The Glass Cat Eye
Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "Eye of the Witch"Talking to the dead has its consequences
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Comment from Kpj731
really well written! it's very LOTR-esq. i love the whole world you seemd to have created. I will be going back to read more. nicely done!
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2011
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really well written! it's very LOTR-esq. i love the whole world you seemd to have created. I will be going back to read more. nicely done!
Comment Written 06-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2011
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Thank you very much for you comment.
Comment from Dannylink2007
Hmmm...this was very interesting to read. Your descriptions and action scenes, (Well, the vast majority of it seemed to be an action scene) could not help but feel a little bit unoriginal, (what with all the portals, and the Talismans, etc) but I suppose that is an unfair thing to say...I suppose a fantasy without these things is like a science fiction without spaceships! All in all, your writing was quite good, and I enjoyed it.
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Hmmm...this was very interesting to read. Your descriptions and action scenes, (Well, the vast majority of it seemed to be an action scene) could not help but feel a little bit unoriginal, (what with all the portals, and the Talismans, etc) but I suppose that is an unfair thing to say...I suppose a fantasy without these things is like a science fiction without spaceships! All in all, your writing was quite good, and I enjoyed it.
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Comment Written 06-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2011
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Thank you.
Comment from adewpearl
a nine foot, dark-skinned man with two fanged cobras springing from his shoulders... - what great descriptive detail - I'd love to see that on the big screen with all the special effects they're capable of achieving today
Love your sensory appeal to non-visual senses too in passages like the one about the darting forked tongue and the hissing sounding like hot boiling steam
This is very dramatic, action-packed and exciting :-) Brooke
You describe and explain the demon effectively
and the way this world works
I can so easily visualize these creatures as if they are in front of me on the big screen
Good use of high-impact verbs to add drama - shot/blasted/bolted/penetrate...
Excellent use of dialogue
most of my friend's parents - friends' - for plural possessive
Brooke
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a nine foot, dark-skinned man with two fanged cobras springing from his shoulders... - what great descriptive detail - I'd love to see that on the big screen with all the special effects they're capable of achieving today
Love your sensory appeal to non-visual senses too in passages like the one about the darting forked tongue and the hissing sounding like hot boiling steam
This is very dramatic, action-packed and exciting :-) Brooke
You describe and explain the demon effectively
and the way this world works
I can so easily visualize these creatures as if they are in front of me on the big screen
Good use of high-impact verbs to add drama - shot/blasted/bolted/penetrate...
Excellent use of dialogue
most of my friend's parents - friends' - for plural possessive
Brooke
Comment Written 06-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2011
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Thank you Brook. I think it will be a while before I do another novelle. It was harder than I thought. lol I appreciate your support.
Comment from c_lucas
An exciting, well wrtten ending to a good story. This has a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read. There is very good imagery and descriptive scheme.
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An exciting, well wrtten ending to a good story. This has a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read. There is very good imagery and descriptive scheme.
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Comment Written 06-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2011
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Thank you lucas.
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You're welcome, Amahra. Charlie