The Heart of Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "Winters Reflections"'Tis not the Bard, but pretty good poetry anyway
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Comment from Ben Colder
Winter might just be a winner. That is if his brother blizzard stays away. Good luck in the contest. Brrr. Makes me cold. Blessings to you.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2014
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Winter might just be a winner. That is if his brother blizzard stays away. Good luck in the contest. Brrr. Makes me cold. Blessings to you.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2014
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And blessings back to you . I've 'been colder', but this is certainly a winter that has outdone itself. Thanks Ben for this wonderful review, I hope you are right, I would love to win.
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
This is a creative and whimsical personification of Winter as a union worker. I like the line that says he forgot to set his timer to turn off at the correct time. Good luck to you in the contest, Jeanie Mercer
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This is a creative and whimsical personification of Winter as a union worker. I like the line that says he forgot to set his timer to turn off at the correct time. Good luck to you in the contest, Jeanie Mercer
Comment Written 01-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2014
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Hi Jeanie Mercer, thank you for your wonderful comments, I am delighted you enjoyed Winters Reflections. :-)
Comment from DionysusDeVille
Outdone itself is an understatement, more like totally ravaged the country with no mercy. But you did a really great job in presenting this personifying poem
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Outdone itself is an understatement, more like totally ravaged the country with no mercy. But you did a really great job in presenting this personifying poem
Comment Written 01-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2014
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Thank you for this delightful review.
Comment from Charlene0513
Great poem expressing winter's exasperation of his need to be winter and how through dialogue he renounces the need to be another season and is pleased to be who he is.
Quite interchangeable and a pleasure to read.
Charlene
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2014
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Great poem expressing winter's exasperation of his need to be winter and how through dialogue he renounces the need to be another season and is pleased to be who he is.
Quite interchangeable and a pleasure to read.
Charlene
Comment Written 01-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2014
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Thanks Charlene, I appreciate this wonderful review.
Comment from mfowler
The use of winter's voice, chattering away like the inner workings of a human mind, is quite unique. Personification of anything can be trite, but I found the humour and introspective nature of the chattering to be almost believable and quite charming to read. I think your use of the onomatopoeia with "Brrrr" gave the winter its human face and from then on it worked.
It sleeps and makes decisions: I decided to snow for a couple of hours, then napped
It has lapses in concentration:I am forgetful
It sees its actions as organised work:How I could begin the transition without a double shift
This is a poem of fine imaginative qualities and great free from execution.
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The use of winter's voice, chattering away like the inner workings of a human mind, is quite unique. Personification of anything can be trite, but I found the humour and introspective nature of the chattering to be almost believable and quite charming to read. I think your use of the onomatopoeia with "Brrrr" gave the winter its human face and from then on it worked.
It sleeps and makes decisions: I decided to snow for a couple of hours, then napped
It has lapses in concentration:I am forgetful
It sees its actions as organised work:How I could begin the transition without a double shift
This is a poem of fine imaginative qualities and great free from execution.
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Comment Written 01-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2014
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I so enjoyed your review of Winters Reflection and thank you sincerely for it.
Comment from DonandVicki
An original personification to a season of the year that we all wish were behind us. Good imagery and flow to your work. Don
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An original personification to a season of the year that we all wish were behind us. Good imagery and flow to your work. Don
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Comment Written 01-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2014
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Thanks Don, I appreciate your fine review. :-)