A Peaceful Place
Description of an Outdoor Scene21 total reviews
Comment from missy98writer
Debbi,
your non-fiction story titled A Peaceful Place is extremely well written. Your word structure is very good and as I read vivid imagery filled my head with an exquisite scene. The art work is stunning. In your non-fiction piece you did a great job using the writing devices of alliteration and metaphor. I liked you phases: "cleanses my inner turmoil, washing it away, listening to the call, hearing the rustle of leaves, mesmerized by the waters' flow, created by the splash, the dampness of the earth, with my own authenticity and dreams free the taking." Thanks so much for sharing your non-fiction nature story that gives the reader pause for reflection.I'd recommend your beautifully crafted non-fiction piece to other reviewers. Thanks for sharing and please have a blessed day.
Melissa.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2012
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Debbi,
your non-fiction story titled A Peaceful Place is extremely well written. Your word structure is very good and as I read vivid imagery filled my head with an exquisite scene. The art work is stunning. In your non-fiction piece you did a great job using the writing devices of alliteration and metaphor. I liked you phases: "cleanses my inner turmoil, washing it away, listening to the call, hearing the rustle of leaves, mesmerized by the waters' flow, created by the splash, the dampness of the earth, with my own authenticity and dreams free the taking." Thanks so much for sharing your non-fiction nature story that gives the reader pause for reflection.I'd recommend your beautifully crafted non-fiction piece to other reviewers. Thanks for sharing and please have a blessed day.
Melissa.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2012
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Thank you melissa. I really miss being able to get out and be at one with nature. I bet you do too. Have a wonderful evening!!! Debbie
Comment from axelbeariter
I am one with nature and with my own authenticity. I am at peace with the world. Possibilities here are endless, and dreams free for the taking./I've often wondered how productive I might be if I were to toil in the peaceful mode you portray. Well composed.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2012
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I am one with nature and with my own authenticity. I am at peace with the world. Possibilities here are endless, and dreams free for the taking./I've often wondered how productive I might be if I were to toil in the peaceful mode you portray. Well composed.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2012
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Thank you so much!!! Debbie
Comment from mountainwriter49
Good Evening, Debbie,
I thoroughly enjoyed taking this walk with you.
I, too, love nature and your well written story is
just splendid. It has excellent sensory perception,
visuals and and just a great feel.
May I offer a few thoughts that you might want to consider?
By the running[flowing] water
call of the wild [delete wild] birds (by definition, aren't birds in nature "wild"?
to sit on, I sit [delete sit] mesmerized (sit is understood since you mentioned it three words prior}
rocks as[when I was] a child.
This is quite lovely and a wonderful read this evening.
Ray
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2012
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Good Evening, Debbie,
I thoroughly enjoyed taking this walk with you.
I, too, love nature and your well written story is
just splendid. It has excellent sensory perception,
visuals and and just a great feel.
May I offer a few thoughts that you might want to consider?
By the running[flowing] water
call of the wild [delete wild] birds (by definition, aren't birds in nature "wild"?
to sit on, I sit [delete sit] mesmerized (sit is understood since you mentioned it three words prior}
rocks as[when I was] a child.
This is quite lovely and a wonderful read this evening.
Ray
Comment Written 18-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2012
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I like your suggestions and did use them. Thank you so much for your kind and thoughtful review. have a good evening!!! Debbie
Comment from FlamingSpade
Hey Debbie, possibilities are endless and dreams are free. In your serere moment, did you remember to pack and take your possibilities and dreams with you when you left? Are you partial to flowers? Always so beautiful. Very positive piece. Peace. Ginger
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2012
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Hey Debbie, possibilities are endless and dreams are free. In your serere moment, did you remember to pack and take your possibilities and dreams with you when you left? Are you partial to flowers? Always so beautiful. Very positive piece. Peace. Ginger
Comment Written 18-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2012
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I sure did remember them. Thank you so much for your kind and thoughtful review!!! Love flowers, especially wild ones!!! Debbie
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Texas..Ladybird Johnson. Fantastic gardens. After visiting, I feel it's my duty to throw wildflower seeds around to see if I can spread the beauty. Sadly. Only Temporarily.
