Comment from krys123

Excellent

I really like the way he used a twist on words to explain the double intender for the word roll as and rolled out of bed.
Very creative and very clever your 5/3/5 syllabic format was very enjoyable to read. Thank you so much for sharing this with everyone including myself. It may you have a good one and God bless.
Alex

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2014

Thanks Alex, I appreciate your comments, :-) Carolyn

reply by krys123 on 29-Jan-2014

Your so sincerely welcome Carolyn

Comment from angelface2

Excellent

What a neat poem. Perfect picture to go with it. good one Carolyn, That is so cute and I wish you luck in the contest. Miss Sally

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2014

Thanks Miss Sally , I am glad you enjoyed this one, Carolyn

Comment from MizKat

Excellent

Hi Carolyn,

This is a really neat Lune poem. I especially liked the last line about the river never falling out of the bed. You sure come with great ideas.

Kat

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2014

Thanks Kat, sometimes those 'creative juices' just roll along. I hope all is well with you, :-) Carolyn

reply by MizKat on 29-Jan-2014

My creative juices must have got lost somewhere. Sweetwoodjax sent me a couple of lines before and told me to write a poem about it. That was a lot of fun. If you have any ideas that you'd like me to write a poem about please send them. I haven't written anything for ages. I'm much better today than I have been. Thanks for your concern.

reply by the author on 29-Jan-2014

Most of what you write is spiritual, and while the Lord is an awesome subject, He gave you a talent that can be used on other subjects as well. ie: Dalton.. I branch out so I don't lose interest. What other interest do you have? pets, hobbies, clubs, etc. I believe in you. :-) Carolyn

reply by MizKat on 29-Jan-2014

I like pets, I have two cats. I don't have hobbies. I use to knit and crochet, but not for ages. I don't belong to any clubs. I love to write about Dylan and it's fun being his great-great-grandma.

reply by MizKat on 29-Jan-2014

I like pets, I have two cats. I don't have hobbies. I use to knit and crochet, but not for ages. I don't belong to any clubs. I love to write about Dylan and it's fun being his great-great-grandma.

reply by the author on 29-Jan-2014

Then pull out the needles
and get out the yarn,
a sock with a hole in it,
and learn how to 'darn' LOL

You can do it.....with God all things are possible.... Love, Carolyn

Comment from Sylvia Page

Excellent

That's a beautiful shot of the river. Restless river rolls
yet does not fall out of the bed. A fine metaphor. The poem with so few words flow very well and says so much.
Good luck in the contest
Blessings
Sylvia

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2014

Hi there, Larry and I had lunch that day, right on the sandy bank. Thank you for both the lovely review and the best wishes.
:-) Carolyn

Comment from jmdg1954

Excellent

Restless river rolls
yet seldom
falls out of the bed

I loved it... seldom falls out of the bed... it can never fall out of bed but it can overrun it.

Great play on words. I enjoyed it. John

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2014

Actually 'it breaks the bank' heehehe.. Thanks John, Love Carolyn

Comment from Benny Beeharry

Excellent

What a brilliant metaphor. It is great ,very great.
I love it.
Like a child, it rolls ...but not out of bed
Very great imageries and imagination.

Incidentally I am glad to let you know that the publisher has accepted my poems and will soon sign the contract.
I have never had it so good in my life.

Thank you ever so much for the encouragement. I do appreciate it.

Benny Beeharry

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2014

Congratulations Benny, You deserve every thing good, it was my pleasure. Are you self-publishing or traditional? Thank you also for enjoying
'Rivers Roll'.

Comment from Sarah Butterfly

Exceptional

Very creative writing Carolyn. I love the clever pun of your poem. Sound alliteration used in the first line. very well done!

Kind regards

Sarah

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2014

I appreciate you Sarah, wow, a six! Thanks for your support and continued encouragement. :-) Carolyn

Comment from Maureen's Pen

Excellent

Dear Carolyn l loved the word play in this lune poem. Especially loved your last line. Spot on syllables and well defined. Good luck in the contest.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen

"Restless river rolls 5
yet seldom 3
falls out of the bed " 5

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2014

Thank you dear Maureen for this lovely review. So happy you enjoyed the Lune. Love you, Carolyn

Comment from AprilShower

Excellent

Carolyn, I saw where the Mississippi starts in Minnesota. It is just a tiny stream. Your poem is cute. I enjoyed reading it, especially the part "seldom falls out of bed". LOL.

April :o)

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2014

Yes it is amazing what small beginnings can do. Thanks for this great review. :-) Carolyn

Comment from lakeport

Excellent

Rivers roll, indeed nice shot of the big Missisippi river,
that's a very nice 5/3/5 poem, good luck in the contest,God bless you. Hugs!Lakeport.

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2014

Thanks so much for this wonderful review. Glad you liked the picture and the Lune. :-) Carolyn

reply by lakeport on 29-Jan-2014

your welcome.Hugs!Lakeport.