Hues of Life
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Comment from Malerie
Even without artwork, I can picture this piece in my mind. Your words are well written and make this piece come to life:
"venom took his life
her kohled eyes search new prey
black widow weeps "
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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Even without artwork, I can picture this piece in my mind. Your words are well written and make this piece come to life:
"venom took his life
her kohled eyes search new prey
black widow weeps "
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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I am glad you liked it.Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:)
Comment from Tomes Johnston
This is short, sharp and to-the-point. I have never come across kohled before. I must look it up when I am finished here. I am continually coming across new words in this world.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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This is short, sharp and to-the-point. I have never come across kohled before. I must look it up when I am finished here. I am continually coming across new words in this world.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:)
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My pleasure.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, anupam, you did an excellent job writing this poem about the woman that collects hearts and discards them with no regard. i enjoyed reading it
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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this is very well written, anupam, you did an excellent job writing this poem about the woman that collects hearts and discards them with no regard. i enjoyed reading it
Comment Written 10-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:)
Comment from Titanx9
Excellent alliteration in "eyes search" and "widow weeps." This is an awesome metaphorical piece. Some relationships are so toxic they killed. It seems in this case you have the formidable black widow at work. Good job!
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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Excellent alliteration in "eyes search" and "widow weeps." This is an awesome metaphorical piece. Some relationships are so toxic they killed. It seems in this case you have the formidable black widow at work. Good job!
Comment Written 10-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:)
Comment from Shelby~thePoet
venom took his life
her kohled eyes search new prey - KOHLED- interesting
black widow weeps - I was thinking snake but I see spider...well done
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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venom took his life
her kohled eyes search new prey - KOHLED- interesting
black widow weeps - I was thinking snake but I see spider...well done
Comment Written 10-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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It is about humans.Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:)
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
This is very strong for a senryu, and leads to strong images in the mind. Kohled black eyes is unusual... I haven't seen it written like that before, but it's effective. Reptiles put my teeth on edge... they always have. Giddy
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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This is very strong for a senryu, and leads to strong images in the mind. Kohled black eyes is unusual... I haven't seen it written like that before, but it's effective. Reptiles put my teeth on edge... they always have. Giddy
Comment Written 10-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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I am glad you liked it.Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:)
Comment from Christof McTarnahan
Anupam, you dropped another little word bomb here. I really liked it ,it so short though. I admire your use of imagery in such a little piece.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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Anupam, you dropped another little word bomb here. I really liked it ,it so short though. I admire your use of imagery in such a little piece.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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Thank you.But you have given 4 stars..Lol..Is it by mistake or intentional?
Comment from Darkhorse555
WELL IT CERTAINLY LOOKS LIKE SOMEONE SUFFERED THE POISION OF THE BLACK WIDOW NOW LOOKING FOR NEW PREY SWEET DANCING SPIDERS I ENJOYED YOUR PIECE
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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WELL IT CERTAINLY LOOKS LIKE SOMEONE SUFFERED THE POISION OF THE BLACK WIDOW NOW LOOKING FOR NEW PREY SWEET DANCING SPIDERS I ENJOYED YOUR PIECE
Comment Written 10-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:)
Comment from RodG
I really like the story told here of a temptress(?) who seduces then kills her prey and later has remorse and weeps. Quite a story in only 17 syllables.
And I learned a new word--"kohled" which is very well used here.
RodG
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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I really like the story told here of a temptress(?) who seduces then kills her prey and later has remorse and weeps. Quite a story in only 17 syllables.
And I learned a new word--"kohled" which is very well used here.
RodG
Comment Written 09-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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Yes,your interpretation is correct.I am glad you liked it so much.I feel humbled and honored by your wonderful comments and rating.Thanks for your kind words and exceptional review:)
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Anupam. I like the insinuation of this little senyru. I like the new ideas you always seem to come up with. When you have the chance sometime, I would appreciate your looking at my work. Thanks so much...Bob (Mastery)
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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Hi, Anupam. I like the insinuation of this little senyru. I like the new ideas you always seem to come up with. When you have the chance sometime, I would appreciate your looking at my work. Thanks so much...Bob (Mastery)
Comment Written 09-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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Hi,
I appreciate your encouragement.I will definitely read your work.I was really busy as it is my final year in the college.Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:)