I Will Stand
Free Verse21 total reviews
Comment from MERRY1
What a lucky bestie you have to receive a lovely poem like this. Your friend must be very special. I like the ecstasy of dreams twined with reality. Well done
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2014
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What a lucky bestie you have to receive a lovely poem like this. Your friend must be very special. I like the ecstasy of dreams twined with reality. Well done
Comment Written 21-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2014
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Thank you so much! :)
Comment from queenv
I will stand as the stem is a great line. The poem is well written and sends a positive message, despite what you are going through I will be there for you. Good job!
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2014
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I will stand as the stem is a great line. The poem is well written and sends a positive message, despite what you are going through I will be there for you. Good job!
Comment Written 21-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2014
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Thank you so much for the glowing stars! :)
It means a lot. have a nice day!
Comment from mountainwriter49
Good Morning, Poet
I enjoyed reading your beautiful poem this morning. A poem of commitment and love is always a good read, and yours is no exception. My favorite lines are as follows:
Even when I depart
you will sense my presence
since nothing is immortal
in this mundane world
Ray
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2014
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Good Morning, Poet
I enjoyed reading your beautiful poem this morning. A poem of commitment and love is always a good read, and yours is no exception. My favorite lines are as follows:
Even when I depart
you will sense my presence
since nothing is immortal
in this mundane world
Ray
Comment Written 21-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2014
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Thank you so much! :)
I appreciate your comments and positive review.
Comment from kiwisteveh
Lovely poem of friendship and solidarity to give as a gift. I liked the consistent structure with each section of two stanzas outlining a possible problem and the constant solution - you as the rock of friendship.
Unusual use of 'wane' - not usually a verb.
A couple of places where you may have reached for a more elevated word and possibly ot it not quit right e.g. vacuous and vacillate - actually quite different in meaning...
To let conscience reveal seems a little strange too - reveal is normally transitive so more usual would be reveal itself or be revealed...
Nice, though. Hope s/he likes it.
Steve
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2014
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Lovely poem of friendship and solidarity to give as a gift. I liked the consistent structure with each section of two stanzas outlining a possible problem and the constant solution - you as the rock of friendship.
Unusual use of 'wane' - not usually a verb.
A couple of places where you may have reached for a more elevated word and possibly ot it not quit right e.g. vacuous and vacillate - actually quite different in meaning...
To let conscience reveal seems a little strange too - reveal is normally transitive so more usual would be reveal itself or be revealed...
Nice, though. Hope s/he likes it.
Steve
Comment Written 21-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2014
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Hi,
I appreciate your comments. I have used 'wane' as a noun only. I will edit the rest soon. Thank you so much! :)
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, anupam, you did an excellent job writing this beautiful poem about being strength for someone when they need it. i enjoyed reading it....
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2014
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this is very well written, anupam, you did an excellent job writing this beautiful poem about being strength for someone when they need it. i enjoyed reading it....
Comment Written 21-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2014
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Thank you so much! :)
Comment from boxergirl
This is a great free verse poem about being there through thick and thin for your friend. Lots of alliterations and the imagery of your words kept me engaged from the start. I think your friend is lucky to have you. 8-
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2014
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This is a great free verse poem about being there through thick and thin for your friend. Lots of alliterations and the imagery of your words kept me engaged from the start. I think your friend is lucky to have you. 8-
Comment Written 21-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2014
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Thank you so much! :)
Comment from hobopoet
Good stuff. You very clearly care for this person, and your words show that very nicely. Good line balance, good flow from line to line.
All in all, a good poem. :)
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2014
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Good stuff. You very clearly care for this person, and your words show that very nicely. Good line balance, good flow from line to line.
All in all, a good poem. :)
Comment Written 21-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2014
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Thank you so much! :)
Comment from LorraineK
A very beautiful and well written poem. You used great vocabulary,very entertaining words, such as: elusive, vacillating, and evanescen.Great job. Good luck in the contest. LorraineK
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2014
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A very beautiful and well written poem. You used great vocabulary,very entertaining words, such as: elusive, vacillating, and evanescen.Great job. Good luck in the contest. LorraineK
Comment Written 21-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2014
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Thank you so much! :)
Comment from Jason S. Parker
Seems like it lacked flow. And by that I mean, the writing wasn't instantly understandable. It made you stop and think, instead of the writing blossoming effortlessly in your mind.
If you have someone read it out loud to you, you'll find they may hit a lot of road blocks. They will stop reading. They'll feel like it's more of a chore.
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reply by the author on 22-Jan-2014
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Seems like it lacked flow. And by that I mean, the writing wasn't instantly understandable. It made you stop and think, instead of the writing blossoming effortlessly in your mind.
If you have someone read it out loud to you, you'll find they may hit a lot of road blocks. They will stop reading. They'll feel like it's more of a chore.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2014
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Thanks!
Comment from Keturah Martin
This poem is a wonderful commitment to be presented to someone you love. It is written very well and has a nice flow to the words which are very obviously intertwined with love and a desire to cherish this special person forever. Keep up the great writing.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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This poem is a wonderful commitment to be presented to someone you love. It is written very well and has a nice flow to the words which are very obviously intertwined with love and a desire to cherish this special person forever. Keep up the great writing.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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Thank you for reading and reviewing! :)