Hedgerow Tales
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Fire Drill at Hedgerow School"Book 3 in the Hedgerow Series
30 total reviews
Comment from Deejharrington
A delightful day at Hedgerow School. It is a wonderful to teach children what they need to do during a drill. I know how Miss Freda felt:) There were many days they didn't hear a word. Well done.
deb
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2012
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A delightful day at Hedgerow School. It is a wonderful to teach children what they need to do during a drill. I know how Miss Freda felt:) There were many days they didn't hear a word. Well done.
deb
Comment Written 25-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2012
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Thank you so much, Debs, for your lovely review! I'm really pleased you enjoyed it, thank you. Xx
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my pleasure
deb
Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Sandramitchell ...
I really enjoyed this little story-poem of yours and while you have good rhyming, there is room for improvement in the metre and thus the rhythm of some of your lines.
There is one small change to suggest ...
* You have - "It must be exciting!" Said Reggie the Rat ... I suggest - said Reggie the Rat ...
Thank you for sharing this with us. Children will surely enjoy what you have written.
Love from ... Nanette Mary.
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2012
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Hullo Sandramitchell ...
I really enjoyed this little story-poem of yours and while you have good rhyming, there is room for improvement in the metre and thus the rhythm of some of your lines.
There is one small change to suggest ...
* You have - "It must be exciting!" Said Reggie the Rat ... I suggest - said Reggie the Rat ...
Thank you for sharing this with us. Children will surely enjoy what you have written.
Love from ... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2012
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Thank you, Nanette Mary, for your lovely and helpful review. I have made some changes to tighten up the metre, which after reading your comments I noticed as well. Can't think why I didn't before!!
Comment from c_lucas
A fire drill is always a pain in the ass until you have a real fire. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a good read.
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2012
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A fire drill is always a pain in the ass until you have a real fire. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a good read.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2012
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Thank you so much for your wonderful review, I'm so pleased you enjoyed it!! xsx
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You're welcome. Sandra. Charlie
Comment from fictionwriter
So cute. I loved that the firemen came and let the kids see the stuff that they do. Cute little story to show kids the importance of firedrills. Well done
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2012
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So cute. I loved that the firemen came and let the kids see the stuff that they do. Cute little story to show kids the importance of firedrills. Well done
Comment Written 25-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2012
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Thank you for your lovely review, I do appreciate your comments, thank you! xsx
Comment from dmt1967
This is a very well written poem as always I loved it just one point
But just to be safe, we have fire drill. This line should it be a drill or drills
Love it thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2012
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This is a very well written poem as always I loved it just one point
But just to be safe, we have fire drill. This line should it be a drill or drills
Love it thank you for sharing
Comment Written 25-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2012
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Thank you so very much for your very kind and helpful review! I have changed the word to 'drills' now, and it sounds a lot better, thank you! xsx
Comment from kra-z-ka-z
Yet another wonderful tale of the little guys! I just love them so. And feel as though I'm getting to know them quite well!
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2012
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Yet another wonderful tale of the little guys! I just love them so. And feel as though I'm getting to know them quite well!
Comment Written 25-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2012
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Thank you kra-z-ka-z! I am really pleased you like them, I think they will be around a little while, they don't seem to want to be put to bed! Thank you for your wonderful review! Sandra.
Comment from MikoAmaya
lol Oh, how wonderful! A truly enchanting tale with fantastic characters! The rhyme and rhythm were excellent as well. Thank you so much for sharing! :)
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2012
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lol Oh, how wonderful! A truly enchanting tale with fantastic characters! The rhyme and rhythm were excellent as well. Thank you so much for sharing! :)
Comment Written 25-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2012
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Thank you!! I am really pleased you enjoyed my story, thank you for the lovely review! xsx
Comment from Gungalo
Such a learning lesson in the form of poetry. Girl it really shows kids how learning can be fun. Imagine the firemen coming to school to tell them all about it. Beautiful.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2012
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Such a learning lesson in the form of poetry. Girl it really shows kids how learning can be fun. Imagine the firemen coming to school to tell them all about it. Beautiful.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2012
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Thank you so much, Gungalo,for your wonderful review, loved it! xsx
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It was beautiful girl.
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Hello my friend now I am no expert as you no but I liked this poem I really do you have the art of writing children's poetry there is one thing I would look at it is the amount of ands in the work I think some can be removed to help the flow of the poem either replaced with another work or removed all together just my humble opinion regards Jill
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2012
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Hello my friend now I am no expert as you no but I liked this poem I really do you have the art of writing children's poetry there is one thing I would look at it is the amount of ands in the work I think some can be removed to help the flow of the poem either replaced with another work or removed all together just my humble opinion regards Jill
Comment Written 25-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2012
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Hello Jill, you are not the only one to say that, I am going to look at again, thank you so much for this very nice and helpful review, I really appreciate your help! Thank you! xsx
Comment from misscookie
I love this very interesting chapter. and yopu had my attention all the way.
I see you to have a thing abouit writing stories for children. I had written about ten and working on three more.
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2012
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I love this very interesting chapter. and yopu had my attention all the way.
I see you to have a thing abouit writing stories for children. I had written about ten and working on three more.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2012
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Thank you so much for your lovely review, misscookie, I would love to read some of your childrens stories! Have you posted them? Please let me know! Thanks again for the review you have given me! xsx
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I had along time ago.
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Perhaps you can bring them out again, I know some have done.
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i DON'T KNOW, i WILL CHECK WITH TOM AND SEE ITHOUGHT WE WETRE NOT SUPOSE TO REPEAT WHAT WE POST BEFORE .
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Ask, he can only say no, but I have seen poems put back on from way back. It's worth asking. I know you can't put an old one in a competition. Sandra.
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He told me if it is still on my profillo
You can read it?
I hope it helps you
I just messed up my computer and casn't get it fix until my daugther comes back from her week-end triop.I'm always messing up with this thing.
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What were they called, just in case they are a long way back and I will know what I am looking for. I am always messing my laptop up too, I think I am getting to old!!