Walk With Me.
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "A Cruel Twist of Fate."From victim to survivor of abuse.
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Comment from Simple Reflection
Moving story! You kept my attention from beginning 'till the end. Just one question: In the author's note it says, "Author's own picture is used" as well as "Photo courtesy of Google images". I presume it is a picture of you, though, as the print on the dress looks like it could be kittens. Very touching!
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2013
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Moving story! You kept my attention from beginning 'till the end. Just one question: In the author's note it says, "Author's own picture is used" as well as "Photo courtesy of Google images". I presume it is a picture of you, though, as the print on the dress looks like it could be kittens. Very touching!
Comment Written 17-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2013
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Thanks so much for a generous review.
I appreciate your time and comments.
Thanks for picking up the conflicting picture reference. I did change from a Google image to a personal image. I t seems I forgot to remove the Google tag. Thanks agin for that reminder.
Comment from Author Unknown
Hi there...This font is hard to read, I do like it, but...I guess I'm getting old. My eyes don't work like they used to, lol! I really enjoyed this. It's almost a Haibun. Very nice work. AND true facts of life here too. :) A.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2013
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Hi there...This font is hard to read, I do like it, but...I guess I'm getting old. My eyes don't work like they used to, lol! I really enjoyed this. It's almost a Haibun. Very nice work. AND true facts of life here too. :) A.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2013
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Thanks for your review and comments.
I appreciate your time.
Comment from adewpearl
Where's daddy - Daddy
queen bee's bidding - add apostrophe for possessive
at all times, and at this point -add comma
her mother is medicated - Her
when she tells her mother, - add comma
pretty new dress for her, -add comma
older brother attend, and - add comma
behind their open hands, but - add comma
a most poignant story with perfect pairing of haiku and prose sections in relating this tale of a child's sad life
Brooke
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2013
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Where's daddy - Daddy
queen bee's bidding - add apostrophe for possessive
at all times, and at this point -add comma
her mother is medicated - Her
when she tells her mother, - add comma
pretty new dress for her, -add comma
older brother attend, and - add comma
behind their open hands, but - add comma
a most poignant story with perfect pairing of haiku and prose sections in relating this tale of a child's sad life
Brooke
Comment Written 16-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2013
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Thank you so much for taking the time for a detailed review.
I do appreciate your helpful comments and generous five stars.
Comment from Gungalo
Oh this is so sad and so happy at the same time. To do for someone is a great thing and to be thankful is even greater. Such a brave mother and daughter.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2013
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Oh this is so sad and so happy at the same time. To do for someone is a great thing and to be thankful is even greater. Such a brave mother and daughter.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2013
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Thank you so much for your lovely review.
I appreciate your thoughtful comments.
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Thank you so much for your lovely review.
I appreciate your thoughtful comments.
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Smile.
Comment from Sararb
This is such a heart wrenching story about a lonely little girl from a dysfunctional family. The Mother tried, but the dress turned out a mess, but thank God the child was oblivious to all that. She was just so elated to get some much needed attention from her mother. Great job! Sara :)
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2013
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This is such a heart wrenching story about a lonely little girl from a dysfunctional family. The Mother tried, but the dress turned out a mess, but thank God the child was oblivious to all that. She was just so elated to get some much needed attention from her mother. Great job! Sara :)
Comment Written 11-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2013
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Thank you so much for an exceptional review. I so appreciate your time and comments.
I will treasure your six star gift.
Comment from Joan E.
Your poem brought back bittersweet memories: my mother was a seamstress and taught me that darts are very important for proper fit. Incidentally, she also believed children should be seen but not heard. (I believe "bee's" lost its apostrophe in the second paragraph.) Your storytelling is compelling and the short poem is a fitting conclusion. Cheers- Joan
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reply by the author on 11-Aug-2013
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Your poem brought back bittersweet memories: my mother was a seamstress and taught me that darts are very important for proper fit. Incidentally, she also believed children should be seen but not heard. (I believe "bee's" lost its apostrophe in the second paragraph.) Your storytelling is compelling and the short poem is a fitting conclusion. Cheers- Joan
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Comment Written 11-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2013
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Thanks so much for a generous review and comments. I appreciate your time and feedback.
Comment from country ranch writer
she was dolly her mom made her a coat of many colors and this little girl was proud of her mom for she loved her so to try to make her a pretty dress for the first time
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2013
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she was dolly her mom made her a coat of many colors and this little girl was proud of her mom for she loved her so to try to make her a pretty dress for the first time
Comment Written 11-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2013
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Thank you so much for reading and reviewing wth a generous six star review.
I really treasure your time and this gift.
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welcome
Comment from Curly Girly
This was an interesting story to read. The sewing abilities of the mother sound similar to my own...I must be the only person on God's earth who has sewed a curtain into a cylinder...
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reply by the author on 11-Aug-2013
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This was an interesting story to read. The sewing abilities of the mother sound similar to my own...I must be the only person on God's earth who has sewed a curtain into a cylinder...
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Comment Written 11-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2013
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Never fear-I'm sure you are not alone especialy in our modern world. Today it's called -CREATIVITY.lol.
Thanks for a generous review and comments. I appreciate your time.