Sir Nigel's Sins
A story, in many acts.55 total reviews
Comment from Lastamen
I loved that game - calculating and speculating, guessing and surmising, often times discovering truth only as a matter of the process of elimination became apparent. You have weaved a very intriguing tale in this entry. Good fortune.
Till the last amen.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2012
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I loved that game - calculating and speculating, guessing and surmising, often times discovering truth only as a matter of the process of elimination became apparent. You have weaved a very intriguing tale in this entry. Good fortune.
Till the last amen.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2012
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Thank you for taking the time from your own work to review this. I had hoped that readers would have almost as much fun as I did writing it. I played the game of Clue (Cluedo, across the pond) for years. Some guests brought the game with them to my B & B and as I listened to them play, the lines started rattling around in my head. My only regret is that they seem to have escaped without letting me know who really did it.
Comment from Razz
Nicely done.
So very well put together.
Rhyme is exactly on time.
Imagery is awesome.
Simply awesome.
Photo is fantastic. So appro.
Thanks for the CLUE.
Good writing.
Good luck in contest.
Razz
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2012
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Nicely done.
So very well put together.
Rhyme is exactly on time.
Imagery is awesome.
Simply awesome.
Photo is fantastic. So appro.
Thanks for the CLUE.
Good writing.
Good luck in contest.
Razz
Comment Written 17-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2012
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Thank you for taking time away from your own work to read and review mine. If you have time, you might jump over to FanArt and let Mr. Jones know that you liked his art.
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You're most welcome.
Razz
Comment from c_lucas
An excellent parley of the Board Game Clue
If the truth be known the killer is you
You wrote the poem and control the action
Now you have no room for retraction.
*******Unedited
This had me smiling. It it written with wit. Very good job.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2012
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An excellent parley of the Board Game Clue
If the truth be known the killer is you
You wrote the poem and control the action
Now you have no room for retraction.
*******Unedited
This had me smiling. It it written with wit. Very good job.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2012
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Thank you, once again for reviewing my work. I had hoped the readers would have almost as much fun as I did in the writing of it. I played the game of Clue (Cluedo, across the pond) for years. Some guests brought the game with them to my B & B and as I listened to them play, the lines started rattling around in my head and the characters began screaming to be let out. Alas, It would seem that they have escaped without telling me who did it. The only thing that is apparent is that. "He was shot, stabbed, choked and bludgeoned,.. . .hmmmm.
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You're welcome, Maybe he committed suicide. Being uncoordinated, he had to keep trying.
Comment from micci
Your poem tells an interesting little story that I enjoyed reading, it was very creative and well written good luck in the contest, great job.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2012
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Your poem tells an interesting little story that I enjoyed reading, it was very creative and well written good luck in the contest, great job.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2012
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Thank you for reading and reviewing my work.
Comment from Solacium Mariae
Impressive retelling of "Clue" and in limerick form no less.
I have no idea how to do limericks, so I had to look it up. Perhaps it's because I have no experience with them, but it was a little hard for me in some places to figure out where your stressed syllables were intended to be.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2012
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Impressive retelling of "Clue" and in limerick form no less.
I have no idea how to do limericks, so I had to look it up. Perhaps it's because I have no experience with them, but it was a little hard for me in some places to figure out where your stressed syllables were intended to be.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2012
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This is not true limerick form, but what I was told is an elongated limerick. They have the truncated two line center in common, The AABBA form and exaggerated, sing-song rhythm. But a true limerick is shorter in the A lines, nine beats and 5 in the B, while mine has twelve and 7 Thanks for taking the time to read and review the poem. I know that it takes precious time away from your own words.
Comment from jjstar
I don't usually read poetry, but this was amazing! It was simply brilliant. I don't know how you did this? I know, are things slow in Roanoke? HaHa..I used to live in Va Beach...anyway, hat's off to you..this is great!
