Comment from denhagan

Excellent

This is a nice sedoka poem for the contest about wolves attacking flocks of sheep and shepherds protecting their flocks. Has the correct number of syllables for each line.

 Comment Written 02-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 02-Nov-2013

I thank you so much for this great review..the affirmation of sylable count is always a good thing :-)

reply by denhagan on 05-Nov-2013

You're welcome,
Dennis

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

An intense story of survival in the animal kingdom as the wolves need to eat and the shepherds need to guard their livelihood
good syllable count for this form
good alliteration in little lamb
a most powerful way to conclude with the body count on each side
Brooke

 Comment Written 02-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 02-Nov-2013

Thank you Brooke for this good review, I appreciate your time and comments. :-)

Comment from J.Byers

Excellent

A great topic for your poem, except I count six syllables in the opening line of your second stanza. I would recommend changing this line to comply with the contest requirements. Other than that, I enjoyed this write, particularly the description of the wolves in the first stanza, and the following shepherds. Good luck in the contest.

Blessings,

~ J.

 Comment Written 02-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 02-Nov-2013

Thanks J for the good wishes and the edit. I will count again :-)

Comment from sweetwoodjax

Excellent

this is very well written, mystery writer, you did aan excellent job writing this sedoka poem about the predators who were losing the fight against the shepherds watching their sheep. good luck in the contest

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 Comment Written 02-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 02-Nov-2013

I appreciate your kind review and that you liked the sedoka poem. :-)

Comment from JMUwrites

Excellent

Oh my, what a powerful Sadoka poem here...tells a suspenseful story and fits perfectly within Sadoka poetry parameters! Excellent write and the accompanying artwork is ideal.

Thanks for sharing and the best of luck in the contest with it!

With warm regards...

JMU

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 Comment Written 02-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 02-Nov-2013

Thanks Jeffrey, this was an interesting form, glad you liked it. Bloody though it is.