The Heart of Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 20 "Unrivaled Sunrise (Tanka)"'Tis not the Bard, but pretty good poetry anyway
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Comment from MizKat
Hi Carolyn,
This is a very nice Tanka poem. I enjoyed the read very much. This is probably more the way a Tanka should be written, but I couldn't help writing one for Dylan. LOL
Kat
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2013
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Hi Carolyn,
This is a very nice Tanka poem. I enjoyed the read very much. This is probably more the way a Tanka should be written, but I couldn't help writing one for Dylan. LOL
Kat
Comment Written 03-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2013
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Thanks Kat, I am glad you liked it. Forms are always a bit of a challenge for me. You could write any style for Dylan and it would be a hit. LOL At least with this fan, :-) Carolyn
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
Hi Carolyn,
I have never attempted a 5-7-5-7-7 format before. You have done it justice with this short but lovely Tanka. I love your word choice with "unrivaled". That is perfect. Some things in nature truly cannot be matched elsewhere.
Best wishes for the contest!
Hugs,
Connie
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2013
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Hi Carolyn,
I have never attempted a 5-7-5-7-7 format before. You have done it justice with this short but lovely Tanka. I love your word choice with "unrivaled". That is perfect. Some things in nature truly cannot be matched elsewhere.
Best wishes for the contest!
Hugs,
Connie
Comment Written 03-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2013
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Thanks, it would be nice to win, but the fact that you like it is a wonderful feeling Connie. :-) Carolyn
Comment from AprilShower
Nice picture and poem, Carolyn. I enjoyed both. Was this picture take by you. Is this a sunset, a sunrise or a full moon. There's very little color except blacks, white, and grays. There's a touch of other colors but not very much. If this is the moon, it is huge.
April
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2013
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Nice picture and poem, Carolyn. I enjoyed both. Was this picture take by you. Is this a sunset, a sunrise or a full moon. There's very little color except blacks, white, and grays. There's a touch of other colors but not very much. If this is the moon, it is huge.
April
Comment Written 03-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2013
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It is a sunrise according to photo, I am glad you like it April. That means a lot to me. I will be showing my photos and paintings in next years work (if I can get it all together)
:-) Carolyn
Comment from Smoothiecool
your picture works well with your poem
you have entered a Tanka contest good luck
you have all the right components for this
the five lines
the first and third have the required five syllable count
the second, forth and fifth have the seven syllable count
your chosen words portray the beauty of the sunrise touching the soul to awaken the scenes to harmonize in beauty with the heart
flows well easy read
cheers SC
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2013
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your picture works well with your poem
you have entered a Tanka contest good luck
you have all the right components for this
the five lines
the first and third have the required five syllable count
the second, forth and fifth have the seven syllable count
your chosen words portray the beauty of the sunrise touching the soul to awaken the scenes to harmonize in beauty with the heart
flows well easy read
cheers SC
Comment Written 03-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2013
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Well thank you for this lovely review. I appreciate you and the encouragement you have given. :-) Carolyn
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welcome
Comment from jmdg1954
Sunrise, a magnificent time of day, especially when shared with a loved one.
Well written Carolyn (as is the norm). The photo went perfectly with your words.
John
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2013
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Sunrise, a magnificent time of day, especially when shared with a loved one.
Well written Carolyn (as is the norm). The photo went perfectly with your words.
John
Comment Written 03-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2013
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John, you are so good to me, thank you, :-) Carolyn
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Who are you kidding. You are good to us readers with your writing.
Comment from Benny Beeharry
Hi Carolyn
Let us all hope the soul becomes purer with the touch of the sunlight. It is a dream but we all need to work out this dream.
For this particular dream is not like all other nightly
dreams. It does not fizzle out. But it grows into the magnanimity of the one who is dreaming....God not us.
With loads of affections to you and your family.
God bless you.
Benny Beeharry
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2013
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Hi Carolyn
Let us all hope the soul becomes purer with the touch of the sunlight. It is a dream but we all need to work out this dream.
For this particular dream is not like all other nightly
dreams. It does not fizzle out. But it grows into the magnanimity of the one who is dreaming....God not us.
With loads of affections to you and your family.
God bless you.
Benny Beeharry
Comment Written 03-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2013
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And deep affection and best wishes to you and yours also Bennie. Thank you again for the kind review. :-) Carolyn
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This is awesomely divine! I am just floating after reading it through several times. The syllable count is perfect BUT the words chosen to convey your meaning are utterly sublime. You should certainly take top honors with this one. I wish you all the best in the voting and am so grateful that you shared this with me.
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This is awesomely divine! I am just floating after reading it through several times. The syllable count is perfect BUT the words chosen to convey your meaning are utterly sublime. You should certainly take top honors with this one. I wish you all the best in the voting and am so grateful that you shared this with me.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2013
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You are one of my sweetest fans. I thank you so much for this kind and insightful review and 'golden cross award'. Love, Carolyn
Comment from Bundhoo
WOW another interesting poem from you:)
The scene is beautiful also the verses are nicely written!!
I love this poem;)
Regards,
MARWA:)
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2013
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WOW another interesting poem from you:)
The scene is beautiful also the verses are nicely written!!
I love this poem;)
Regards,
MARWA:)
Comment Written 03-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2013
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I am glad you enjoyed this one Marwa, Thanks for the great review. :-) Carolyn
Comment from MERRY1
Beautiful words that fit the picture perfectly and express the beauty of the sunrise perfectly taking you into the realms of a new day
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2013
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Beautiful words that fit the picture perfectly and express the beauty of the sunrise perfectly taking you into the realms of a new day
Comment Written 03-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2013
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What a nice review. Thank you so much, :-) Carolyn
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, carolyn, you did an excellent job writing this tanka poem about the joy found in sunrise as the soul awakes to the beauty surrounding it. good luck in nthe contest
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2013
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this is very well written, carolyn, you did an excellent job writing this tanka poem about the joy found in sunrise as the soul awakes to the beauty surrounding it. good luck in nthe contest
Comment Written 03-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2013
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I appreciate your best wishes and the wonderful comments. :-) Carolyn