Comment from royowen

Excellent

Just shows you that even bullies can be successful, in stories it's not usually like so well done for daring to be different! A well written kid's poem. Great narrative, rhyme and rhythm make very readable for children publicly. Well done.

 Comment Written 18-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014

Thanks, Roy.

Steve

Comment from honeytree

Excellent

The art work is really great for these fun words

That were very imaginative.

I guess a lot of children growing up

Can be naughty and different.

It is great to hear this lad became Prime Minister.


honey tree

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014

Thank you!

Steve

Comment from Leineco

Excellent

LOL. . . excellent final rhyme :-)
Great meter and cadence (I nearly danced through it)
And the story is definitely kid friendly :-)

Great job with the prompt :-)

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014

Thanks, Lorraine.

Steve

Comment from MarjorieAnne

Good

This rollicking story poem featured rhyme, rhythm, hyperbole and humor, though probably geared more to adults than children. I'd suggest deleting "the" from last line of stanza one to match syllable count of other lines in that verse.

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 Comment Written 17-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014

Thank you!

Steve

Comment from rouskin

Excellent

Excellent artwork and very enjoyable read with powerful ending He went into politics - now he's Prime Minister! I wish you all the best in the contest. Well done

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014

Thank you!

Steve

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

Well targeted for k-3rd. This very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. There is very good imagery.

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014

Thanks, Charlie.

Steve

reply by c_lucas on 23-Feb-2014

You're welcome, Steve. Charlie

Comment from Nosha17

Excellent

Very cute rhyming poem with nice rhythm and flow. You have made good choice of words and rhymes. It was a fun read and am sure kids will love it. Faye

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014

Thanks, Faye.

Steve

Comment from comanalbert

Excellent

Great! I've never thought to meet someone here that knows David Cameron so well...Gues being a bully pays off in the long run...
But only if you know the right people

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014

Thank you.

You think yours is the only country with a bully for a Prime Minister.

Steve

reply by comanalbert on 23-Feb-2014

No.. Most countries have it...perhaps it goes with the job...

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

Have you written about this character before?
The name sounds so familiar...
good use of alliteration
solid rhyming couplets
good humor in the examples of the trouble he caused
Fun political commentary in the closing that will appeal to the parents :-) Brooke

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 Comment Written 17-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014

You made me rush off and google the name, just in case. I found a couple of Bradley Bullivants, but not the other way around.

Thanks for the review.

Steve