Comment from Benny Beeharry

Excellent

Well done Carolyn. This is saying what I have Been waiting to hear.
While recognising life on earth we visualise a better life and work towards it. This what life is about.Paradise is the reward.
God bless
Benny Beeharry

 Comment Written 16-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 17-Nov-2013

Hi Bennie, I am so happy you enjoyed Part 1 of the Duet. Yes, we ought always to visualize, work toward, and anticipate the life beyond the 'now'. I liked the way you summed it up, Have a great week, :-) Carolyn

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

good assonance and consonance in gist in the bliss
good consonance in cobalt skies
nice alliteration in sweet summer
good use of enjambment to keep thoughts flowing from line to line
nice spiritual component
good consonance in life unfolds
good alliteration in long list and graceful geese
good assonance in earn worth
good assonance and consonance in brilliant glitz
lovely details and upbeat tone :-) Brooke

 Comment Written 16-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 17-Nov-2013

Thank you Brooke, could you tell who wrote which verse? Ritchie and I had fun writing the duet. Have a great week, :-) Carolyn

Comment from tbacha58

Excellent

Come leave your burdens
Journey with us to this land
A forever dwelling place, called Paradise

We are already in a beautiful friendship paradise at FS. Well, both of you are exceptional poets, and that is an amazing part 1, I will wait for part 2, and welcome again my dear friend, you have a beautiful picture. Hugs Terry

 Comment Written 15-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 15-Nov-2013

Thanks Terry, we had such fun doing this together. I hope you go to 9999pool and look for Ritchie and Part 2. I am delighted you like this one. :-) Carolyn

reply by tbacha58 on 15-Nov-2013

I already read it. Beautiful to. Hugs Terry

reply by tbacha58 on 18-Nov-2013

Hi my friend. I am writing to you to explain that I have high blood pressure,
which the doctor told me I have to rest as much as I can till the new pills will start doing there effects. So just to let you know that I might not be able to review all your poems, please forgive me temporarily until I get better. I will, but not as often as before. Please don't worry, I am fine, its just some time to see how the medication will work. Take care, see u soon. Hugs Terry

reply by the author on 18-Nov-2013

Take care of yourself, read only to relax and don't worry about the reviews. I know you love me. LOL And I love you and will pray you do well on the new medication. :-) Carolyn

Comment from Sueellen11

Excellent

Absolutely beautiful write I like the duets,, my mum and I do it too,, but not like this beautiful duet,,well done to you both,,blessings sueellen

 Comment Written 15-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 15-Nov-2013

Thanks for the wonderful comments, I am so happy you are pleased with the poem. Do you sing duets with your Mom or write? Either one is a loving experience. :-) Carolyn.

reply by Sueellen11 on 16-Nov-2013

We write mum has the voice,, I have a voice only GOD loves,,hee hee ,, mum sure didn't pass that gene on,,blessings sue

Comment from Cookie333

Excellent

Oh Carolyn, what fun you two have been having. I just read Ritchie's, I am a bit backwards I'm afraid. I get the 'gist' of this one, thanks to you both for sharing your wonderful creations with us all,
karen

 Comment Written 15-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 15-Nov-2013

Thanks Karen, it has been fun. I love him to pieces....I am glad you liked these, it means a lot to both of us. Carolyn

Comment from STEPHEN A CARTER

Excellent

Above the Elysian fields and cobalt skies GREAT INTRO
Lies a sweet summer land of bliss Those 'l's
An evidential stream of becoming LOVE this line
A forever dwelling place, called Paradise "

The gist in the bliss internal rhyme
With complaints on A list
Take flight with the graceful geese 'g' allits
This is a heaven on Earth

To make life into a brilliant glitz A bit obtuse

Over all a good piece.

Regards:

 Comment Written 15-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 15-Nov-2013

Thanks Stephen, we enjoyed co-writing this, we each did a verse in each part. I appreciate your insightful review. :-) Carolyn

Comment from AprilShower

Excellent

This has to be a free style poem, Carolyn. I believe this is about our journey here on earth on our way to paradise, Heaven. Let me know when 9999pool posts the second part. I enjoyed reading this and want to read that one, too.

April :o)

 Comment Written 15-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 15-Nov-2013

Hi April, Part 2 is up and ready on 9999pool. I am glad you enjoyed this. :-) Carolyn

Comment from Alena Smith

Excellent

That was beautiful. I love how you painted that picture, I saw it in my mind. Then you followed into inner peace, I truly felt such peace reading it. And, finally, the conclusion, you showed how this beautiful paradise is in each one of us, that when we achieve that peace, that's heaven on earth.
Thank you for this wonderful piece.

 Comment Written 15-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 15-Nov-2013

Thank you Alena, please read 9999pool for Part 2 of the Duet. I am so happy you enjoyed this. It was fun to write. :-) Carolyn

Comment from Sylvia Page

Excellent

Come leave your burdens
Journey with us to this land
A forever dwelling place, called Paradise

Someday each and everyone of us will hopefully leave our burdens behind to journey to this eternal dwelling place that is Paradise

Caroline your poem is awe inspiring in its spirituality. Good imagery throughout.
Blessings
Sylvia

 Comment Written 15-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 15-Nov-2013

Hi Sylvia, I am delighted you enjoyed this one. As it is Part 1 of 2 please go to 9999pool and read Part 2. We each wrote a verse of each part. You are always so encouraging to me. Love, Carolyn

Comment from sweetwoodjax

Excellent

this is very well written, carolyn, you did an excellent job writing this poem about the bliss found when this world gets too hard to deal. i enjoyed reading it. is his part posted already?

 Comment Written 15-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 15-Nov-2013

Thank you so much. Ritchie should be posting his soon if not already. Could you tell who wrote which verse? This was fun. :-) Carolyn

reply by sweetwoodjax on 15-Nov-2013

i think he wrote the first part and you wrote the second.