George
a prince of a horse111 total reviews
Comment from J.Byers
This is such a moving poem, I was in tears by the end of it and I don't even like horses, I find them a bit too scary. But you describe George and his horse buddy Patches so wonderfully, they seemed to me to be more people than horses, and the comparison you made when Patches went to stand over his friend's grave, about soldiers guarding the tombs of their comrades, conjured up powerful images. Excellent work.
Blessings,
~ J.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2012
This is such a moving poem, I was in tears by the end of it and I don't even like horses, I find them a bit too scary. But you describe George and his horse buddy Patches so wonderfully, they seemed to me to be more people than horses, and the comparison you made when Patches went to stand over his friend's grave, about soldiers guarding the tombs of their comrades, conjured up powerful images. Excellent work.
Blessings,
~ J.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2012
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Hello, J. Thank you very much for your outstanding review. I'm really honored by your sharing of your personal perspective and for your extremely generous rating for George's story. Blessings, Bev
Comment from cathmine
Writingfundimension, this was a touching story. For those of us who have lived around these grand animals and shared the grief when euthanasia was necessary, it brings back memories. And their barnmates know.
Good job.
Cathmine
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2012
Writingfundimension, this was a touching story. For those of us who have lived around these grand animals and shared the grief when euthanasia was necessary, it brings back memories. And their barnmates know.
Good job.
Cathmine
Comment Written 08-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2012
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Thank you so much for your personal sharing in this review, Cathmine. I really appreciate you taking time to read George's story and along this generous review. Bev
Comment from Southern Writer
You made me cry. I had horses until I left home, so this really touched me. I know your friend must have loved this essay honoring her pal. Excellent
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2012
You made me cry. I had horses until I left home, so this really touched me. I know your friend must have loved this essay honoring her pal. Excellent
Comment Written 08-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2012
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Thank you so very much, Southern Writer. Catherine has moved away and I no longer see her. But, yes, I think she would be very pleased. Your generosity is so appreciated! Warm regards, Bev
Comment from bhogg
Hi Bev - a beautiful story and written in so few words. To me, the sign of a good writer is when you get beyond the written word and start "seeing" the story. You succeeded in this one. Regards, Bill
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2012
Hi Bev - a beautiful story and written in so few words. To me, the sign of a good writer is when you get beyond the written word and start "seeing" the story. You succeeded in this one. Regards, Bill
Comment Written 08-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2012
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Thank you, Bill. I so very much appreciate your generous and supportive review. Warm regards, Bev
Comment from IndianaIrish
A well-written and moving story, Bev. Your descriptions are so good and I feel like I'm in the pasture at George's celebration party. You had me crying with Patches grieving for his friend. Great story, Bev!
Karyn :>)
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2012
A well-written and moving story, Bev. Your descriptions are so good and I feel like I'm in the pasture at George's celebration party. You had me crying with Patches grieving for his friend. Great story, Bev!
Karyn :>)
Comment Written 08-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2012
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Hi, Karyn. Thank you from the bottom of my heart for your generous and supportive review. I'm very lucky to have such good friend that keep me stiriving to improve with each post! Love ya, Bev
Comment from ButterflyHana
I love the opening line very much, it gives us the readers a feeling that touches the heart.
"The wake took place on a hill overlooking the clear, aquamarine waters of Lake Michigan." - This line paints a wonderful image to the scene, which also gives us a chill about the purpose of it, euthanizing the horse, George, though it brings peace to his sole as he has undergone a lot of suffering. He deserves to enjoy the beauty of his surrounding with the people who cares for him at least before he rests in peace for eternity.
I love horses very much that I intended to read this story until the end, and I felt so sad for George's life to have such an ending, though it's understood.
I loved the ending too, especially the part where Patches lingers around George's grave. It's touching... over all it was a well written story.
Perhaps this could be a true story, if then I pray that George will be remembered whenever someone reads this. Anyway thanks for sharing this with us on Fanstory.com
Tc, have a nice day...
BHana.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2012
I love the opening line very much, it gives us the readers a feeling that touches the heart.
"The wake took place on a hill overlooking the clear, aquamarine waters of Lake Michigan." - This line paints a wonderful image to the scene, which also gives us a chill about the purpose of it, euthanizing the horse, George, though it brings peace to his sole as he has undergone a lot of suffering. He deserves to enjoy the beauty of his surrounding with the people who cares for him at least before he rests in peace for eternity.
