To Cherish Thorns
Viewing comments for Chapter 46 "Another Winter"Free Verse Poetry
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Comment from cinderbella
Very nice, but I grew up with the white stuff every winter, and now I may be getting old, but I don't appreciate the snow and cold much. I do appreciate your own sentiments, it can certainly be magical the first time you see it. And the poem is great, as is all your writing. :) Sandra
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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Very nice, but I grew up with the white stuff every winter, and now I may be getting old, but I don't appreciate the snow and cold much. I do appreciate your own sentiments, it can certainly be magical the first time you see it. And the poem is great, as is all your writing. :) Sandra
Comment Written 26-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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Yep. I think I might get tired of it too after a few days. hahaha. But once every few years is fun!! Glad you like the poem though. You would tire of the hundred degree heat too in a few days out here! mikey
Comment from tbacha58
Winter. Oh, dear friend, winter.
How endearingly long
have we solemnly spent
our solitude silently together,
as life doggedly endures
a stoic inspiration?
This a beauty peaceful poem, written with grace, and no hesitations that shows how the follow up subject lifts up your poem to the highest. Hugs Terry
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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Winter. Oh, dear friend, winter.
How endearingly long
have we solemnly spent
our solitude silently together,
as life doggedly endures
a stoic inspiration?
This a beauty peaceful poem, written with grace, and no hesitations that shows how the follow up subject lifts up your poem to the highest. Hugs Terry
Comment Written 26-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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I am so pleased you enjoyed this. I adore winter. Maybe because I have never had to really suffer through a harsh one. I have only seen it snow a couple times. But, I find it heroic to see trees laden with snow standing alone and strong surviving until spring arrives. mikey
Comment from Sueellen11
Very nice,, I love the snow,, though I can't ski at all,,, but I love snow capped mountains,,, just watching the snow fall,,, I know you guys have such terrible winters and most don't like the snow,, but for us who don't see much of it is is spectacular,,great write,,blessings sueellen
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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Very nice,, I love the snow,, though I can't ski at all,,, but I love snow capped mountains,,, just watching the snow fall,,, I know you guys have such terrible winters and most don't like the snow,, but for us who don't see much of it is is spectacular,,great write,,blessings sueellen
Comment Written 26-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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I actually would have to travel a bit to see the snow. So rarely have seen it. I guess that is why it delights me so. I probably wouldn't like being buried in it after a few days!! glad you liked this, mikey
Comment from CR Delport
I am so glad we are moving into summer. I am not a big fan of winter. Must be because I am a summer baby :) Thanks for sharing the interesting poem though.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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I am so glad we are moving into summer. I am not a big fan of winter. Must be because I am a summer baby :) Thanks for sharing the interesting poem though.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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I have the great advantage of experiencing winter at about 65 degrees! It snows for about an hour every three or four years. Not to harsh I suspect. Summer we have plenty of though. mikey
Comment from Rondeno
How touching! Grim, stoic winter is your true friend. I detect a metaphorical purpose here: you prefer winter, because you'd rather know the worst than life can dish out - and face it.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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How touching! Grim, stoic winter is your true friend. I detect a metaphorical purpose here: you prefer winter, because you'd rather know the worst than life can dish out - and face it.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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There is probably truth in that. It has a familiar ring. I know I find much in the heroic nature of a tree stripped bare enduring all of the snow and harshness and surviving it. Very astute observation. Well put. mikey
Comment from bkbehera
"But,I know as I see these snowflakes,
dancing and darting and floating
down, in patterns designed by playful angels,
that this is where the Lord
comes to play
with me.
It is why I am not cold"
The expression is so lively I feel as if winter is knocking at my door. It is a highly impressive and great piece of work.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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"But,I know as I see these snowflakes,
dancing and darting and floating
down, in patterns designed by playful angels,
that this is where the Lord
comes to play
with me.
It is why I am not cold"
The expression is so lively I feel as if winter is knocking at my door. It is a highly impressive and great piece of work.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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What a wonderful compliment. I am so delighted to hear that. You have really made my evening. Thank you so very kindly, mikey
Comment from Djeandebard
What an interesting way to portray winter! You address winter as a "friend" with whom you have spent much time. I especially liked the use of alliterations: "relentless rain" and "haughty hell-bent hail". It's almost musical. Great ending: "It s why I am not cold." Beautiful writing.
One question: Stanza 4, Line 9 - did you mean to show gravity as plural (gravities) or possessive (gravity's)?
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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What an interesting way to portray winter! You address winter as a "friend" with whom you have spent much time. I especially liked the use of alliterations: "relentless rain" and "haughty hell-bent hail". It's almost musical. Great ending: "It s why I am not cold." Beautiful writing.
One question: Stanza 4, Line 9 - did you mean to show gravity as plural (gravities) or possessive (gravity's)?
Comment Written 26-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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I did mean gravity's, thank you for catching that. So glad you liked this. I really do love winter and have written about it quite a bit over the years. I do almost view winter as a friend. Almost like I have used him so much in poetry that I owe him that. Thank you very much for the excellent review. much appreciated, mikey
Comment from Sankey
Very nice work. Can't relate to the extreme cold winters you guys get over there. Thy reckoned the pipes used to freeze out here in Winter but that has never happened to us in the 26.5 years we have lived here.
Does it need some commas in there? Also is metre good enough do you think? Or is it the Modern poetry thing of noo mtre and no rhyme? hehe! Good stuff anyway mate.
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reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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Very nice work. Can't relate to the extreme cold winters you guys get over there. Thy reckoned the pipes used to freeze out here in Winter but that has never happened to us in the 26.5 years we have lived here.
Does it need some commas in there? Also is metre good enough do you think? Or is it the Modern poetry thing of noo mtre and no rhyme? hehe! Good stuff anyway mate.
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Comment Written 26-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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Oh, it could probably use some more commas. But, at least it has some. hahaha. A couple months back it wouldn't have had a one! Yes, this is a free verse, so no meter or rhyme in it to speak of. Just supposed to let words kind of flow out and hopefully come to a point. fun way to write sometimes. some interesting things come out of it. sometimes though it goes off the old deep end!! mikey
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yeah kinda "Go with the flo" huh! Good work.
Comment from n.rosej.
Awesome, awesome, awesome!!! A write about winter...I really love the last few lines, "that this is where the Lord comes to play with me. It is why I am not cold." Those are wonderful words, and I believe give Glory to the Lord. Blessings : )
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reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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Awesome, awesome, awesome!!! A write about winter...I really love the last few lines, "that this is where the Lord comes to play with me. It is why I am not cold." Those are wonderful words, and I believe give Glory to the Lord. Blessings : )
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Comment Written 26-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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Amen. Can you believe I never saw snow until I moved to the desert? ha! The neighbors thought we were crazy running around in it like kids! I am happy you like this. I love winter and write about it all the time. I think you might like fall the same way. mikey
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LOL REALLY? That's weird. But then again, I really don't know anything about the desert, except that it has sand, so go figure! I'm guessing that you both loved playing in the snow?? lol I HATE WINTER. Lived here all my life, and READY TO MOVE TO ARIZONA...NOW! Well, really it will be four years, but I'm counting down.