Empty Palms
an abecedarian16 total reviews
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
Not an easy task, GregoryCody, to come up with an Abecedarian poem ... especially a more serious one such as this.
You've clearly conveyed to the reader that God had a hand in sending her to you. I firmly believe things happen for a reason. There is a saying. Don't know if you have heard of it .... "People come into our lives for a Reason, a Season or a Lifetime" (perhaps I have mentioned this before?). The reason he sent her to you (as you indicated in your author notes) so that she inspires you to live. :) There's a huge difference between just being alive and actually living, isn't there.
Your poem depicts what was a broken man who has been saved by this special woman. Many vivid descriptions provided to your reader to let them see just how broken he was. At the end the reader cheers to know that he is now protected and feels safe and secure.
Well written. Fave line .... "trapped inside an endless swamp, armless to swim".
Great job!
bichonfrisegirl aka Connie
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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Not an easy task, GregoryCody, to come up with an Abecedarian poem ... especially a more serious one such as this.
You've clearly conveyed to the reader that God had a hand in sending her to you. I firmly believe things happen for a reason. There is a saying. Don't know if you have heard of it .... "People come into our lives for a Reason, a Season or a Lifetime" (perhaps I have mentioned this before?). The reason he sent her to you (as you indicated in your author notes) so that she inspires you to live. :) There's a huge difference between just being alive and actually living, isn't there.
Your poem depicts what was a broken man who has been saved by this special woman. Many vivid descriptions provided to your reader to let them see just how broken he was. At the end the reader cheers to know that he is now protected and feels safe and secure.
Well written. Fave line .... "trapped inside an endless swamp, armless to swim".
Great job!
bichonfrisegirl aka Connie
Comment Written 14-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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Wow. I'm so impressed by this review. You really understood it. You "got" it. That is the biggest compliment one can receive. I think my wife said that quote to me actually! She said there are "seasons" of friendships. She definitely saved my life. She is my proof of God. Thank you so so very much for really divibg into this. It just means so much Connie. Thank you, with my heart.
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Btw I tried to vote for this review. The site is acting up. Didn't show the screen. The next review you do I'll vote for you. You're great. This was a fantastic review.
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Just your saying so is thanks enough, GregoryCody! :). I appreciate that very much :). I too have been experiencing troubles with the site lately ... Very slow to respond. I had this happen to me once before. My computer guy told me that the problem most likely lies with Java. The last time, once Java updated, all was ok again. Go figure! Have a great day!
Connie
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, gregory, you did an excellent job writing this abecdarian poem about the One Who saved you and the grace given to you in the form of your wife. a man i used to work with always said God saved him by His grace and then sent him Grace. i enjoyed reading it
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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this is very well written, gregory, you did an excellent job writing this abecdarian poem about the One Who saved you and the grace given to you in the form of your wife. a man i used to work with always said God saved him by His grace and then sent him Grace. i enjoyed reading it
Comment Written 14-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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Wow thank you! I'm truly grateful. Coming from You that means A LOT to me. I really respect and cherish your writing. So a six from you is a confidence builder. I'm so glad you liked it. Thank you. So much. So much.
Comment from l.raven
OH Gregory, How wonderful that he sent you her...This is wonderful and boy this take thought...WOW!!!one of the best ABC's I have read...A great smooth read. Very done!!!Luff Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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OH Gregory, How wonderful that he sent you her...This is wonderful and boy this take thought...WOW!!!one of the best ABC's I have read...A great smooth read. Very done!!!Luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 14-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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Thank you so much Linda! Your review makes me smile. Once again you "got" my poem. You're very insightful. I love when you read my work. You're great.
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You are so sweet Gregory...your so welcome...xxoo
Comment from country ranch writer
being able to regain self control of your life is a blessing and to be able to share it with some one is also a wonderful thing to live for
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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being able to regain self control of your life is a blessing and to be able to share it with some one is also a wonderful thing to live for
Comment Written 14-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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So true. Thank you, thank you for reading and reviewing. It means a lot to me.
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welcome
Comment from emrpoems
Alliterations:
doubt crumbled down on dawn,
Feet, frightened
Writing this type of poems takes some skill and I think you did very well. All the best in the contest.
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reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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Alliterations:
doubt crumbled down on dawn,
Feet, frightened
Writing this type of poems takes some skill and I think you did very well. All the best in the contest.
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Comment Written 14-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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Thanks so very much. I'm glad you liked it
Comment from SteveY
An excellent job of utilizing the whole alphabet in this one. For me this was incredibly descriptive but it's meaning was more obscure to me than much of your previous writings.
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reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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An excellent job of utilizing the whole alphabet in this one. For me this was incredibly descriptive but it's meaning was more obscure to me than much of your previous writings.
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Comment Written 14-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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Thanks Steve. It was about God sending my wife to find me when I was in a dark place. He sent the flock to find me. Thank you for reading! Really thank you.