JJ
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2012
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I don't usually read poetry, but this was amazing! It was simply brilliant. I don't know how you did this? I know, are things slow in Roanoke? HaHa..I used to live in Va Beach...anyway, hat's off to you..this is great!
JJ
Comment Written 17-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2012
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Thanks for taking the time to read and review this. Sunday's are always slow, but I usually write late at night or before dawn so that I can actually run my B & B. Planning a trip to VA Beach soon. I will say hi.
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sounds good...!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
It was the butler!!! I worked out all the clues, definitely the butler. This was a brilliantly written story in a poem contest entry, it must have taken you hours to work all that out and making a convincing case against so many possible suspects. Very well written and a really intriguing read! xsx
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2012
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It was the butler!!! I worked out all the clues, definitely the butler. This was a brilliantly written story in a poem contest entry, it must have taken you hours to work all that out and making a convincing case against so many possible suspects. Very well written and a really intriguing read! xsx
Comment Written 17-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2012
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Thank you for taking precious time from your own work to review this. I had hoped readers would have almost as much fun as I did in writing it. I played the game of Clue (Cluedo, across the pond) for years. Some guests brought the game with them to my B & B and as I listened to them play, the lines started rattling around in my head and the characters began screaming to be let out. Alas, It would seem that they have escaped without telling me who did it. Actually, the bulk of it was written rather quickly. But I am a real stickler when it comes to rhyme and rhythm. Very OCD about it--that and finding the perfect word. What took 8 hours was the fine tuning; shoving these nasty people into their proper place while they tried to run off to another room. Professor Plum and his revolver in the dining room in particular were very fond of trying to do their own tap dance while I tried to count beats. Thanks again
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You are most welcome, I love a really good poem, and even more, a really good story to go with it. Yours had both. Sandra.
Comment from gifted$1
One of my all time favorite board games has always been Clue. What a creative way to take those characters and weave them into a story poem. In the last line, the only suggestion I would make would be this..Drat, I haven't got a clue! Do any of you? That way clue and you keep the rhyme going because you have done that throughout. Just a great job, from start to finish!
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2012
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One of my all time favorite board games has always been Clue. What a creative way to take those characters and weave them into a story poem. In the last line, the only suggestion I would make would be this..Drat, I haven't got a clue! Do any of you? That way clue and you keep the rhyme going because you have done that throughout. Just a great job, from start to finish!
Comment Written 17-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2012
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Thank you for taking the time from your own work to review this. I had hoped that readers would have almost as much fun as I did writing it. I played the game of Clue (Cluedo, across the pond) for years. Some guests brought the game with them to my B & B and as I listened to them play, the lines started rattling around in my head. It would seem that they have escaped.
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
Quite a clever mystery you have here. Could have been any or perhaps all. Sounds like they had great reason to kill him without feeling blue. Good luck in the contest!!! Debbie
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2012
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Quite a clever mystery you have here. Could have been any or perhaps all. Sounds like they had great reason to kill him without feeling blue. Good luck in the contest!!! Debbie
Comment Written 17-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2012
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Thank you for taking the time from your own work to review this. I had hoped that readers would have almost as much fun as I did writing it. I played the game of Clue (Cluedo, across the pond) for years. Some guests brought the game with them to my B & B and as I listened to them play, the lines started rattling around in my head. It would seem that they have escaped.
Comment from Crackerberries
The game of Clue spelled out in a poem. I loved that board game as a kid and then some restaurants up north started having a night of it where you could dine and play the game...very cool.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2012
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The game of Clue spelled out in a poem. I loved that board game as a kid and then some restaurants up north started having a night of it where you could dine and play the game...very cool.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2012
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Thank you for taking the time from your own work to review this. I had hoped that readers would have almost as much fun as I did writing it. I played the game of Clue (Cluedo, across the pond) for years. Some guests brought the game with them to my B & B and as I listened to them play, the lines started rattling around in my head. It would seem that they have escaped.