Comment from Rondeno

Excellent

I'm in awe of your professional slickness, Bev. The opening Brian-Alyx exchange has warmth and tenderness, helping fix Brian's character for the reader, and darcy's some piece of work! Nothing but admiration, Bevvers.

Mike xxxxx

 Comment Written 16-May-2013

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reply by the author on 16-May-2013

Thank you, Mike. I really appreciate your gracious words, my friend. Your enouragement means a lot to me. Hugs, Bev

Comment from amahra

Excellent

I really enjoyed this. Your writing moved the story smoothly. The dialogue exchange was realistic. God, as much as I can't stand snakes, I actually can't stop looking at that beautiful art work you chose.

 Comment Written 16-May-2013

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reply by the author on 16-May-2013

I love that picture, too, and I don't much care for snakes. And the artist has very graciously reviewed ever chapter the painting has accompanied.

Thanks for stopping by to read and for your encouraging review.

Bev

Comment from DALLAS01

Excellent

Wow, what a piece of work Darcy is. You have nailed her character. I like the way you showcased the priest's growing annoyance an his struggle to hide it. I am always awed by some folks' ability to manipulate. Another great job of character building.

 Comment Written 15-May-2013

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reply by the author on 16-May-2013

Thanks so much, Dallas. I especially appreciate your recognition that this was a chapter of 'character building'. The encouragement and support mean a lot to me. Warm regards, Bev

Comment from Righteous Riter

Excellent

The writer does a good job of drawing the reader into this chapter. This chapter taps into the emotions of the reader as the reader feels like he is a part of the chapter. The transition is good as well as the balance. The pace is steady and consistent as the writer does a good job of bringing this chapter to an ending that makes the reader smile.

 Comment Written 15-May-2013

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reply by the author on 15-May-2013

Hi, RR. Thank you so much for this wonderful review. I so appreciate your insights and encouragement. Warmest regards, Bev

Comment from RobertaAnthes

Exceptional

Wow - I have not read the earlier part of this story and did not expect to understand the plot. But this chapter really packs a punch and drew me in. The personalities of the 2 principles are intriguing and, without knowing what came before, I want to know what will now happen! Must keep an eye on that Darcy:)!!

 Comment Written 15-May-2013

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reply by the author on 15-May-2013

Hi, Roberta. Thank you so much for this gracious and very generous review. I really appreciate your encouragement! Yes, Darcy is a piece of work. Warmest regards, Bev

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

I can just see Darcy hitting the floor. LOL I enjoyed the great characterization and descriptions. You did a good job with this post. The dialogue flowed very natural. Good job.

 Comment Written 15-May-2013

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reply by the author on 15-May-2013

Barbara, I'm very honored by your kind review. Thank you for the encouragment and support - means a great deal to me. :0) Bev

Comment from Cumbrianlass

Exceptional

Perfect description of a dog's behaviour at the start of this post, Bev. Right on the nose, if you'll pardon the pun! How true that pets are so good for stress.

I laughed at Darcy's grand entrance! What a sneaky character. I think we all know a Darcy. LOL! Father Brian kept his cool very well, the poor man.

Great chapter, my friend.

Only spotted one thing I might consider changing:



along that wall(.)" (S)he pointed to a spot behind his desk.

 Comment Written 15-May-2013

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reply by the author on 15-May-2013

Av, thank you so very much for your super review. I am always so honored to receive an exceptional rating from a writer I totally admire. (When I grow up I want to be just like you!) You are such a gracious lady and a true support for me. Love ya, Bev

Comment from The Ghostwriter

Excellent

I was reminded kind of of Jan Karon, except for the word "damn." Were they saying "damn" in a church, because that would be really surprising, as was having a preacher day "damn." The writing was really good.

 Comment Written 15-May-2013

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reply by the author on 15-May-2013

Hi, G. Thank you so much for taking time to read my chapter. The scene takes place in the rectory - hope that eases your mind a little. Darcy is not Catholic and really has no respect for her Aunt's cherished beliefs. I'd hoped to convey that.

Warm regards, Bev

Comment from danddanthnyt

Excellent

I think this is a well written composition. The wording used to describe the dog in the opening of chapter; then body of Debra is excellently detailed. I enjoyed also the reference of the Catholic priest as reaching out in beneevolence and being caring. Very good character development surrround a mysterious murder. .

 Comment Written 15-May-2013

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reply by the author on 15-May-2013

Hi, Dan. Thank you so much for stopping by to read my chapter. I sure appreciate your kind review and excellent insights. Warm regards, Bev

Comment from donaldww

Excellent

I found this post amusing, as father Brian stick handled Darcy's rude and forward manner. She doesn't sound much like someone who is grieving over arrangements regarding her aunt's funeral.

What is the leaded kind of coffee?

Did father Brian agree to pay for lunch himself? He may be serving wafers and wine. LOL

Excellent post!

Cheers,
DW

 Comment Written 15-May-2013

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reply by the author on 15-May-2013

Hi, Donald. Thanks for your great review. 'Leaded' means with caffeine. Something my dad used to say that all the time. Appreciate your support, my friend.

Bev