The Gift
A foal is born41 total reviews
Comment from forestport12
Another powerful and emotional story Susan. You know how to grab the reader. What consuming word choices and phrases: like warm prison, sanctuary etc. Stan
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2012
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Another powerful and emotional story Susan. You know how to grab the reader. What consuming word choices and phrases: like warm prison, sanctuary etc. Stan
Comment Written 02-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2012
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Hi Stan! Thank you so much! It's a real honor to have you approve of any of my efforts, and it is always fun to hear your thoughts! Susan
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, susan, a great job writing this story about the moon that gave the colt the incentive to stand on its feet and struggle to survive, great imagery
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2012
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this is very well written, susan, a great job writing this story about the moon that gave the colt the incentive to stand on its feet and struggle to survive, great imagery
Comment Written 02-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2012
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HI Sweet! Thank you very much! It's great to hear from you on this one too! Hug, Susan
Comment from Paradox Tremors
The was a good story my friend. At first I was scare the filly might have been still-born; thankfully not. As far as the cat itself, I hope he got to eat without disturbing mother or the new baby. Well written.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2012
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The was a good story my friend. At first I was scare the filly might have been still-born; thankfully not. As far as the cat itself, I hope he got to eat without disturbing mother or the new baby. Well written.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2012
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Hi there PT.! Thank you very very much! I'm always so happy when you enjoy! ")) Thank you again! Suse
Comment from Dave M
Susan,
Happy New Year!
This is an excellent short story about new life and how uncertain can be its beginnings. I enjoyed this post and couldn't find anything to criticize.
Dave
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2012
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Susan,
Happy New Year!
This is an excellent short story about new life and how uncertain can be its beginnings. I enjoyed this post and couldn't find anything to criticize.
Dave
Comment Written 02-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2012
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Wow, Dave! I send you a thousand thank you's! AND Happy 2012 to you and your family too! Thanks for this encouraging rating!! I love it! Susan
Comment from Rama Rao
A good piece about horses your pet subject. Although it made good reading, I wished you had added more to the story proper. Check the use of ellipses... It is better to finish the sentence with a period and start the next sentence with a capital letter. For example, sustenance. And
sac- I think it should be sack.
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2012
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A good piece about horses your pet subject. Although it made good reading, I wished you had added more to the story proper. Check the use of ellipses... It is better to finish the sentence with a period and start the next sentence with a capital letter. For example, sustenance. And
sac- I think it should be sack.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2012
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Hi Rama! Thank you! For reading and for the kind help too! I will look at them, I probably overdid it as usual...I am going to write a sort of part two to this, the filly is a good little character? Thank you so much! OH, sac is the medical spelling for this. So, I am told by our vet anyway! Lol...thank you so much! hug, Susan
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
Beautiful story Susan. I love the role of the moon in it. I decided to try photobucket. Can you tell me (In very simple terms how to go from photobucket to Fanstory. Do I need to paste into a picture program such as windows first. I just can't figure it out,LOL!!! Debbie Happy New Year!!!
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2012
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Beautiful story Susan. I love the role of the moon in it. I decided to try photobucket. Can you tell me (In very simple terms how to go from photobucket to Fanstory. Do I need to paste into a picture program such as windows first. I just can't figure it out,LOL!!! Debbie Happy New Year!!!
Comment Written 01-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2012
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HI Deb! Thank you so much! Let me know how you're doing with uploading? I had to play around to learn it...and thanks a million for this truly great review!! hug! Susan
Comment from Ted T
Hi Susan :)
Wonderful piece, written so well, and I assume from experience.
You had me wondering for a moment if there would be a dark ending. Not so, you came through with a ray of moon-shine.
One little Nit:
black [at] pitch, -- A typo.
Good job.
Ted
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2012
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Hi Susan :)
Wonderful piece, written so well, and I assume from experience.
You had me wondering for a moment if there would be a dark ending. Not so, you came through with a ray of moon-shine.
One little Nit:
black [at] pitch, -- A typo.
Good job.
Ted
Comment Written 01-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2012
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Hi Ted! Happy New Year! Thank you, and I was fixing this as you typed I bet! HA! Such a wonderful helper you are...and I just could not kill this little foal...not this time, lol~ Thank you again my friend. SO good to hear from you. Luv, Susan
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You're most welcome :)
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hug! S.
Comment from Trybuck
I've had the pleasure of witnessing a few births here on the farm and it never gets dull watching new life come forth.
black at pitch -- black as pitch
Very well done, Buck
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2012
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I've had the pleasure of witnessing a few births here on the farm and it never gets dull watching new life come forth.
black at pitch -- black as pitch
Very well done, Buck
Comment Written 01-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2012
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Hi Buck! I know, kittens, foals, even little piglets, are so sweet. It always makes me hopeful, for all things. But, as a kid I hated the sheep. They were just too much. After they grew up, the stupid kicked in and I had to take them in 4-H. OH MY LORD!!!! That's another story! Lol~ Thank you for a helpful and kind review my friend! Hug! Susan
Comment from N.K. Wagner
And so another life enters the world. You've given us a beautiful image, Suse, of the moonilght on the foal, and her delayed reaction to birth. I wonder if she'll be a dreamer. :) Nancy
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2012
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And so another life enters the world. You've given us a beautiful image, Suse, of the moonilght on the foal, and her delayed reaction to birth. I wonder if she'll be a dreamer. :) Nancy
Comment Written 01-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2012
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YES! I was thinking about a part two to this? With the foal growing up...good thought and thanks for this great review too! SO glad you enjoyed this Nancy! I have been so weak I haven't been able to go out and even see my horses. They won't know me soon. Oh well. I can't help it. Thanks again my friend! HUGS! Susan
Comment from sasil
I might suggest breaking up the 1st paragraph into two, but otherwise, I see no other nits to pick with this short tale. Heartwarming message of hope in the New Year underscored by the grittiness of reality (the cat awaiting its meal, the apathy of the other horses etc). Nicely done, Suze. May you be blessed with improved health and lots of good writing this year.
Lisa
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2012
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I might suggest breaking up the 1st paragraph into two, but otherwise, I see no other nits to pick with this short tale. Heartwarming message of hope in the New Year underscored by the grittiness of reality (the cat awaiting its meal, the apathy of the other horses etc). Nicely done, Suze. May you be blessed with improved health and lots of good writing this year.
Lisa
Comment Written 01-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2012
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HI Lisa! Thank you...I will check this as soon as I can. I hope I will get time...i have surgery in a few days...so who knows. I am always so appreciative when you take time for me...xoxo! Susan
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Hope you have a quick recovery, friend. Take care!