Sarah
Share A Story In A Poem Contest Submission60 total reviews
Comment from TammyGail
What a heartfelt poem this was indeed very well written and expressed, though your notes state this is a fictional story you weaved a bit of soul into it making the reader feel the pain, thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest..
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2012
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What a heartfelt poem this was indeed very well written and expressed, though your notes state this is a fictional story you weaved a bit of soul into it making the reader feel the pain, thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest..
Comment Written 28-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2012
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Thank you so much TammyGail, for reading and reviewing...blessings.
Comment from manjuneelam
This is a story very well told in a poem. Although it is a non fiction, but you can relate to the story as you see it happenings quite often. The pain and suffering of being molested is very well described by the author.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2012
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This is a story very well told in a poem. Although it is a non fiction, but you can relate to the story as you see it happenings quite often. The pain and suffering of being molested is very well described by the author.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2012
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Thanks so much manjuneelam, for reading and reviewing...blessings.
Comment from kenzi'spoems
what a tale. although this one is not true, there are so many hurting people out their who this is their story. They are Sarah. You depicted the emotions of this hurt soul so very well. great job. this literally brought tears to my eyes
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2012
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what a tale. although this one is not true, there are so many hurting people out their who this is their story. They are Sarah. You depicted the emotions of this hurt soul so very well. great job. this literally brought tears to my eyes
Comment Written 28-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2012
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Thank you so much kenzi`spoems, for the six stars...I truly appreciate them and your words are too true...so many out there are hurting in silence from abuse...blessings to you and yours.
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Brilliant writing and emotion within this piece.
You connect quickly with the reader and pull them in to your poem/story.
Great imagery and powerful survivor skills as fiction you penned the act well,the emotion, the pain and despair.
Her release well earned taking part of her soul...
Powerful and demands the surrender of me when reading....and memories flood what I thought I had left behind.
Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Maureen
Most powerful to me:
"Sarah looks into her daughter`s eyes, grieving all she`s lost.
Knowing she`ll protect her innocence, in spite of all the cost." // Exactly what I did with my own children, protect and love.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2012
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Brilliant writing and emotion within this piece.
You connect quickly with the reader and pull them in to your poem/story.
Great imagery and powerful survivor skills as fiction you penned the act well,the emotion, the pain and despair.
Her release well earned taking part of her soul...
Powerful and demands the surrender of me when reading....and memories flood what I thought I had left behind.
Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Maureen
Most powerful to me:
"Sarah looks into her daughter`s eyes, grieving all she`s lost.
Knowing she`ll protect her innocence, in spite of all the cost." // Exactly what I did with my own children, protect and love.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2012
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Hi Maureen...I am honored by your review...I must tell you that I have read many of your works and they are incredible...brilliant in fact...the way in which you use your words and, in fact the words themselves remind me of a famous prose writer named Elizabeth Smart...I don`t know if you have ever read ``By Grand Central Station I Sat Down and Wept`` but your writing is just as incredible as hers is. I am so sorry that you experienced what you did...and you are a hero for standing up and protecting your chidren...blessings to you and yours always.
Comment from lennis
Well, this was certainly an interesting topic to choose to write about. Very emotional and a good contest entry. You've stayed consistent to the pattern of the rhyme and the rhythm works. You should do well in the contest. Good work!
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Well, this was certainly an interesting topic to choose to write about. Very emotional and a good contest entry. You've stayed consistent to the pattern of the rhyme and the rhythm works. You should do well in the contest. Good work!
Comment Written 28-Feb-2012
Comment from tango494
Well this is certainly a vivid and well worded poem. I have to admit this is not my normal reading and I think It would have done better in a short story form but I think overall you did a great job.
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Well this is certainly a vivid and well worded poem. I have to admit this is not my normal reading and I think It would have done better in a short story form but I think overall you did a great job.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2012
Comment from PoesyPoet
This is a terribly sad but all too familiar story. Young girls are being abused everyday, but the saddest thing of all is that it's by their own fathers. The story was heartfelf and touching and should fair well in the contest. PP
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2012
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This is a terribly sad but all too familiar story. Young girls are being abused everyday, but the saddest thing of all is that it's by their own fathers. The story was heartfelf and touching and should fair well in the contest. PP
Comment Written 28-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2012
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Thank you PP, for reading and reviewing...I appreciate your words...blessings.
Comment from beadyredeyes
Wow, well told story!
This a very attention-grabbing story told in verse. The end-rhymes help to move the story along at a smooth and easy pace while the the details heighten the intensity of the narrative.
Great job.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2012
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Wow, well told story!
This a very attention-grabbing story told in verse. The end-rhymes help to move the story along at a smooth and easy pace while the the details heighten the intensity of the narrative.
Great job.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2012
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Thanks beadyredeyes, for reading and reviewing...I appreciate your words...blessings.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
fiction it might be, but the
sad truth of it is the abuse
does go on and often the innocent
children suffer for the rest
of their lives.
Albeit such a heart-breaking story, you've made an excellent job of telling it in a poem, keeping the
rhythm and rhyme flowing well, and it deserves a six.
Hard to believe (it only being Tues) but my sixes went
like wild-fire and already are used up, and yet there's times I'm often left with one or two. Sorry, but someone is sure to give you one.
Margaret
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2012
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fiction it might be, but the
sad truth of it is the abuse
does go on and often the innocent
children suffer for the rest
of their lives.
Albeit such a heart-breaking story, you've made an excellent job of telling it in a poem, keeping the
rhythm and rhyme flowing well, and it deserves a six.
Hard to believe (it only being Tues) but my sixes went
like wild-fire and already are used up, and yet there's times I'm often left with one or two. Sorry, but someone is sure to give you one.
Margaret
Comment Written 28-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2012
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Thank you so much Margaret, for your wonderful review...your words speak much truth...it does go on all too often...blessings to you.
Comment from artemis53
Incredible read. As a psych nurse I have seen these faces of abuse who harbor secrets too devastating for them to let go. I did not really feel that this was a story of sexual intent. Abuse is about control that is acted out in a sexual way. Very well done with an ending of hope.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2012
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Incredible read. As a psych nurse I have seen these faces of abuse who harbor secrets too devastating for them to let go. I did not really feel that this was a story of sexual intent. Abuse is about control that is acted out in a sexual way. Very well done with an ending of hope.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2012
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Thanks so much for your words arteis53...blessings.