Pampered Pet
Things are never what they seem.32 total reviews
Comment from visionary1234
What a nice "twist" you give to this prompt Sandy - I always appreciate uniqueness! Interesting of course how cruel children can be to other children, without knowing the real story - they just make assumptions - but then, I guess we do the same thing as adults too! :) Sharyn
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012
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What a nice "twist" you give to this prompt Sandy - I always appreciate uniqueness! Interesting of course how cruel children can be to other children, without knowing the real story - they just make assumptions - but then, I guess we do the same thing as adults too! :) Sharyn
Comment Written 24-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012
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Thank you so much for your wonderful review, Sharyn! I am so pleased you liked my story and the ending! Thank you. xsx
Comment from Hollyhock
Good story-line, with a message as usual.
Very nice turn-a-round of the situation, interesting that the ice-cream man seems to sense the boy is unhappy.
Stanza 3, line 2 has a bit of a wobble, try,
"And went to order from the man".
Very enjoyable.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012
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Good story-line, with a message as usual.
Very nice turn-a-round of the situation, interesting that the ice-cream man seems to sense the boy is unhappy.
Stanza 3, line 2 has a bit of a wobble, try,
"And went to order from the man".
Very enjoyable.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012
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Thank you, Andrea!! I have changed that line and it does sound better, thank you so much for the help, and for the lovely review! Sandra. xsx
Comment from sunnilicious
Well taken care of doesn't necessarily mean the spoilt. The grass is not always greener on the other side. Some people can be so mean.
Excellent narrative poem.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012
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Well taken care of doesn't necessarily mean the spoilt. The grass is not always greener on the other side. Some people can be so mean.
Excellent narrative poem.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012
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Thank you so much for your lovely review!! I am so pleased you enjoyed my story. xsx
Comment from artemis53
Well done, Sandra. It gives a child a bit of perspective why people are the way they are and the children had no idea about this child or what he endured.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012
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Well done, Sandra. It gives a child a bit of perspective why people are the way they are and the children had no idea about this child or what he endured.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012
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Thank you so much, Diane! We are always so quick to judge, even when we are 'grown up' it's such a shame, it can be so hurtful. Thanks again, Diane. xsx Sandra.
Comment from Titanx9
This has an AESOP flavor to it. Many times we call children spoil when we don't know the whole story. What's seen is not always the reality of a situation. That last stanza shows that "the spoiled child" is getting 'things' but a hugs and bedtime story is what he wants most from his parent. This is a powerful poem. Great job!
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012
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This has an AESOP flavor to it. Many times we call children spoil when we don't know the whole story. What's seen is not always the reality of a situation. That last stanza shows that "the spoiled child" is getting 'things' but a hugs and bedtime story is what he wants most from his parent. This is a powerful poem. Great job!
Comment Written 23-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012
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This might sound like I am very ignorant, but I had never heard the word, AESOP, so just nipped out of here and got it up on the web. Thank you, I will take that as a compliment. Most of my Hedgerow stories have a moral in them for children. It's the easiest way to teach children the rights and wrongs of situations. Thank you for this wonderful review, Titanx9, I am really pleased you enjoyed it! xsx Sandra.
Comment from N.K. Wagner
The grass is always greener, right, Sandra. You've written an excellent poem about passing judgement without all the facts. An excellent contest entry. :) nancy
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012
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The grass is always greener, right, Sandra. You've written an excellent poem about passing judgement without all the facts. An excellent contest entry. :) nancy
Comment Written 23-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012
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Thank you so much for this lovely review, Nancy! I am so pleased you liked the story! Sandra. xsx
Comment from juliedickson55
Ahhh, forced to say please.
Always given want he wanted...no friends, spoiled...
the ice cream man was a wise man.
The boy needed to know how to make friends and to have manners.
"so lonely, friendless child"
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012
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Ahhh, forced to say please.
Always given want he wanted...no friends, spoiled...
the ice cream man was a wise man.
The boy needed to know how to make friends and to have manners.
"so lonely, friendless child"
Comment Written 23-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012
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Thank you so much for your lovely review of my story, Julie!xsx
Comment from Gungalo
What a special write this is, Sandra. It is made for kids to understand that they must not be so spoiled that they are left all alone. Awesome imagery!!
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2012
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What a special write this is, Sandra. It is made for kids to understand that they must not be so spoiled that they are left all alone. Awesome imagery!!
Comment Written 23-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2012
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Thank you, Gungalo, I'm so happy you enjoyed it. Thank you for your wonderful review, as always!! Sandra. xsx
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Smiles.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Ouch! That last stanza is really powerful! The kid was "spoiled" with things as a substitute for love from his parents. How tragic! Explains a lot of society's problems, tho.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2012
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Ouch! That last stanza is really powerful! The kid was "spoiled" with things as a substitute for love from his parents. How tragic! Explains a lot of society's problems, tho.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2012
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Thank you so much Phyllis for your wonderful review. Toys v hugs? No contest. Hugs all the time. Thank you again!! Sandra. xsx
Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Sandra Mitchell ...
The story and the message that you present in this relatively short poem is good but, as I read it, you have scope to be able to enlarge on this thought to good advantage.
There is nothing to suggest changing and I thank you for sharing this with us.
Love from .... Nanette Mary.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2012
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Hullo Sandra Mitchell ...
The story and the message that you present in this relatively short poem is good but, as I read it, you have scope to be able to enlarge on this thought to good advantage.
There is nothing to suggest changing and I thank you for sharing this with us.
Love from .... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2012
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Thank you, Nanette Mary, for your lovely and most thoughtful review.
I am so pleased you could see the possibilities I have with this poem, I would have done more had I not been restricted with the contest rule. But, I intend to lengthen it after, and hopefully show how material things are no substitute for a parents love. Thank you again, I always welcome you constructive reviews! xsx Sandra..