your wife's response,"You're crazy," I like how you carry your audience along on a helter-skelter hallucinogenic dream, before bringing us down to your possible panic attack, at seeing your loved one carted away in the back of an ambulance.
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LOL, at your wife's response,"You're crazy," I like how you carry your audience along on a helter-skelter hallucinogenic dream, before bringing us down to your possible panic attack, at seeing your loved one carted away in the back of an ambulance.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2014
Comment from ravenblack
Really like your passages about shadows, particularly riding one to the top of the building. And then everything consisting of little white dots as if pixelated, one giant game where anything is possible, the shadows forms escaped from Plato's cave that you can mold like, well, play dough. I think your narrator is experiencing a break with reality, the woman on the stretcher maybe his significant other. Only one suggestion- the paper airplane feels like a thought experiment and on first read, I thought he was just sitting in his apartment thinking and did not understand how he was suddenly outside. Just looked back and it is mainly my bad, just maybe throw in a sentence before the plane locating him as walking down the street.
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Really like your passages about shadows, particularly riding one to the top of the building. And then everything consisting of little white dots as if pixelated, one giant game where anything is possible, the shadows forms escaped from Plato's cave that you can mold like, well, play dough. I think your narrator is experiencing a break with reality, the woman on the stretcher maybe his significant other. Only one suggestion- the paper airplane feels like a thought experiment and on first read, I thought he was just sitting in his apartment thinking and did not understand how he was suddenly outside. Just looked back and it is mainly my bad, just maybe throw in a sentence before the plane locating him as walking down the street.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2014
Comment from 24chas
I immediately had the theme of "The Twilight Zone" or "Outer Limits" going through my brain after I read this. Tell your wife, it's not crazy, it's creative. Enjoyed this!
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I immediately had the theme of "The Twilight Zone" or "Outer Limits" going through my brain after I read this. Tell your wife, it's not crazy, it's creative. Enjoyed this!
Comment Written 25-Feb-2014