I love horses very much that I intended to read this story until the end, and I felt so sad for George's life to have such an ending, though it's understood.
I loved the ending too, especially the part where Patches lingers around George's grave. It's touching... over all it was a well written story.
Perhaps this could be a true story, if then I pray that George will be remembered whenever someone reads this. Anyway thanks for sharing this with us on Fanstory.com
Tc, have a nice day...
BHana.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2012
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Hi, ButterflyHana. I really appreciate your thorough and generous review. The story of George is a true story that I have not not embellished. It was an amazing experience and I'm glad that it touched your spirit, too. Blessings, Bev
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You're very welcomed. Stories that come from experience is exceptional. ")
BHana.
Comment from Terra Dane
Quite beautifully written and emotionally touching. Perhaps it is the fact I run an animal rescue, including equines, that your story brought tears to my eyes that combined with the glorious spirit of horses.
Your descriptions carry your readers to this place without bogging us down in details and you achieve quite well the telling of a non-fiction tale. Not everyone can do that well, they get caught up in "telling" and lose story.
Thank you.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2012
Quite beautifully written and emotionally touching. Perhaps it is the fact I run an animal rescue, including equines, that your story brought tears to my eyes that combined with the glorious spirit of horses.
Your descriptions carry your readers to this place without bogging us down in details and you achieve quite well the telling of a non-fiction tale. Not everyone can do that well, they get caught up in "telling" and lose story.
Thank you.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2012
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I'm very honored by your generous and supportive review, SMT. I especially appreciate it coming from your personal perspective. God bless you for the wonderful work you do! Kind regards, Bev
Comment from irishauthorme
Hello, and thank you for this poignant, touching story about George. I know you have already garnered many fine reviews for this short story, but I wanted to add my comments, after I finished reading. Your opening line was a terrific hook, how could I have stopped there?
To be honest, I just received a 'ranking' notice from FS for short story authors and I was trying to find out where I am now(somewhere still way down there). When I saw your pen name at the top of the list, I thought I would read something of yours to see if I could pick up some ways to improve my own writing, and I did. You broke your story into nine paragraphs, all about the same size, something I have not done. Your story was fast paced, but still had a very smooth flow.
And, it is just a great story!
Thanks again, irish
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2012
Hello, and thank you for this poignant, touching story about George. I know you have already garnered many fine reviews for this short story, but I wanted to add my comments, after I finished reading. Your opening line was a terrific hook, how could I have stopped there?
To be honest, I just received a 'ranking' notice from FS for short story authors and I was trying to find out where I am now(somewhere still way down there). When I saw your pen name at the top of the list, I thought I would read something of yours to see if I could pick up some ways to improve my own writing, and I did. You broke your story into nine paragraphs, all about the same size, something I have not done. Your story was fast paced, but still had a very smooth flow.
And, it is just a great story!
Thanks again, irish
Comment Written 08-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2012
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Hello, Irish. What a beautiful review here. And I am so honored by what you've said regarding my writing. I have a long way to go myself, and I'm happy, for now, to be in the top ten. But, it's a long year and I know that there are so many, many fine writers who will be posting great pieces all year long. You now, if I were to say anything as advice it would be to post a lot and offer good rewards for folks to view your writing. I didn't discover the banner ad supreme until late last year and I've been on the site for almost two years! I've found that once a piece gets a good momentum, there'll be those who review just out of curiosity. Anyway, good luck to us both in the year of writing and I'll be sure to stop by and check out your work. Blessings, my friend. Bev
Comment from Betty517
What a very sad but sweet story. I did enjoy the part where Patches was standing over his grave. So sweet to throw him a party. Great read.
Betty
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2012
What a very sad but sweet story. I did enjoy the part where Patches was standing over his grave. So sweet to throw him a party. Great read.
Betty
Comment Written 08-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2012
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Hi, Betty. Thank you for your great review. I really appreciate the time you took to stop by and read. Bev
Comment from wordsfromsue
This is one of the most beautiful stories I've ever read. It brought near tears at the same time as it brought admiration for the way your friend and George handled his passing. Truly a lovely piece of writing.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2012
This is one of the most beautiful stories I've ever read. It brought near tears at the same time as it brought admiration for the way your friend and George handled his passing. Truly a lovely piece of writing.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2012
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Thank you so much for this beautiful review. I'm really honored by your words of support for George's story. Warm regards, Bev