Comment from rightforyou
Great job on describing this, I liked this wonderful piece...Ron
I feel relaxed and content to walk alongside the stream, listening to the call of the wild birds and hearing the rustle of leaves as a doe with her fawn passes by.Then a loud BANG, BANG, BAN,as my stupid brother dressed in full camo gear, shot his gun killing both the doe and her baby fawns...Real smart you dumb arse now look at the mess you made..Its not even hunting season, I am tellen Mom...Ron
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2012
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Great job on describing this, I liked this wonderful piece...Ron
I feel relaxed and content to walk alongside the stream, listening to the call of the wild birds and hearing the rustle of leaves as a doe with her fawn passes by.Then a loud BANG, BANG, BAN,as my stupid brother dressed in full camo gear, shot his gun killing both the doe and her baby fawns...Real smart you dumb arse now look at the mess you made..Its not even hunting season, I am tellen Mom...Ron
Comment Written 18-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2012
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I love your entertaining review!!! Thanks so much!!! Debbie
Comment from Realist101
I am sitting here, now...wishing I were home. Home where I could do this very thing...or at least some of the time...if I could be unwatched by the ones who were always tormenting me. You have captured a moment in time beautifully here Debbie. I love this. Gorgeous...hugs!! :)) Susan
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2012
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I am sitting here, now...wishing I were home. Home where I could do this very thing...or at least some of the time...if I could be unwatched by the ones who were always tormenting me. You have captured a moment in time beautifully here Debbie. I love this. Gorgeous...hugs!! :)) Susan
Comment Written 18-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2012
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Thanks so much, Susan. I so much miss being able to get out and be with nature. Thank you for the 6 stars!!! Debbie
Comment from Kingsland
You're at peace with the world. May I ask... What does the world think about that? You are also authentic within your own nature. I sincerely hope so. This was just a delightful short article to have read and written this response for... John
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2012
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You're at peace with the world. May I ask... What does the world think about that? You are also authentic within your own nature. I sincerely hope so. This was just a delightful short article to have read and written this response for... John
Comment Written 18-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2012
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I hope the world enjoys it as much as I do. Thank you for your kind and thoughtful review!!! Debbie
Comment from Tara1027
You paint such a vivid picture, it takes me back to my childhood memories as well. I really enjoyed you taking me on this peaceful journey.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2012
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You paint such a vivid picture, it takes me back to my childhood memories as well. I really enjoyed you taking me on this peaceful journey.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2012
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Thank you so much. I am so glad you enjoyed it!!! Debbie
Comment from Melspoems
This is very nice piece, describing the experience of being at one with nature as you sit or walk by a stream.
I also love doing this, reading your poem I am tempted to drive an hour to a beautiful spot I recently found and experience this again.
I think I will settle for reading your writing full of great imagery.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2012
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This is very nice piece, describing the experience of being at one with nature as you sit or walk by a stream.
I also love doing this, reading your poem I am tempted to drive an hour to a beautiful spot I recently found and experience this again.
I think I will settle for reading your writing full of great imagery.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2012
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If you go, sit there a few extra minutes for me. I so much miss being able to get out among nature's beauty!!! Debbie
Comment from Janie King
The picture is awesome..beautiful..the piece is very pleasant to read..I've never really been where I can easily get to such a site...but it has to be awesome feeling. God bless.
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reply by the author on 19-Jan-2012
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The picture is awesome..beautiful..the piece is very pleasant to read..I've never really been where I can easily get to such a site...but it has to be awesome feeling. God bless.
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Comment Written 18-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2012
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It is very beautiful and relaxing. Glad you enjoyed this piece!!! Debbie