Along the Jericho Road
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Comment from Connie C
Wow! This is by far the spookiest of any of your chapters, Bev. What a wonderful job you've done in creating a scene that could easily draw goose bumps from your readers. Your use of description as Bryan investigates the rooms and then his encounter is outstanding. Being a dog lover, I love that Alyx saved Brian from the spinning statue. Good for the dog!! As always, another hard-to-put-down chapter. I wanted to keep reading. By the way, congrats on being nominated for novel of the month. You'll get my vote.
Hugs,
Connie
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2013
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Wow! This is by far the spookiest of any of your chapters, Bev. What a wonderful job you've done in creating a scene that could easily draw goose bumps from your readers. Your use of description as Bryan investigates the rooms and then his encounter is outstanding. Being a dog lover, I love that Alyx saved Brian from the spinning statue. Good for the dog!! As always, another hard-to-put-down chapter. I wanted to keep reading. By the way, congrats on being nominated for novel of the month. You'll get my vote.
Hugs,
Connie
Comment Written 30-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2013
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Connie, thank you so very much! You always know just what to say to lift my spirits and give me confidence to continue. I cannot possibly express how much that means. Your generosity in the six-star rating and your words are precious to me. Love, Bev
P.S. I'm really excited to be included in such an outstanding group of writers this month. I appreciate your 'vote' of confidence, my friend.
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Comment from chasennov
Along The Jericho Road.' 'Wiyaphe Moon.' This is an excellent chapter you have created here. Your work is very interesting and also faultless. I love reading your posts, and look forward to the next issue. Well done.
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Along The Jericho Road.' 'Wiyaphe Moon.' This is an excellent chapter you have created here. Your work is very interesting and also faultless. I love reading your posts, and look forward to the next issue. Well done.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2013
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Thank you so much. Your words have really touched me, chassenov. I really appreciate your support and encouragement. Warmest regards, Bev
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You are most welcome, Bev.
Comment from jadapenn
What a good chapter with chilling features. I almost stopped reading to creep under my desk. So the devil is at his best trying every trick to lure Brian into hell. I loved the way Alyx stuck by his master and even saved him. Brian showed great courage in going into that satanistic room.
As usual a terrific write from you pen, Bev. I loved it. luv jada
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What a good chapter with chilling features. I almost stopped reading to creep under my desk. So the devil is at his best trying every trick to lure Brian into hell. I loved the way Alyx stuck by his master and even saved him. Brian showed great courage in going into that satanistic room.
As usual a terrific write from you pen, Bev. I loved it. luv jada
Comment Written 30-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2013
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Thank you so very much, Jada. I sure appreciate your encouragement and the very-generous six stars. It means a lot to me that you've stuck with me through this process. Big Hug, Bev
Comment from lindalcreel
This is a brilliant story. Thanks so much for the author's notes. Like you, I am wary of speaking certain passages that may bring about severe consequences. I wonder if the young Father Brian will be able to drive out all the entities there. We'll see. Thanks so much for sharing.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2013
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This is a brilliant story. Thanks so much for the author's notes. Like you, I am wary of speaking certain passages that may bring about severe consequences. I wonder if the young Father Brian will be able to drive out all the entities there. We'll see. Thanks so much for sharing.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2013
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Thank you for your gracious and encouraging review, L. I much appreciate you taking time to read. Warm regards, Bev
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So welcome:)
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So welcome:)
Comment from kleck140
Great story telling and you seem to be able to describe things as
though a person is right there. I have to learn how to do that, and
always look forward to another chapter. Your vocabulary about
emotions and descriptions of places and people are a great education
for me. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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Great story telling and you seem to be able to describe things as
though a person is right there. I have to learn how to do that, and
always look forward to another chapter. Your vocabulary about
emotions and descriptions of places and people are a great education
for me. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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I so appreciate this lovely review, my friend. Thank you for your very generous six-stars, and, especially, for your kind words of encouragement. Means a lot to me. Hugs, Bev
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Thank you for your quick reply!
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You're very welcome.
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Thanks for your quick reply.
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You're welcome! :0)
Comment from JMUwrites
Wow, this is a very powerfully written chapter...found myself holding my breath as I read the last word, intense and captivating would be the best way to describe it!
Extremely well done creatively and technically, and the artwork is stunning...looking incredibly real and ominous to say the least!
Thanks for sharing this, can't wait to read more and all the best to you going forward with it!
With warm regards...
JMU
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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Wow, this is a very powerfully written chapter...found myself holding my breath as I read the last word, intense and captivating would be the best way to describe it!
Extremely well done creatively and technically, and the artwork is stunning...looking incredibly real and ominous to say the least!
Thanks for sharing this, can't wait to read more and all the best to you going forward with it!
With warm regards...
JMU
Comment Written 29-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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Thank you so much for this gracious and generous reivew, JM. I'm glad you liked donkeyoatey's artwork. It's truly awesome, and I've enjoyed the privilege of using it quite a few times.
I appreciate your taking time to read and good wishes.
Warm regards, Bev
Comment from sweetwoodjax
This is very well written, Writing Fundimension, you did an excellent job writing this chapter where Father Brian is doing spiritual battle with the demons that are trying to get to him through his mother's voice. I enjoyed reading this one....
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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This is very well written, Writing Fundimension, you did an excellent job writing this chapter where Father Brian is doing spiritual battle with the demons that are trying to get to him through his mother's voice. I enjoyed reading this one....
Comment Written 29-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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Thank you so much, sweet. I appreciate your support and encouragement. Warm regards, Bev
Comment from nannabot
Hi I found this a very powerfully expressed piece. It rings with similarities of 'The Exorcist' You seem to know your subject well, and use the right dialogue familiar to this type of genre. It's tight and has a well defined and organised plot. Characters are well rounded and you give them life and personalities. Speech is powerful and dynamic, full of passion and emotion. Well done. From nannabot. xxx
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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Hi I found this a very powerfully expressed piece. It rings with similarities of 'The Exorcist' You seem to know your subject well, and use the right dialogue familiar to this type of genre. It's tight and has a well defined and organised plot. Characters are well rounded and you give them life and personalities. Speech is powerful and dynamic, full of passion and emotion. Well done. From nannabot. xxx
Comment Written 29-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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Thank you so very much, nannabot! I really appreciate your gracious and generous review. Warmest regards, Bev
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Writingfundimension,
Ah, now if you have a Sheltie as a companion, then you know what unreserved, unqualified and complete love is. Mine never leaves my side.
Good chapter, Fr Brian certainly has his hands full in that Rectory., Methinks bell, Book and candle are needed next, plus a couple of gallons of Holy Water, loads of incense and a full asperging!
Patrick
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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Hi Writingfundimension,
Ah, now if you have a Sheltie as a companion, then you know what unreserved, unqualified and complete love is. Mine never leaves my side.
Good chapter, Fr Brian certainly has his hands full in that Rectory., Methinks bell, Book and candle are needed next, plus a couple of gallons of Holy Water, loads of incense and a full asperging!
Patrick
Comment Written 29-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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Thanks for the great review. I think maybe you are right about Father Brian. Help is coming in a rather unexpected way.
Warmest regards, Bev
Comment from allborn66
This is a great chapter. It had lots of suspense. You built a lot of tension. I liked the interplay of Father Brian and the demon.
Barbara
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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This is a great chapter. It had lots of suspense. You built a lot of tension. I liked the interplay of Father Brian and the demon.
Barbara
Comment Written 29-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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Barbara, thank you for your encouraging and generous review. Warm regards, Bev